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FF – Rough Justice

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo comes courtesy of ceayr.

To read this week’s other stories, click on the blue froggy.

After a bit of Google translate action I determined that “Chateau de sable” means “sand castle”. I already knew what “chateau” meant, mind :-).

Copyright ceayr

Copyright ceayr

 

Jonas started to cry as the bully kicked his sandcastle, spraying fragments into his eyes. The bully’s father approached, but his hopes for swift justice were dashed at the parent’s next words.

“Alan, come on, you can mess with pathetic nerdy wimps another time.”

So it was that years later Jonas was delighted to see both bully and bully’s father standing before him, to see their dismay as they recalled him from that day so long ago.

“I, Jonas pathetic nerdy wimp Jenkins, sentence you both to life. Bailiff, take them down.” He smiled as their castle of sand crumbled to dust.

 

  1. January 27, 2016 at 8:26 pm

    Revenge is a dish best served cold 🙂

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    • January 27, 2016 at 8:43 pm

      This dish was cold as ice and all the more satisfying for it 🙂

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  2. January 27, 2016 at 9:45 pm

    Brilliant.

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  3. January 27, 2016 at 10:08 pm

    A wonderful story of retribution! Love the reference to that beach-scene stereotype of bullies kicking down sand castles, and then the nerd gets his revenge by becoming a body-builder (in this case, a judge).
    Great story, as your stories always are!

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    • January 28, 2016 at 8:32 am

      You never know when your erstwhile victim will hold your future in their hands. I’m glad you liked it!

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  4. January 27, 2016 at 10:14 pm

    i hear it often that the best revenge is to be successful. well done.

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    • January 28, 2016 at 8:32 am

      Thanks, that is a good revenge (especially when attending your school reunion!).

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  5. January 28, 2016 at 1:19 am

    Justice done!

    DJ

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  6. January 28, 2016 at 2:23 am

    Wow, talk about payback. I guess this is a warning to not kick other peoples’ sandcastles and be nasty about it. Well done, Ali. 😀 — Suzanne

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    • January 28, 2016 at 8:33 am

      Yes, it’s come back to bite them years later. Glad you liked it!

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  7. January 28, 2016 at 3:01 am

    One man’s satisfaction is another man’s (this case men) misery! Great story. 🙂

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    • January 28, 2016 at 8:34 am

      Thanks, he was pretty pleased when he got his chance for payback!

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  8. January 28, 2016 at 4:10 am

    And to think…. they only wound up in court because the father double parked!

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    • January 28, 2016 at 8:35 am

      I originally had them getting 25 years for shoplifting (hence the title which I forgot to change), but I decided at the last minute to go for a less “silly” ending!

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  9. January 28, 2016 at 7:30 am

    I like his style. I just wish all the bullies got their come-uppance like this pair. Well told.

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    • January 28, 2016 at 8:36 am

      Yeah, me too. There are a few from my school days I’d like to see squirm!
      Thanks 🙂

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  10. January 28, 2016 at 7:55 am

    Brilliant end!

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  11. January 28, 2016 at 8:42 am

    Dear Ali,

    Poetic justice is served. 😀 Bravo. Very well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • January 28, 2016 at 11:54 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      Thank. Yes, he finally got his own back, nice and legally!
      Ali

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  12. January 28, 2016 at 9:08 am

    OMC I guess someone took a spell 😀 Pawkisses 🙂 ❤

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  13. January 28, 2016 at 12:24 pm

    I think this happen to many nerdy wimps on some level… Good that they recognized him as well.

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    • January 28, 2016 at 12:49 pm

      I think it does – it’s the bookworms who often end up running our lives one way or another.
      It was all the sweeter for him as he saw recollection dawning on their faces!

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  14. January 28, 2016 at 2:26 pm

    Look at Karma, shakin’ her groove thing. You go girl. Payback is SUCH a bitch. Do I really have to say well done? I think from you that’s pretty much a given. 🙂

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    • January 28, 2016 at 6:53 pm

      Thanks 🙂
      Yep, what goes around came around big time for these two ne’er-do-wells.

