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Altered Reality

It’s Wednesday, and we all know what that means, don’t we? That’s right, Friday Fictioneers, the Friday writing challenge on a Wednesday! The photo we will be writing our 100-ish word stories about this week has been contributed by Melanie Greenwood and our host as always is Rochelle over at Addicted to Purple.

To read all the other stories for this week, click on the little blue frog below.

The window in this week’s photo looks tailor-made for someone to go flying through, don’t you think? πŸ™‚


Copyright Melanie Greenwood

As head tester for ImmersiveTech Games, Jeff was hugely impressed by their latest virtual reality prototype. β€œMoving” into the simulated hotel room, he could sense the fear of his victims,Β feel their blood splatter his face as he pulled the trigger. He yelled with joy at the experience as a grenade exploded, blowing his avatar through the window onto the balcony.


His brain registered the simulated impact and shut down, believing he had died. Moments later, his body followed.

As his corpse was removed, a researcher made notes on his tablet.

Too realistic. Reduce bio-feedback.

Bribe coroner. Again.

Hire new tester.

  1. October 29, 2014 at 8:24 pm

    Ali, Yes, I’d say that was a bit too realistic. It could be that company will save on retirement benefits though. Well written. πŸ™‚ — Susan


    • October 29, 2014 at 8:50 pm

      Thanks! True, a fair few employees won’t be collecting their pensions. I don’t know how much they’re spending in bribes to keep the coroner/ME in their pocket though.


  2. NotAPunkRocker
    October 29, 2014 at 8:32 pm

    Now, there’s a situation to really consider when choosing a gaming system or other new technology. Hmmm.


    • October 29, 2014 at 8:51 pm

      It’s okay, it’s still in the prototype stage! Don’t enter any gaming trials or hands-on focus groups though πŸ™‚ Let the professionals take the hits!


      • NotAPunkRocker
        October 29, 2014 at 8:56 pm

        But, free games! Cool technology! Paid to play!


        (I am going with the PS4 it turns out, just waiting for Black Friday sales now…)


        • October 29, 2014 at 9:04 pm

          No NAPR, think of the danger 😦

          Yay on the PS4, we can be PS4 buddies πŸ™‚


  3. October 29, 2014 at 9:09 pm

    I guess sometimes a job offer sounds too good to be true. And this was clearly one. Good one!!


    • October 30, 2014 at 2:21 pm

      It looked great on paper πŸ™‚ Thanks!


  4. October 29, 2014 at 9:12 pm

    I don’t think I’d play that game. πŸ™‚


    • October 30, 2014 at 2:22 pm

      I’m sure it was a lot of fun until he “blew up” πŸ™‚


  5. October 29, 2014 at 9:43 pm

    How can I laugh at such a story of violent death?
    And yet, I did. πŸ™‚


    • October 30, 2014 at 2:22 pm

      It was intended to be black humour. I had a bit of a giggle too!


  6. October 30, 2014 at 2:58 am

    This is brilliant! And so much for that video game death just being a temporary inconvenience towards achieving the goal…


    • October 30, 2014 at 2:24 pm

      It’s sort of permanent for poor Jeff. I can actually see this happening in the near-ish future…


  7. October 30, 2014 at 7:16 am

    Well done, creative, loved the twist and irony of it all! Amazing!!!
    My fav so far – the snail brigade has officially taken 2nd place! πŸ™‚
    ~ Andrea ❀


    • October 30, 2014 at 2:25 pm

      I’m glad you enjoyed it! Maybe the snail brigade will have to fight back in a future story πŸ™‚


  8. October 30, 2014 at 8:06 am

    I like a guy who really throws himself into his work. πŸ™‚ This is a really good idea. Well done.


    • October 30, 2014 at 2:26 pm

      He certainly gave all for the cause. Glad you liked it!


  9. October 30, 2014 at 8:45 am

    Hah! I loved that ending. Great story.


    • October 30, 2014 at 2:27 pm

      I’m glad you enjoyed it! Sounds like the researcher has seen all this before.


  10. Lyn
    October 30, 2014 at 8:55 am

    Definitely not volunteering as a beta tester for this one πŸ˜€


  11. October 30, 2014 at 12:13 pm

    Just right for Halloween. Errie but very good.


