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Mondays Finish the Story – Not Fair

Here is my contribution to Mondays Finish the Story, a prompt challenge which supplies not only a photo but also the first sentence!

I’ve decided not to slaughter everything in sight this week and go for a more thoughtful piece. So let’s see how that works out 🙂

We have 100-150 words not including the first sentence, which I have highlighted in bold in my story. Click on the blue froggy to see this week’s other contributions!

 

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“They say that life is a game of chess…”

“Chess, Grandfather?”

“Yes lad. You see, everybody has a different way of doing things. Take the bishop.”

The boy picked up a piece. “This one, Grandfather?”

“That’s the one, lad. He’s sneaky – diagonal mover. Just like knights, popping in all of a sudden. Then you have your rooks. They’re straight-movers.”

“So, straightforward and sneaky people, Grandfather?”

“That’s it lad. Your pawns, they’re the workforce, but if they apply themselves  – reach the other side of the board – they achieve real power. The king is the key, but while he stays at the back, his queen ranges far and wide destroying everything in her path.”

“Cool!”

“And on top of everything, you have to think several moves ahead, plan everything out.”

“Just like in life!”

“Exactly. Now, lad, let’s play.”

“Okay, Grandfather. Hey! One of my pieces is missing. That’s not fair… oh.”

“Now you’re getting it, lad. Just like life.”

 

  1. NotAPunkRocker
    December 16, 2014 at 6:44 am

    I think it worked out well! Nice job 🙂

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    • December 16, 2014 at 3:18 pm

      Thanks 🙂 Glad you liked it!

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  2. December 16, 2014 at 7:21 am

    Ali, That’s really good. You know your chess. Well written. 🙂 — Susan

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    • December 16, 2014 at 3:27 pm

      Thanks! I used to play quite a bit in my younger days.

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  3. December 16, 2014 at 12:18 pm

    Ain’t that the truth! I never learned how to play chess. 😦

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    • December 16, 2014 at 3:20 pm

      Yup.
      I haven’t actually played chess in years. No-one to play against 😦

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  4. December 16, 2014 at 3:02 pm

    Well done! I liked the way that you explained the pieces and related them to people! And, the missing piece? Touché! Thank you for participating again! I hope that you will join in again next week! Be well! ^..^

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    • December 16, 2014 at 3:21 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked my little chess/life story! I didn’t notice the missing piece at first but when I did everything fell into place.

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      • December 16, 2014 at 4:01 pm

        Funny how one little thing can do it for you, isn’t it? 🙂

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      • December 16, 2014 at 4:31 pm

        Yep, it was the icing on the cake for my story.
        I wonder if someone threw it overboard 🙂

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      • December 16, 2014 at 4:37 pm

        Most likely they took it home as a souvenir! Can you imagine? LOL! 😀

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  5. December 16, 2014 at 3:38 pm

    Great story. Finally no blood and gore with my morning coffee.
    I play chess online, either alone with a computer or get into a room with “live” people. I think they are alive. Possibly some aliens from one of your story’s.

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    • December 16, 2014 at 3:55 pm

      Even I couldn’t get blood and gore out of that photo. Unless someone had taken the missing knight and pummelled someone to death with it…
      Sorry your current chess opponents are a bit “alien” 🙂

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  6. December 16, 2014 at 4:36 pm

    Loved your story and how you used it as an educational tool for the child…just like life.

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    • December 16, 2014 at 4:49 pm

      I’m glad you liked it! It’s grandpa’s job to pass on the wisdom 🙂

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  7. December 16, 2014 at 4:46 pm

    Oh, grandpa just may be the sly one! Nice story!

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    • December 16, 2014 at 4:49 pm

      He’s got a lifetime of wisdom to impart. I’m glad you liked it!

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  8. December 16, 2014 at 4:56 pm

    Ah yes. The pawns, the worker bees make everything possible. I liked the way your story flowed and as always the ending was great.

    DJ

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    • December 16, 2014 at 5:30 pm

      Thanks, DJ. I always get a story idea, then I work out an ending, and only then I start writing.

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  9. December 16, 2014 at 5:52 pm

    Very nice, and no-one died in this one. 🙂

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    • December 16, 2014 at 6:39 pm

      Makes a change 🙂 Glad you liked it!

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  10. December 16, 2014 at 6:55 pm

    You know, I think I could actually here Grandfather’s voice. Great piece!

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    • December 17, 2014 at 9:50 am

      Thanks, I’m glad it came through so clearly!

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  11. December 16, 2014 at 6:55 pm

    HEAR not HERE. Geez.

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  12. December 16, 2014 at 10:23 pm

    Loved it!

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  13. December 17, 2014 at 2:30 am

    I enjoyed how you made the grandfather’s voice so much like the older generation teaching the younger–I could really hear it.

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    • December 17, 2014 at 9:53 am

      I’m glad I successfully managed to get that across in my story. Thanks!

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  14. Lyn
    December 17, 2014 at 10:43 am

    Wonderful story D-man. I love the way the Grandfather taught the young lad about chess and life.

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    • December 17, 2014 at 11:20 am

      That’s the grandfather’s job! And he wants a chess partner too, I think 🙂

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  15. December 17, 2014 at 11:00 am

    It so does pat to be alert doesn’t it. Well done great tale.

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    • December 17, 2014 at 11:21 am

      It does indeed. Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!

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  16. December 17, 2014 at 1:20 pm

    This truly worked. Beautifully crafted.

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  17. December 17, 2014 at 2:57 pm

    Awwwww, surely that missing white steed got shot, drawn and quartered, run over, sent to the glue factory…. something! I want my Dralihorror!!!! Life isn’t FAIR!!!!! 😉

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    • December 17, 2014 at 5:35 pm

      Never fear, ES (I liked the Dralihorror comment you made on my Christmas card, by the way!). I’m about to publish my Friday Fictioneers story, in which dire things happen (though without any gore I’m afraid!).

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