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A New World

Here is my contribution to this week’s Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle.

To read the other contributions, click on the blue froggy. This week’s photo was contributed by Kent Bonham.

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Copyright Kent Bonham

 

Trak. Surveillance for the paranoid age. Keep Track on Your World with TRAK!

Husbands watching wives. Wives watching husbands. Lovers, friends. Employees can’t take a leak without employers knowing. Employers, in their turn, watched by their staff.

Everyone’s watching everyone else. And Trak gets richer. They have no competition. Trak shut them down. Because Trak was watching them.

But who watches the watchers?  Trak.

Trak watches everyone. The new World Order.

So come on in and buy a package. It’s your turn to watch your loved ones twenty-four seven.

Because you know they’re watching you.

 

  1. June 25, 2015 at 9:38 am

    If you do nothing you’re ashamed of, why would you care who watches?
    Good piece.

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    • June 25, 2015 at 1:43 pm

      That’s what I think too, though it has its limits (I hope).

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  2. June 25, 2015 at 9:55 am

    Very creepy company….a lot of “traking” and no trusting.

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    • June 25, 2015 at 1:44 pm

      Yes. I fear they’ve seen deep into the human psyche and gotten rich off of it.

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  3. June 25, 2015 at 10:08 am

    Unsettling story. Tracking my UPS package will never be the same.

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    • June 25, 2015 at 1:44 pm

      Because while you’re tracking it, they’re tracking you heh heh 🙂

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  4. June 25, 2015 at 10:29 am

    Wow Draliman, I love your take on this weeks prompt. It has however made me nervous lol In some ways this could become our reality. Well done ! 🙂

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    • June 25, 2015 at 1:45 pm

      Thanks! I fear that it could indeed become reality. Surveillance by law enforcement for security it one thing, but I don’t fancy being watched by everyone all the time.

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  5. June 25, 2015 at 10:39 am

    Hi Dr Ali.

    I challenge you to “Post a photo each day for five consecutive days and attach a story to the photo. It can be fiction or non-fiction, a poem or a short paragraph and each day nominate another blogger for the challenge”

    I don’t usually do this sort of thing but I am now.I know you are a busy man but I love the way you write and your slant on life and I just wanted to ask you to consider doing this.  I am currently on day 2 at http://gillmcgrath.com/2015/06/25/the-challenge-day-2/ Holly who challenged me is found at Holly @aheartafire.

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    • June 25, 2015 at 1:47 pm

      Hi Gill,
      Thanks, I might give it a go. I’ll make sure I have the material together first, though, since it’s consecutive days.

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      • June 25, 2015 at 1:55 pm

        Thanks Dr Ali. I am delighted that you might give it a go! Don’t feel pressured though. I know it can be quite time taking simply doing the link up bits, let alone ‘the process’ of producing something !! ❤

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  6. June 25, 2015 at 10:44 am

    Shouldn’t Mr Trak have a ‘c’ ( for see) in the name? As it is he doesn’t pass the spell check!

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    • June 25, 2015 at 1:48 pm

      It’s one of those “clever” brand names. Or he made a mistake on his company’s incorporation papers 🙂

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      • June 25, 2015 at 1:57 pm

        People like that don’t make mistakes, even when they do. He can’t even c he left the c out!

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      • June 25, 2015 at 2:10 pm

        Ha ha 🙂
        Tunnel vision.

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    • June 25, 2015 at 2:58 pm

      Or perhaps the letter R was put in there to cover up it is tak / tack on sale!

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      • June 25, 2015 at 4:13 pm

        Yeah! “Tak” – an updated version of Reggie Perrin’s “Grot” 🙂

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      • June 25, 2015 at 4:37 pm

        Yeah!

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  7. Lata Sunil
    June 25, 2015 at 10:55 am

    Its creepy being watched all the time.. i hate surveillance

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    • June 25, 2015 at 1:49 pm

      I’m okay with it as long as it’s law enforcement, I think that makes me safer. I wouldn’t fancy being watched all the time, though.

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      • Lata Sunil
        June 25, 2015 at 1:58 pm

        Safety is more important for sure.

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      • June 25, 2015 at 2:11 pm

        It’s a fine line between safety and invasion of privacy, one governments are struggling with at the moment.