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  15. Holly
    January 28, 2016 at 2:29 pm

    Now, I do hope there was proper evidence to support such a conviction and not just some form of much-delayed vigilante justice 😉

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    • January 28, 2016 at 6:55 pm

      Of course there was evidence. And more is mysteriously appearing all the time 😉

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  16. January 28, 2016 at 3:51 pm

    Feel-good factor or what? Nice one.

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    • January 28, 2016 at 6:56 pm

      Thanks, it took a while but justice was finally done.

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  17. January 28, 2016 at 4:41 pm

    A sweet revenge… these bullies must have been very memorable, and with such a father it’s unlikely that the kid grows out of it. Good one.

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    • January 28, 2016 at 6:56 pm

      They’ll probably end up sharing a cell and “ruling the block”. I’m glad you liked it!

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  18. January 28, 2016 at 5:19 pm

    He became a judge! Wonderful! Loved the ending – well deserved! Great story Ali!

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    • January 28, 2016 at 6:57 pm

      All his bookwork paid off, and he finally got justice for himself! Glad you enjoyed it 🙂

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  19. January 28, 2016 at 7:13 pm

    Alan, come on, you can mess with pathetic nerdy wimps another time
    That line cracked me up. Fun story of “revenge is sweet.”

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    • January 28, 2016 at 7:16 pm

      With that comment he’s pretty much exposed his complete personality. I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  20. January 28, 2016 at 8:36 pm

    Revenge is always sweet. Nice connection to the sand castle.

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    • January 29, 2016 at 8:07 am

      Thanks. He got his revenge in the end, though he had to wait a while!

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  21. January 29, 2016 at 12:33 am

    Great Story. 🙂

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  22. Adam Ickes
    January 29, 2016 at 3:15 am

    Jonas sure can hold a grudge! Remind me to stay on his good side.

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    • January 29, 2016 at 8:08 am

      Good idea, he’s big on heavy sentences especially if you’ve wronged him in the past!

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  23. January 29, 2016 at 7:23 am

    HaHaHa!

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  24. January 29, 2016 at 7:58 pm

    Bully comeuppances are quite fun to read; good work! I presume the castle-home is now Jonas’?! 🙂

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    • January 29, 2016 at 9:52 pm

      Thanks! I expect it was seized by the court. And guess who’s looking after the keys 🙂

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  25. January 29, 2016 at 10:02 pm

    Sand castles both literal and figurative–enjoyed it!

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    • January 30, 2016 at 8:48 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you spotted that!

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  26. January 30, 2016 at 5:02 am

    What sweet revenge to have as a judge, because there’s nothing they can do. They deserve it. Great line from him.

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  27. January 31, 2016 at 7:45 am

    I can’t even imagine that gleam in Jonas’s eyes when he first saw his upcoming court case file. Or did he somehow ‘made’ the case come his way in the first place?

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    • January 31, 2016 at 8:03 am

      I imagine when he saw the docket he pulled a few strings. Bad news for bully and his dad 🙂

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  28. January 31, 2016 at 11:15 am

    Yikes!!
    One must be careful what nerdy whim you upset, he might literally have your head in the future.

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  29. February 1, 2016 at 1:40 pm

    What goes around comes around!

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    • February 1, 2016 at 2:08 pm

      Yep, it took a while but Karma is patient and so is Jonas!

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  30. February 1, 2016 at 2:44 pm

    Revenge of the nerds! I love it. 😀

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  31. February 2, 2016 at 12:31 am

    I almost feel sorry for them.
    Almost.

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  32. February 7, 2016 at 4:13 pm

    Many times patience will bring justice!

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    • February 7, 2016 at 4:34 pm

      It certainly did for him. Revenge is a dish best served very very cold in his case!

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  33. February 7, 2016 at 6:24 pm

    Karma – gotta love it.

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