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Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle at Addicted to Purple. We get up to 100 words to write a story in response to a photo, which this week was contributed by Madison Woods.

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Copyright Madison Woods

Copyright Madison Woods

 

Intergalactic Telegram

TO: Gu’ukk Space Command

FROM: Scout Team Kralka’ak on Planet Earth

BEGIN

observing humans while disguised as flying insects STOP still undetected STOP population releasing toxins into water and atmosphere STOP they kill each other STOP war rife STOP starvation widespread STOP today watched humans eating nutrition-free animal products STOP projecting population extinct planet dead two centuries STOP suggest further observation pointless STOP killing death destruction here STOP why don’t they just STOP

END

Transmit

 

  1. NotAPunkRocker
    August 12, 2015 at 7:58 pm

    Ooh, bright light…zap!

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    • August 13, 2015 at 7:21 am

      That’s one way out if they get stuck here 🙂

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  2. August 12, 2015 at 8:41 pm

    Telegrams! The Gu’u’kk’s aren’t that advanced then. Wiser, though.

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    • August 13, 2015 at 7:21 am

      It’s an intergalactic telegram, mind! Certainly wiser.

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  3. August 12, 2015 at 9:51 pm

    Nutrition free animal products. Very clever. Excellent, Ali.

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    • August 13, 2015 at 7:22 am

      I couldn’t bring myself to write “meat”, I’m not sure how much actual meat is in there 🙂
      Glad you liked it !

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  4. August 12, 2015 at 11:01 pm

    Excellent.

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  5. August 13, 2015 at 1:09 am

    They may just be discovered, alas. Excellent work!

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    • August 13, 2015 at 7:24 am

      Or they’ll inadvertently fly into a bug zapper!
      Glad you liked it.

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  6. August 13, 2015 at 2:12 am

    This is hilarious! Haha! Stop

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  7. August 13, 2015 at 4:12 am

    So well done. Love the way you ended this piece (and everything in between)

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    • August 13, 2015 at 7:26 am

      Thanks! The telegram-style format was perfect for that ending. I’m glad you liked it!

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  8. August 13, 2015 at 4:41 am

    A very good question. For which there is apparently no answer. STOP.

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    • August 13, 2015 at 7:27 am

      Well, we could just STOP 🙂 But that would be too easy.

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  9. August 13, 2015 at 4:51 am

    That was great, Ali. It could happen. 😀 — Suzanne

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    • August 13, 2015 at 7:28 am

      Maybe they are already among us, shaking their alien heads. I’m glad you liked it!

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  10. August 13, 2015 at 5:35 am

    Funny! Can’t …STOP…laughing!

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  11. August 13, 2015 at 6:42 am

    Loads of fun, and very well done.

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    • August 13, 2015 at 7:29 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!

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  12. August 13, 2015 at 8:57 am

    I often thought aliens might regard homo sapiens in much the same way as I regard aphids in my garden.
    Good piece.

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    • August 13, 2015 at 12:34 pm

      Thanks! I’m sure we’re not showing a great picture to any visitors we may have had.

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  13. August 13, 2015 at 9:20 am

    Good one Ali, very interesting but funny STOP

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  14. August 13, 2015 at 9:47 am

    Dear Ali,

    Now I’ll be watching moths and butterflies with a different eye. Hilarious and, at the same time, insightful story. STOP don’t eat those fries.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • August 13, 2015 at 12:36 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      I’m glad you liked it! Who knows which are simple butterflies and which aren’t?
      But… I like fries…
      Ali

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  15. August 13, 2015 at 9:56 am

    That was very creative. You did a terrific job at the challenge. Keep it up!

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  16. August 13, 2015 at 10:35 am

    That was a really great take on the prompt. One of the best I’ve read so far. Well done.

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    • August 13, 2015 at 12:38 pm

      Thanks for your lovely comment! I had the basic idea for the story while at work but decided to take a chance on the format when I got home. I’m glad it worked!

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  17. August 13, 2015 at 11:59 am

    Yup, and that’s why Aliens haven’t visited us yet officially: why bother with a stupid, cruel race that’ll be gone soon enough? Great story, I love the telegram style of the messages.

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    • August 13, 2015 at 12:39 pm

      We’re just not worth the effort, though we could be used as a cautionary tale in alien classrooms. I’m glad you liked the format I used!

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  18. August 13, 2015 at 2:40 pm

    I like fries too, sliced, with little olive oil, salt and pepper, roasted in the oven at 425 – delicious. Oh sorry, your story – kind of saw the prompt this way too. Amazing the damage we do to ourselves and our planet. But I trust Mother nature will win the battle. Well told, loved your formate.