    • October 30, 2014 at 2:28 pm

      Thanks! It is kind of scary, the thought of having something so realistic happen that it fools you into actually dying.

      Liked by 1 person

  12. October 30, 2014 at 12:41 pm

    great job again πŸ™‚


    • October 30, 2014 at 2:28 pm

      Thanks, glad you liked it πŸ™‚


  13. October 30, 2014 at 2:23 pm

    Yikes! This is really well done. I could almost feel all that, too.


    • October 30, 2014 at 2:29 pm

      I’m glad you wrote “almost” considering what happened to Jeff πŸ™‚


  14. October 31, 2014 at 12:57 am

    It’s not a bug….It’s a feature.



    • October 31, 2014 at 8:51 am

      Could well be! After all, the possibility of death adds a certain extra something πŸ™‚
      I’m sure that’s the company line, anyway.

      Liked by 1 person

  15. October 31, 2014 at 7:35 am

    I bet that happens! Who killed the Kennedy’s?


    • October 31, 2014 at 8:53 am

      It must be quite time-consuming to keep having to cover up all TotalImmersion’s high-profile mishaps.


  16. October 31, 2014 at 10:57 am

    Brilliant. I loved this one. I just wish they made less violent games–like ‘hide the monkey’ or something. Then I might sign up to be a tester too.


    • October 31, 2014 at 11:28 am

      “Hide the monkey” sounds much safer πŸ™‚
      Glad you liked it!


  17. October 31, 2014 at 8:02 pm

    Too realistic! Ha, I had to laugh at that. I guess one thing to consider as a tester is the mortality rates. Very inventive, Alistair!


    • October 31, 2014 at 8:06 pm

      I’m guessing they didn’t mention possible death in the job ad! I’m glad you enjoyed it.


  18. November 1, 2014 at 8:53 pm

    Dear Ali,

    From beginning to end, you have a virtual winner. Very clever.




    • November 2, 2014 at 7:18 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      I’m glad you liked it! I wanted to add a bit of a twist to the old “man goes flying through window” thing.


  19. November 1, 2014 at 8:58 pm

    Ali – Shalom – you did it again – a great spirit to win!


    • November 2, 2014 at 7:19 am

      Thanks, Mihrank! Glad you enjoyed it.


  20. November 1, 2014 at 11:21 pm

    Amazing. Love the pace of this – how it moves along like a rocket, then shudders to a close. I also like the idea of his body following his consciousness into death – what an intriguing thought. Most enjoyable.


    • November 2, 2014 at 7:23 am

      I like to change pace, and add in little twists! I’m glad you liked it, it’s amazing what the brain can convince the body of.


  21. November 3, 2014 at 7:09 am

    Dear draliman, I bet their Workman’s Comp fees are out of this world! Very inventive and entertaining – really, really good! Nan πŸ™‚


    • November 3, 2014 at 11:59 am

      Dear Nan, I have an awful suspicion they brush it under the carpet. “Unfortunate heart attack, never saw it coming” sort of thing!
      Glad you enjoyed it πŸ™‚


  22. Sarah Ann
    November 3, 2014 at 7:53 pm

    Oh that’s great. Love the line ‘Bribe coroner. Again.’ – the again just says it all. Great descriptions and Jeff sounded like a nice guy – poor him. Great little story.


    • November 4, 2014 at 8:04 am

      Methinks this is not the first time this has happened πŸ™‚ Poor Jeff indeed 😦
      I’m glad you enjoyed it!


  23. November 4, 2014 at 4:54 am

    Scary. Loved it.


    • November 4, 2014 at 8:06 am

      When fantasy meets reality with a bang…
      I’m glad you liked it, thanks for reading!


  24. November 4, 2014 at 10:27 pm

    Wow! Just wow! Callous, callous manufacturer/researcher!
    Your narrative style was gripping.


    • November 5, 2014 at 8:28 am

      Thank you, I’m glad you liked it! It’s all about the money for that company, people are expendable.

      Liked by 1 person

  25. November 13, 2014 at 11:02 am

    Is it bad that I laughed out loud when Jeff died?


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