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  8. June 25, 2015 at 11:01 am

    I have no fear. This is probably a spawn of reality shows and will one day soon lose its popularity. Who wants to sit around and watch neighbors, friends, and relatives who are probably as boring as you are for month after month. Oh the stress of having to behave properly at all times because you know you’re being watched. People will crack and out will go Trax. 😀

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    • June 25, 2015 at 1:50 pm

      I bet most people would get fed up after 10 minutes. I know I would!

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  9. June 25, 2015 at 1:08 pm

    I like your take on this one. Very contemporary.

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  10. June 25, 2015 at 1:41 pm

    Santa Claus is one of their best clients.

    As is Mrs. Claus, I hear….

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    • June 25, 2015 at 1:51 pm

      She only needs them one night a year though, to make sure hubby isn’t making any “unscheduled stops” on the one day she lets him out.

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      • June 25, 2015 at 1:55 pm

        I can see the confrontation now…. “Sit down, Kris! I want to have a little discussion with you about all of those ‘milk and cookies’ you keep stopping for…” (Pops the video tape in the player)

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      • June 25, 2015 at 2:09 pm

        I can see his face turning as red as his suit 🙂

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  11. June 25, 2015 at 2:19 pm

    Great play on words here, Ali. It’s a rather creepy thought that people could be ‘watching’ us 24/7. But who knows what the future holds? A realy good ‘take’ on the prompt. 🙂

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    • June 25, 2015 at 4:12 pm

      It is really creepy. What with CCTV, drones, tracker apps on phones, people hacking web/nanny cams… 😦
      I’m glad you liked it!

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      • June 25, 2015 at 5:28 pm

        Excellent! (I’ve got that word in my head now. I woneder why …?)

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      • June 26, 2015 at 5:54 am

        Thanks, and Party On! 🙂

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  12. June 25, 2015 at 2:19 pm

    Copywriter in training! Nice job! 🙂

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  13. June 25, 2015 at 3:19 pm

    You are sitting at your computer with a drink nearby reading this comment. Do you see what I am doing? 😀 Well done Ali! ^..^

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  14. June 25, 2015 at 4:53 pm

    Although I am doing nothing wrong I sure as hell don’t want anyone seeing me doing it!

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    • June 26, 2015 at 5:52 am

      Ditto! Police surveillance in towns is one thing but I don’t want someone tracking me around the countryside – or at home.

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  15. June 25, 2015 at 7:47 pm

    I laughed when everyone balked at the government getting caught – NSA. Internet businesses have been doing it for years, and probably better than the NSA. Phones, cars – yeah, they’re watching! Thank god I’m boring and ugly!

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    • June 26, 2015 at 5:56 am

      Yeah – I visit one website, then suddenly there’s adverts everywhere for similar items. Spooky 😦
      The NSA’s business is security, but internet businesses are trying to make massive wads of cash by watching what we’re doing and they’re very good at it.

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  16. June 25, 2015 at 8:27 pm

    I am SOOOOOO glad I’m not working anymore. Really. It was bad enough having bosses looking over your shoulder. The idea of them tracking you with software and cameras is just too appalling to contemplate. I retired just in time.

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    • June 26, 2015 at 5:58 am

      Just recently there was a news story about someone being fired from her job after she removed her company’s tracking software from her mobile phone. Yeeks 😦

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  17. June 25, 2015 at 8:43 pm

    This could be the start of a modern dystopy.. but hey.. isn’t TRAK the codename for Google?

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    • June 26, 2015 at 6:00 am

      Shhh, that’s supposed to be secret… they’ll be all over you now!
      In fact, with talk of surveillance and “NSA” and so on in my story and the comments, I wonder if I’ve slipped onto a watch-list somewhere…

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  18. Francesca Smith
    June 25, 2015 at 11:14 pm

    With many surveillance programmes, there is usually a fine line between an invasion and protection.
    Although I can understand why many would complain, however, if they were attacked via the net or harmed in some way which could have been prevented through the use of surveillance, then guaranteed they would then complain how there is not enough preventative measures to have stopped them.
    A very interesting, and as you tell, thought provoking piece.

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    • June 26, 2015 at 6:06 am

      There are a lot of people who complain about things “on principal” without thinking it through, then switch sides when it suddenly affects them personally. I think I read somewhere that the UK has more CCTV than nearly everywhere else, but I’m sure before long police drones will be commonplace as well. They’re already using them. Which I’ll be perfectly happy about if I’m ever mugged in front of one and it instantly swoops down and tasers the mugger heh heh 🙂

      I’m glad you found my story thought-provoking.

