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Here is my contribution for this week’s Friday Fictioneers, a weekly flash challenge hosted by Rochelle where we write a 100-ish word story based on a photo. This week’s photo was contributed by Georgia Koch.

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Copyright Georgia Koch

 

Never one for altruism, Franco’s friends (if it could be said that he had friends) were astonished when he joined “Save Our Barges”. An ex-mobster, charity was never his thing.

He chatted to the great and good, raised funds, worked tirelessly until at last he made it onto the charity’s board… until at last he was granted access to the Betty May.

The charity’s latest restoration project, the Betty May was locked away in dry dock, awaiting much-needed love and a tender touch.

That night the Betty May burnt to charcoal. Some of Franco’s secrets were best left buried.

  1. January 22, 2015 at 11:37 am

    Clever – I liked that ending, the twist worked as I wasn’t sure what Franco’s angle was. Well done.
    KT

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    • January 22, 2015 at 6:44 pm

      Glad you liked it! He surely had an angle, but I wanted to keep it under wraps until the last moment.

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  2. January 22, 2015 at 11:39 am

    I like this. One of my favorites so far. Well done!

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    • January 22, 2015 at 6:45 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂

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  3. January 22, 2015 at 2:38 pm

    Dear Draliman,

    Patience is a virtue few have and even fewer learn. A wonderful object lesson in your fine tale.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    • January 22, 2015 at 6:46 pm

      Dear Doug,

      It must have taken months if not years until he finally gained access to the barge. Patient indeed!

      Ali

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  4. January 22, 2015 at 2:38 pm

    Dear Ali,

    And so it goes without saying that altruism was never Franco’s reason for joining. 😉 Clever story that comes full circle. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • January 22, 2015 at 6:47 pm

      Dear Rochelle,

      Nope, looks like his “friends” were right to be astonished. Glad you liked it!

      Ali

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  5. January 22, 2015 at 3:47 pm

    Charity work always warms my heart! That’s one less barge that’s a blight on the riverside!

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    • January 22, 2015 at 6:47 pm

      Much more room for the power boats now!

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  6. January 22, 2015 at 3:57 pm

    A leopard never changes its spots…shame really, because he sounds like a really good fund raiser!
    Good story 🙂

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    • January 22, 2015 at 6:48 pm

      I think he’s missed his calling. I wonder what he’ll get up to next 😦

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  7. NotAPunkRocker
    January 22, 2015 at 5:53 pm

    I was going to say a tiger never changes its stripes, but I see Aileen has beaten me to the wild feline comparison 😀

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    • January 22, 2015 at 6:49 pm

      You’ve got to be quick with the cat comparisons 🙂

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      • NotAPunkRocker
        January 22, 2015 at 6:54 pm

        Darn my lack of cat-like reflexes!

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  8. January 22, 2015 at 9:04 pm

    Oh my…there goes my fishing 😦 Pawkisses for the Weekend 🙂 ❤

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  9. January 22, 2015 at 10:39 pm

    I really like this story but I have to add a small critique. The use of “until at last” twice in the second paragraph, disturbs the flow, at least for me.
    Other than that, wonderfully imaginative as always!

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    • January 23, 2015 at 9:27 am

      Thanks!
      That repetition was actually deliberate. That was the one bit I edited (twice in fact). The second part started as a new paragraph, then dots into more dots in a new paragraph, then finally it was one sentence with dots. I read it again after reading your comment and it sounded wrong, then I read it the way I wanted it to sound and it sounded okay 🙂 Maybe I should have left it as two paragraphs so it could only go one way. Thanks for the critique, always welcome!

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  10. January 23, 2015 at 12:31 am

    i didn’t expect the ending. gullible me.

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    • January 23, 2015 at 9:28 am

      Yeah, there’s always a twist or something going to happen in the last sentence 🙂

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  11. January 23, 2015 at 1:19 am

    An ex-mobster charity, yeah, something sounds fishy, especially when they’re dealing with boats. Great, imaginative take, Ali! You always have the most original ideas.

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    • January 23, 2015 at 9:29 am

      Very imaginative, these mobsters. Gotta admire Franco’s patience!

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  12. January 23, 2015 at 4:35 am

    Thank you, I always enjoy reading you.

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    • January 23, 2015 at 9:29 am

      Thanks! I’m glad you liked it.

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  13. January 23, 2015 at 11:07 am

    Wow, Ali. I wonder now what Franco’s secrets were. Perhaps where he buried the bodies. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne

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    • January 24, 2015 at 6:40 am

      I reckon it’s probably a little ledger of his dodgy dealings (and also perhaps a body or too!).

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  14. January 23, 2015 at 11:08 am

    You do intrigue so well 😉

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  15. January 23, 2015 at 11:33 am

    I knew Franco couldn’t have changed his spots, but you’ve left me wondering what he had secreted on the Betty May. Great story.