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    • August 13, 2015 at 3:51 pm

      Mmm, fries 🙂 Well, actually, fries are okay I suppose (that’s what we call chips from a McDonalds or similar) but you can’t beat proper chips (that’s UK chips, not US chips which are “crisps”). Ooh, I’m confused now.
      Yes, my story! I’m glad you liked the format, I took a bit of a chance there. I hope you’re right that Nature will “auto-correct”.

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  19. Susan Langer
    August 13, 2015 at 4:10 pm

    Great presentation. I loved your telegram approach.We are killing the planet. 😦

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  20. August 13, 2015 at 6:41 pm

    They should watch out or they’ll end up in the burgers STOP

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    • August 14, 2015 at 7:18 am

      At least then there’d be some actual meat in them 🙂

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  21. August 13, 2015 at 7:43 pm

    Ouch… I think they know a lot better.. I will never kill a moth again.

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    • August 14, 2015 at 7:21 am

      I wonder if their planet went through a similar phase in the distant past? Best leave the moths alone, you never know…

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  22. Lyn
    August 13, 2015 at 11:15 pm

    Nutrition free animal products absolutely! Give me a homemade hamburger any time. Let’s hope Kralka’ak isn’t tempted to have a taste. He’ll become addicted and regret it for the rest of his life. Poor little alien
    ….End Trans.

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    • August 14, 2015 at 7:23 am

      It’s strange how you always want more after the first one (once the vague sick feeling wears off). Home-made burgers rock, though!

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  23. August 14, 2015 at 7:50 am

    LOL Clever and funny? I wonder what will happen? 😀

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    • August 14, 2015 at 8:07 am

      Hopefully not what the observers have predicted 🙂

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      • August 14, 2015 at 10:31 am

        I agree! There is always hope, humans are good at rising to challenges. ❤

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  24. August 14, 2015 at 11:08 am

    Very clever; in a sad sort of way.

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  25. August 14, 2015 at 5:04 pm

    So brilliant!!!!!

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    • August 14, 2015 at 7:30 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!

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  26. August 16, 2015 at 5:02 am

    While I loved your light, deft storytelling style, and enjoyed the format of the “Intergalactic Telegram” which resembles earth-style telegramming to an uncanny degree, I also detected the deep sadness, or at least irritation tinged with sorrow, at the folly of us earthlings.

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    • August 16, 2015 at 5:42 am

      There is a great deal of frustration there for sure. I guess how we might feel if we saw someone self-destructing but couldn’t do anything about it.
      I’m glad you liked my story!

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  27. August 16, 2015 at 5:44 am

    Strangely, I was just revising a poem I’d written about a person who was doing just that, while I looked on, helpless, — and when I did try to help, was rejected.

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    • August 16, 2015 at 5:48 am

      Most people need to hit a real low before they’ll accept help, and many not even then. Good luck with the poem (and if you post it here, I look forward to reading it!).

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      • August 16, 2015 at 5:51 am

        I’d made it private on my blog, because I was nervous that the mother of the girl might read it, but I shouldn’t be a coward, should I? What the hell, I’ll make it public. Look for it under “Original Poetry.”
        And thanks!

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      • August 16, 2015 at 6:20 am

        Very powerful. I didn’t want to leave a comment in a private post, but I thought it was a very realistic portrayal, and I have some experience in this area.
        Just in case you leave it private, I’ve removed the password from your other comment.

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      • August 16, 2015 at 6:24 am

        Thanks for reading, and for removing the password.
        Thank you for your thoughtfulness and your comments!
        Sorry to hear that you have some experience in this area — on the other hand, it’s probably valuable experience!
        Wish I’d had more.

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      • August 16, 2015 at 6:27 am

        You’re welcome!
        All experience is valuable I guess, and it all adds up to make us what we are 🙂

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      • August 16, 2015 at 6:30 am

        Yes, we are large, we contain multitudes.

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      • August 16, 2015 at 5:52 am

        Actually, it’s password-protected for now. The password is:

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  28. August 17, 2015 at 1:42 pm

    I don’t think Scout Team Kralka’ak find us a very impressive bunch, on the whole. I wonder what they’d think if they got to know us better? 🙂

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    • August 17, 2015 at 7:40 pm

      I think if they got to know us better they’d decide to put us out of our misery and launch an invasion 😦

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      • August 18, 2015 at 1:36 pm

        I’m sure they would. We’re quite a sad, short-sighted bunch, aren’t we. 😀

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      • August 18, 2015 at 2:34 pm

        Yup.

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  29. August 18, 2015 at 1:26 pm

    Brilliant story! Well done.

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