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  19. June 26, 2015 at 4:20 am

    Brilliant! let us remember if we plan to be ‘naughty” we must always cover our digital tracks as Santa found out. Nothing has changed since Solomon except for the props. Great story.
    You always amaze me how much you can put into a few words. I judge a good story by if it pops into my head and starts me thinking or smiling at a later time. Your stories are like that.
    Francesca Smith makes an interesting point!

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    • June 26, 2015 at 6:11 am

      It’s amazing how companies track one’s activities around the internet. I looked up TVs for my boss once and suddenly every second website I visited was trying to sell me TVs.
      I’m glad you enjoy my stories! For short stories I tend to stay away from flowery descriptions (which I’m rubbish at anyway!) and either do dialogue for humour or short sharp sentences to “make a point”.
      Francesca does make a good point (see my reply).

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  20. June 26, 2015 at 4:31 am

    it looks like a good candidate for hackers anonymous.

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  21. June 26, 2015 at 9:46 am

    When the Wall fell, many folks in East Germany wanted to see their “secret files.” Often, they were told, “You may not want to know who was reporting on you.”
    The watchers are everywhere. Are cookies a nice snack with milk, or another way Big Brother gets into our minds through our computers.
    Great, creepy and very realistic story.

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    • June 26, 2015 at 3:35 pm

      I can imagine there would be people who would be shocked to find out who was reporting on them. A lot of people did it out of fear of the Stasi, I think. These days it’s just a bit more subtle.
      I’m glad you liked my story!

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      • June 26, 2015 at 4:02 pm

        Yes, fear played a large role in many of the “tattlers.” If you did not tell on your neighbour, the consequences could be deadly!
        Yes, there is a subtlety at work now. I suspect the increased use of drones will make the watching more evident!
        But as you commented, a drone that saved you from a criminal might not be such a bad thing. Unfortunately, the power will go to some people’s heads. 😉

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      • June 26, 2015 at 4:05 pm

        It’s that “fine line” again. Very tricky.

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    • June 26, 2015 at 8:41 pm

      Just replying to Phylor’s comment which I was tracking. Great great (Did I say it was great?) read on East/West Germany set both before and after the fall of the Wall is The Leipzig Affair by first-time novelist Fiona Rintoul. Best book I’ve read in ages.

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      • June 27, 2015 at 4:00 pm

        I’ll take a look!

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  22. June 26, 2015 at 5:05 pm

    I really liked this. Such menacing, persuasive undertones. Well done.

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    • June 27, 2015 at 3:56 pm

      Thanks! I’m glad the menacing nature of the story came through.

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  23. June 26, 2015 at 5:24 pm

    When people are completely deprived of their privacy, they aren’t free any longer, no matter if they have something to hide or not. We’re heading this way, but I think the pendulum always goes the other way eventually. Great story, I like how you include all the elements of total surveillance, especially the involvement of the big company.

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    • June 27, 2015 at 3:58 pm

      I’m glad you liked it! I’m not sure which is currently involved in the most surveillance – governments or corporations.
      I certainly don’t want my every move tracked.

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  24. NotAPunkRocker
    June 26, 2015 at 7:32 pm

    The day I feel that I need my loved one’s every movement or transaction tracked is the day they need to stop being my loved one 🙂

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    • June 27, 2015 at 4:00 pm

      Very true. There’s got to be trust.

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  25. June 26, 2015 at 8:29 pm

    Looks like we are heading that way.

    DJ

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  26. June 26, 2015 at 8:45 pm

    Loved the story. I love my oyster card but not what it tells Big Brother all about my travels.

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    • June 27, 2015 at 4:01 pm

      I’m sure that via Clubcard Tesco knows more about my spending habits than I do.

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  27. June 26, 2015 at 9:48 pm

    Good story, Ali.. I imagine that at some point most of those watchers will grow rather bored and stop paying attention. You know what they say about familiarity . . . But for now, the Trak you’ve invented has a pretty creepy “Big Brother” type quality.

    All my best,
    Marie Gail

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    • June 27, 2015 at 4:04 pm

      I’m sure when they notice people losing interest Trak will find some way to draw them back in.
      Most people’s lives are pretty boring. I know no-one would want to watch me for long!
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  28. June 27, 2015 at 3:44 am

    Oh, this could happen so easily, or perhaps it already is on some level. I wonder if everyone was watching everyone would people change their behavior. Hmm. I want to know more about this one. It’s a great idea!

