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Friday Fictioneers – Stakeout

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. She also contributed this week’s photo. Click on the blue froggy to see all the other contributions.

Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

 

“Nasty night. This is going nowhere. Wait… eight hours and you haven’t taken a leak! What are you, Officer Iron Bladder?”

“Adult nappy!”

“Adult… wait, I don’t wanna know. Christ.”

“Always prepared, Sarge! Look – camera, spare camera, spare batteries, phone charger, spare phone, sat nav…”

“Christ.”

“No sign of this drug deal going down, Sarge.”

“Stupid place for it anyway. Too much foot traffic on Winslade Avenue.”

“Um, Winslade Avenue? Not Street?”

“What are you telling me, Mr ‘Always Prepared’?”

“Well, it’s been fun, right? So, philosophically speaking, we’re right where we need to be!”

“Christ.”

 

  1. October 15, 2015 at 6:47 pm

    I wonder how often this really happens? Bet it does.

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    • October 15, 2015 at 7:25 pm

      Ha, yes. I should have put “based on a true story”.

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  2. October 15, 2015 at 8:02 pm

    Oh! There will be heck to pay later. A truly fun take on the prompt. Alicia

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    • October 16, 2015 at 7:07 am

      Yes, there will be some explaining to do! Thanks 🙂

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  3. October 15, 2015 at 8:25 pm

    Oops.
    Randy

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    • October 16, 2015 at 7:08 am

      They’ll have fun explaining this to their inspector.

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  4. October 15, 2015 at 8:48 pm

    Dear Ali,

    It pays to correctly program your GPS. 😉 Cute story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • October 16, 2015 at 7:09 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      It does. They’re only as good as the person who types the details in!
      Ali

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      • October 16, 2015 at 1:48 pm

        Learning a thing or two from the above comments (I don’t even own a SmartPhone, leave alone a GPS system. Still stuck in the mid-twentieth century, when I wasn’t even born!

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      • October 16, 2015 at 3:06 pm

        🙂

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  5. October 15, 2015 at 8:55 pm

    Uh oh. I’m afraid that’s going to blow up in their faces. Good, well-written story, Ali. 🙂 — Suzanne

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    • October 16, 2015 at 7:09 am

      Thanks! I think you’re right. I get the feeling this isn’t their first mistake!

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  6. October 15, 2015 at 8:57 pm

    First the comment didn’t show, then it came back and there were two. 😦

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    • October 16, 2015 at 7:10 am

      I’ve deleted the duplicate 🙂

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  7. October 16, 2015 at 4:18 am

    Hey, 8 hours pay is 8 hours pay… even if you do have to spend it sitting in a car with a man wearing a soiled diaper…

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    • October 16, 2015 at 7:10 am

      Maybe Sarge could put in for hazard pay. Though this might not be the best time to ask…

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  8. October 16, 2015 at 6:04 am

    Tim for a demotion?

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  9. Lata Sunil
    October 16, 2015 at 6:34 am

    Hahahaha.. Mr. Always prepared is too good.

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  10. October 16, 2015 at 7:13 am

    There are a few well documented instances of police officers executing dawn raids; dragging suspects from their beds; only to find they had the wrong address. Ooops!

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    • October 16, 2015 at 11:43 am

      Yes, I’ve heard of some of those, and at least one I remember was a confusion between Avenue and Street or something similar. Muppets 🙂

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  11. October 16, 2015 at 7:52 am

    I can’t help shaking my head at how profoundly cluless they sound. Silly pair.

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    • October 16, 2015 at 11:43 am

      Hopefully their boss is aware of their “shortcomings” and also sent a backup team.

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  12. October 16, 2015 at 1:47 pm

    Hahahahahahahahaha! That makes me use this unpardonable acronym, LOL! (Sorry!)
    Your stories have such a range — humor, sarcasm, apocalyptic doom-and-gloom, sorrow–but this one is PURE fun! I love all your stories.
    The dialogue in this sounds uncannily real, the characters leap into life, the situation is ludicrous. Wunderbar!

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    • October 16, 2015 at 3:06 pm

      Thanks, I love that you love all my stories 🙂 I guess I write whatever type of story first springs to mind when I see the picture.
      I’m imagining young and keen cop partnered with grizzly veteran sergeant stuck in a car for hours 🙂
      “LOL” is fine, it’s one of the few I don’t have to Google.

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  13. October 16, 2015 at 1:57 pm

    You manage to ring the changes with your stories every week. Well done.