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    • January 24, 2015 at 6:42 am

      After a life of crime it seemed unlikely he’d changed.
      Only Franco knows what was on the boat and now it’s ashes 🙂
      Glad you liked it!

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  16. January 23, 2015 at 11:56 am

    At least he got to do some fund-raising before he quit the charity scene.Franco’s acquaintances would have all been saying ‘I told you so.’ Well told.

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    • January 24, 2015 at 6:42 am

      He finally did some good in his life even if it was for his own ends. Glad you liked it!

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  17. January 23, 2015 at 1:35 pm

    very mysterious.

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  18. January 23, 2015 at 1:49 pm

    Knowing where the bodies — and other things — are buried. A gift, and a curse 🙂

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    • January 24, 2015 at 6:43 am

      At least he raised a lot of money making sure they stayed buried.

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  19. January 23, 2015 at 2:34 pm

    True flash. Each reader wanting to know more. Great job.

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    • January 24, 2015 at 6:44 am

      Thanks, sometimes I like to leave a bit of mystery at the end.

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  20. January 23, 2015 at 3:54 pm

    Some secrets are best left uncovered – had me guessing until the end.

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    • January 24, 2015 at 6:45 am

      I went to great pains to keep you all guessing as long as possible 🙂

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  21. January 23, 2015 at 5:39 pm

    Uh Oh, appears the Betty Mae may be harboring a secret. :-O

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  22. January 23, 2015 at 7:40 pm

    So that’s where Jimmy Hoffa is. I knew it!

    DJ

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    • January 24, 2015 at 6:47 am

      Maybe, but now we’ll never know 🙂

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  23. January 23, 2015 at 9:21 pm

    I guess some thing are better burned than buried.. great take on this..

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    • January 24, 2015 at 6:47 am

      Thanks, yes, whatever it was is gone for good now.

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  24. January 23, 2015 at 11:18 pm

    Great job! The whole time I was reading I was trying to figure out Franco’s angle. I knew he had to had an angle, but I wasn’t expecting the twist at the end. Very enjoyable!

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    • January 24, 2015 at 6:50 am

      It was certainly too much to hope for that he’d had a change of heart. I’m glad you liked my little twist!

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  25. January 23, 2015 at 11:49 pm

    Somehow I knew what was coming but was pleasantly surprised when it did. Bad Franco!

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    • January 24, 2015 at 6:55 am

      The cards were on the table! I’m glad you liked the ending.

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  26. January 24, 2015 at 3:01 am

    A story about a mobster gone philanthropist always leads to great questions!

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    • January 24, 2015 at 6:56 am

      Yes, people will wonder about ulterior motives. And they’d be right!

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  27. January 24, 2015 at 1:31 pm

    Haha love the twist!

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    • January 24, 2015 at 4:18 pm

      Glad you enjoyed the twisty ending 🙂

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  28. January 24, 2015 at 2:43 pm

    Such ceaseless, altruistic hard work from an ex-mobster certainly raises a few eyebrows, but you manage to keep Franco’s motives cleverly hidden right to the end. Excellent.

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    • January 24, 2015 at 4:19 pm

      Glad you liked it! My goal was to raise suspicions but not reveal his true motives until the very end.

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  29. January 24, 2015 at 5:04 pm

    Leopards don’t change their spots, do they? Nice job pulling me along. While suspicious, I had just relaxed when you pulled your punch. 😉

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    • January 25, 2015 at 7:35 am

      I lulled you into a false sense of security, just like Franco did 🙂

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  30. January 24, 2015 at 11:15 pm

    Dear Draliman, Great story – He must have left some evidence on the Betty May. He is not a philanthropist he is an arsonist. Too bad, but I agree with Dawn, a leopard doesn’t change his spots! Good job! Nan

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    • January 25, 2015 at 7:37 am

      I reckon all evidence is gone – he didn’t get this far by being sloppy!
      Glad you liked it 🙂

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  31. January 25, 2015 at 9:58 am

    Whatever it was, the tracks are well and truly covered now Nice one.

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    • January 25, 2015 at 11:13 am

      Yep, I guess now he can quietly disappear. Thanks!

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  32. January 26, 2015 at 8:23 pm

    Draliman,
    Well written. Never trust a member of the mob–at least not with a restoration project.
    All my best,
    Marie Gail

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    • January 26, 2015 at 9:00 pm

      Marie Gail,
      Thanks! You should see those guys when they visit a World Heritage Site – mayhem 🙂
      Ali

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  33. January 28, 2015 at 5:16 am

    “Save Our Barges” 😛 Now that’s funny. I enjoyed this piece…
    Ellespeth

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    • January 28, 2015 at 12:35 pm

      I just noticed the acronym is “SOB”, which fits quite well if you get upset at the prospect of our barges not getting saved!
      Glad you liked it 🙂

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