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MFTS – The Unexpected House

Here is my story for Barbara Beacham’s Mondays Finish the Story. We get a photo and an opening sentence, which is in bold in my story. To read all the other contributions, click on the blue froggy.

I’m not sure what my story is supposed to be. Horror? Comedy? Comedy horror? It made me laugh :-).

Copyright B. W. Beacham

Copyright B. W. Beacham

 

The A&B Building was made entirely from driftwood. But no-one in the sleepy town of Little Stickle would ever know the hideous truth. The sudden appearance of the building one morning had been quite a surprise!

The residents were cautiously excited.

The construction crew had horrible, blood-spattered flashbacks.

The police were baffled.

 

Also in the news that morning was the strange disappearance of a visiting 100-piece Country and Western ensemble. The townsfolk loved their Country and Western, and almost all had turned up to listen. What a disappointment they were!

The residents had booed.

The construction crew had thrown bottles and gotten terribly, terribly drunk.

The police had shaken their heads.

 

In the morning, there the new house was.

The residents wondered why it smelled faintly of dead animal.

The construction crew wondered what the sticky red substance on their tools was.

The police wondered what had happened to the rubbish Country and Western band “Driftwood”.

 

  1. September 28, 2015 at 10:32 pm

    I think comedy horror is spot on… it is funny, but in a very dark way 🙂

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  2. September 28, 2015 at 10:44 pm

    Don’t trash my country music! Brad Paisley … a great man! If you want, I will send you some song titles to Google! You will love him!

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    • September 29, 2015 at 6:53 am

      I like country music! But the residents weren’t keen on “Driftwood”, I don’t think they were very good.

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  3. September 28, 2015 at 11:29 pm

    The repetition of what the residents, construction crew, and police do — three times, no less — gives this a wonderful fairy tale / storyteller feel. Which goes nicely with the supernatural horror aspect — well done!

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    • September 29, 2015 at 6:55 am

      Thanks! I rewrote those sentences a few times to try to get the same feel to each set.

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  4. September 29, 2015 at 1:13 am

    You are here. That is a pretty tough audience.

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    • September 29, 2015 at 6:57 am

      It is! I wouldn’t want to try my luck with them.
      Thanks for the heads-up last night. Others also noticed there was some sort of issue. All I did was click “publish” 😦

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  5. September 29, 2015 at 1:57 am

    This is a great story. Just creepy enough to make the hairs on the back of your neck stand up.

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    • September 29, 2015 at 6:57 am

      I’m glad you liked it. It is a little bit gruesome 🙂

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  6. Lyn
    September 29, 2015 at 7:06 am

    No self respecting house wants to put up with a rubbish Country and Western band. You’re so good at the macabre 😀

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  7. September 29, 2015 at 9:14 am

    Yikes! A dark story well written.

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  8. September 29, 2015 at 11:22 am

    LOL! I think they might have found the country and western band! And, I think that building’s smell is going to get even more putrid! Great story Ali!

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  9. September 29, 2015 at 11:54 am

    The mood was reminiscent of dear Edgar Allen poe. 🙂

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    • September 29, 2015 at 12:24 pm

      I really need to read something of his one of these days 🙂

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  10. September 29, 2015 at 12:42 pm

    Dark but humorous, Ali. The law wasn’t too swift if they couldn’t guess what that red stuff was. Either that or they were still drunk. What a strange town. Remind me never to go there. Well done. 😀 — Suzanne

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    • September 29, 2015 at 6:28 pm

      If you do visit, remember to take in their interesting architecture! I’m glad you liked it 🙂

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  11. September 29, 2015 at 1:24 pm

    ha ha . It’s really funny if you try not to imagine the red gooey stuff . Nicely done.

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    • September 29, 2015 at 6:29 pm

      I expect the construction crew is trying hard to ignore the red gooey stuff too 🙂
      Thanks!

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  12. Lata Sunil
    September 29, 2015 at 1:29 pm

    What an end! Macabre. But fun. Loved this take on the prompt.

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    • September 29, 2015 at 6:30 pm

      “Macabre” is a good word for this genre. I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  13. September 29, 2015 at 2:20 pm

    A dark comedy highlighting reality. Disturbing and entertaining!

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    • September 29, 2015 at 6:30 pm

      I like to be disturbed while I’m being entertained 🙂

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  14. September 29, 2015 at 2:44 pm

    Ooh, that’s dark. Still, Country and Western’s not my favorite genre.

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  15. September 29, 2015 at 3:34 pm

    How bad WERE they? They must have been downright offensive. Well, you sure did make sure they were punished for their sins!

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    • September 29, 2015 at 6:32 pm

      They probably forgot to include “Rawhide” in their set. That was the only song which saved the Blues Brothers band in the film 🙂

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  16. NotAPunkRocker
    September 29, 2015 at 3:51 pm

    Wait, did I just read that you like country music?

    cancel cancel cancel

    (actually, this reminded me of what could have happened to The Blues Brothers’ Band at Bobs Country Bunker)

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    • September 29, 2015 at 6:33 pm

      Ha, I just said something similar (Blues Brothers-wise) in response to Marilyn!
      Yeah, I don’t listen to country a lot, but I do rather like it. My dad played a lot of it when I was little 🙂

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  17. September 29, 2015 at 4:12 pm

    Now that was disturbingly fun. Nice take! 🙂

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    • September 29, 2015 at 6:35 pm

      I like that – “disturbingly fun” :-). I’m glad you liked it!

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  18. September 29, 2015 at 7:55 pm

    Brilliantly formed and put together ~ Driftwood Gooed forever together ~ Old A&B lived in a shoe entirely covered with Driftwood goo 🙂 Excellent Ali ~

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    • September 30, 2015 at 7:19 am

      Yuck, what an image. Driftwood goo 🙂

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  19. September 29, 2015 at 7:58 pm

    Very nicely dark and gruesome. No disappointing Country and Western ensemble deserves quarter. 🙂 There are so many types of building materials nowadays … 🙂

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    • September 30, 2015 at 7:20 am

      You can make a house out of practically anything! This is very environmentally friendly 🙂

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  20. September 29, 2015 at 8:15 pm

    Such a story Ali! I loved it and the progression was perfection. I appreciate your entry into the Mondays Finish the Story Challenge. Be well… ^..^

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    • September 30, 2015 at 7:20 am

      I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂

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  21. September 29, 2015 at 8:16 pm

    What an incredibly gruesome ending for that disappointing Country and Western ensemble. That construction crew must have been very drunk! Great story, Ali. 🙂

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  22. September 29, 2015 at 8:16 pm

    I left a comment….did it I do it right?

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    • September 30, 2015 at 7:23 am

      Yes. There was something a bit weird about this post – links not working for some people and so on. It’s slowly sorting itself out, I think!

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  23. September 29, 2015 at 10:03 pm

    Smelled faintly? Wait another couple of days 🙂

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  24. September 30, 2015 at 4:50 am

    I would be so ticked that my tools were used, ha.

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    • September 30, 2015 at 7:27 am

      A workman’s tools are sacred.

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  25. October 1, 2015 at 8:19 am

    This tragedy is just screaming to have a country and western song written about it…

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    • October 1, 2015 at 12:27 pm

      I hear 100-piece C&W ensemble “Bricks ‘n Mortar” is touring the area… 🙂

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