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    • October 16, 2015 at 3:07 pm

      Thanks! It’s nice to mix things up a bit, though I don’t do it consciously.

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  14. October 16, 2015 at 3:33 pm

    The adult nappy is hilarious! Though maybe not on a work colleague sitting next to you.
    All that rain and this down-to-earth cop dialogue – I wonder if you’ve watched River this week (new BBC police thing)?

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    • October 17, 2015 at 5:33 pm

      Yeah, imagine being stuck in a car with someone who just admitted that!
      Actually I haven’t been watching River, though I’ve seen it advertised. Is it any good?

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      • October 17, 2015 at 7:18 pm

        River is fantastic – I’m watching it again tonight with my TV buddy- my daughter. I’ve got to be gagged though – I tend to shout out vital plot spoilers! Actually I have a musical preview at my post – that won’t make any sense at all unless you’ve watched it!

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  15. October 16, 2015 at 4:55 pm

    Funny stuff Ali.

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  16. October 16, 2015 at 7:15 pm

    lol, great job 🙂

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  17. October 16, 2015 at 7:22 pm

    Ha, iron bladder… Love that, and still that little mistake..

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    • October 17, 2015 at 5:34 pm

      Turns out he wasn’t Iron Bladder after all :-). One small mistake and they’re there all night, poor things!

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  18. October 16, 2015 at 7:30 pm

    Why oh why do cities have streets with the same names? Avenue, street, lane… almost feel bad for these two dimwits!

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    • October 17, 2015 at 5:35 pm

      An easy mistake to make! I don’t suppose their Inspector will see it that way, though.

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      • October 17, 2015 at 5:49 pm

        No, I don’t suppose he will!

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  19. October 16, 2015 at 11:55 pm

    Hehehehe, what a fun story. I want to see how they try to talk their way out of this…

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    • October 17, 2015 at 5:36 pm

      It’ll need to be truly award-winning or they’ll be on traffic duty next day 🙂

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  20. October 17, 2015 at 3:30 am

    Christ! Hahaha. Someone is tired of rookies.

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    • October 17, 2015 at 5:36 pm

      They can be trying but everyone has to learn! Let’s hope he gets another chance.

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  21. October 17, 2015 at 7:29 pm

    So prepared, except for that one fine detail. Oops! I love this take. Hilarious, Ali.

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    • October 18, 2015 at 5:43 am

      He was too preoccupied with all the little things to remember the correct address 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  22. October 17, 2015 at 8:33 pm

    Just proves..No one is perfect.

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  23. October 18, 2015 at 3:08 am

    Adult nappy, so gross! LOL Great story, can so relate!

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    • October 18, 2015 at 5:46 am

      Especially gross of you suddenly realise your car mate is wearing (and using) one :-). You have to admire his dedication though.

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  24. October 18, 2015 at 6:55 am

    HaHaHaHa! meanwhile at Winslade street….

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    • October 18, 2015 at 9:56 am

      … Mr Big was pleased to see that rumours the cops knew about his drug exchange were unfounded, as there were no cops to be seen!

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  25. Adam Ickes
    October 19, 2015 at 1:06 am

    Sounds like a rookie mistake made by a veteran.

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    • October 19, 2015 at 6:59 am

      It happens to the best of us 🙂

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  26. October 19, 2015 at 9:47 pm

    Ooh heck… someone’s in for a rollicking. Still it was an easy mistake to make. Avenue sounds a lot like street – if you say it quickly enough! Fun story, Ali.:)

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    • October 20, 2015 at 8:10 am

      I think they’re just incompetent 🙂 That’s the problem when you’re using autocomplete on your sat nav.

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      • October 20, 2015 at 11:31 am

        Sat nav’s aren’t to be trusted at
        all (with me at the wheel, that is). It’s fortunate those two didn’t end up stuck in a ditch, or worse, as some people have. And if those two are incompetent to boot, there really isn’t a lot of hope. 😀

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      • October 20, 2015 at 7:52 pm

        I’ve never used the sat nav on my phone or in my car. I’d rather plan things out properly to begin with 🙂

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      • October 20, 2015 at 8:12 pm

        That’s exactly how we are. Old habits … as they say. I’m a map person, through and through. 🙂

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  27. October 20, 2015 at 9:45 pm

    I love to drive through towns that have three streets with the same names! NOT!

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  28. October 23, 2015 at 10:30 pm

    They’re right were the drug dealers want them. So someone’s happy.

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    • October 24, 2015 at 5:55 am

      Very true. Silver lining and all that 🙂

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