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    • June 27, 2015 at 4:07 pm

      People would be watching what they’re doing the whole time. It would be a dark world, I think. Though people largely ignore CCTV these days, it’s so normal it’s become almost invisible.

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      • June 27, 2015 at 6:41 pm

        Exactly. Maybe people would start to ignore it. I can see that happening, too.

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      • June 28, 2015 at 6:04 am

        We’re good at ignoring things. Eventually all sorts of stuff achieves “normalcy”. I’m even getting used to seeing the occasional police officer around the place carrying a Taser rather than just handcuffs and CS spray.

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      • June 28, 2015 at 6:12 am

        That’s how it starts…

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  29. June 27, 2015 at 5:35 am

    Dear Draliman, Interesting story and I think I agree with Amy – this could happen. Sometimes don’t you feel someone is looking over your shoulder? Turn around quick! Nan

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    • June 27, 2015 at 4:14 pm

      Dear Nan, I think it’s already happening 😦 Ali

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  30. June 27, 2015 at 8:26 am

    Very funny. The product has a great sales hook…”because you know they’re watching you.”

    Still, I never bought into the outcry over my country’s collection of citizens’ email and phone activity. Of course it’s overzealous and probably illegal, but in my case must be boring as hell. I pity the poor analyst who has to spy on me!

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    • June 27, 2015 at 4:15 pm

      Yeah, that sales hook will grab people for sure. No-one wants to be the only one not in on it.
      Anyone spying on me would soon fall asleep too 🙂

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  31. June 27, 2015 at 9:25 am

    Dear Ali,

    This is a little more realistic than I want to think about. Very well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • June 27, 2015 at 4:18 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! I fear that this is just around the corner.
      Ali

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  32. June 27, 2015 at 9:37 am

    I fear that you’ve just painted a picture of the future. It has become so easy for malicious people to do huge damage that the onlyi response seems to be to watch everybody more closely. I just hope someone keeps watching the watchers. Good story.

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    • June 27, 2015 at 4:19 pm

      I hope so too. In fact I wanted to put the line “But who watches the watchers?” into the story but couldn’t make it fit.

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      • June 28, 2015 at 6:05 pm

        Ha, I just realised I did put it in the story. Embarrassment mode heh heh 🙂

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  33. June 27, 2015 at 11:29 am

    Orwell’s 1984 just gets closer and closer.
    Great theme in this story. Nice work.

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    • June 27, 2015 at 4:21 pm

      It’s been coming closer for a while. Clever chap, that Orwell.
      I’m glad you enjoyed my story. If it is just a story…

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  34. June 27, 2015 at 1:50 pm

    A nightmare world here. A bit like East Germany not that long ago but magnified. (Are you watching me? Is Rochelle? I don’t like your wallpaper.)

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    • June 27, 2015 at 4:23 pm

      Yeeks!
      I had a number of things in mind when I wrote this – old East Germany, Orwell, some more modern takes.

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  35. June 27, 2015 at 1:50 pm

    Creepy! I don’t want to think about how true this could be one day. Is that NewSpeak I hear on the wind? Yikes.

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    • June 27, 2015 at 4:24 pm

      This is a pretty Orwellian tale! Hopefully surveillance won’t get any more prevalent than it currently is.

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  36. June 27, 2015 at 2:24 pm

    THought this was a fiction piece…but oh so true? Nicely done!

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  37. June 27, 2015 at 5:25 pm

    Cctv cameras kind of all over … Creative

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    • June 28, 2015 at 5:56 am

      Cameras, trackers, drones… the full works!

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  38. June 27, 2015 at 6:36 pm

    Now I feel watched too…. Pawkisses 🙂 ❤

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    • June 28, 2015 at 6:01 am

      Eyes are everywhere…
      But we enjoy seeing the photos of your adventures, LB 🙂

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  39. June 28, 2015 at 5:15 pm

    You are probably on to something here. I had best be careful about what I say…Trak is probably watching… 😉

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    • June 28, 2015 at 6:02 pm

      They probably are. At least, someone is…

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  40. June 29, 2015 at 6:09 pm

    There is a reason why they are doing so good. Secrets = worries = sales for them. An enjoyable read Ali. 🙂

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    • June 29, 2015 at 7:35 pm

      There’s nothing like preying on the fears of the populace when you’re looking to make a quick buck 🙂

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  41. July 1, 2015 at 8:13 pm

    Haha, great take on the prompt!! I love this.

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