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FF – For the Cause

Here is my story for this week’s Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by Peter Abbey.

Not a comedy this week, but not as dark as my preceding stories! To read the other stories, click on the blue froggy.

Copyright Peter Abbey

Copyright Peter Abbey

 

Stefan risked a quick glance back at his erstwhile captors as he made his way gingerly along the tunnel. Ahead, the exchange prisoner approached and further on, the safety of his own troops.

Months of torture and his captors had decided he knew nothing. Sweat broke out on his brow as reality hit – a few more seconds to safety, to divulging the enemy’s plans in detail.

As the two men drew level Stefan felt a blade slide between his ribs.

“Why?” he gasped as his life ebbed away.

“For the cause,” replied the other as a hail of bullets took him down.

 

  1. October 26, 2016 at 5:42 pm

    Poor Stefan! Good story Ali… Kept me hooked till the end…!

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  2. October 26, 2016 at 5:56 pm

    Ah yes. “For the greater good” covers a LOT of sins and crimes.

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  3. October 26, 2016 at 5:59 pm

    Great story, once again! All is fair in love and war!

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  4. October 26, 2016 at 6:13 pm

    Very tense story!

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    • October 27, 2016 at 7:45 am

      I’m glad that came across, I had to cut a lot of words out 🙂

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  5. October 26, 2016 at 6:16 pm

    So much hate. Sad. Well told.
    Planned on emailing you, but email does not send. Only receives. Plans to fix.

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    • October 27, 2016 at 7:46 am

      Thanks!
      Good luck with the email, that can be tricky to fix sometimes.

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      • November 6, 2016 at 9:15 pm

        I got it. I brought my computer to the Apple Store. In 3 minutes, I was up and running. Guess we know who is the brilliant one.

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      • November 7, 2016 at 8:16 am

        Yay!

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  6. October 26, 2016 at 7:09 pm

    Your stories always leave me wanting more. When are you writing a manuscript?

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    • October 27, 2016 at 1:10 pm

      I’ve tried more than once. I’ve sort of started a sci-fi thing with a sort of “Terry Pratchett” feel to it – one and a half pages in 6 months 😦
      I’m glad you like my stories!
      And this comment did drop into my spam folder…

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      • October 27, 2016 at 3:20 pm

        Yeah. I haven’t heard back from the powers that be. I guess until it’s done I’ll be clicking like, but not leave comments.

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      • October 27, 2016 at 3:36 pm

        Annoying for you, hope they sort it soon.

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      • October 27, 2016 at 4:32 pm

        Me too

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  7. October 26, 2016 at 7:35 pm

    Oh, wow! That last line is a hard one. Very well done. Alicia

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    • October 27, 2016 at 7:47 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! I like to finish with a hard-hitting last line.

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  8. October 26, 2016 at 8:26 pm

    Excellent. I was ready for the traditional spy exchange – great twist! Love this.

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    • October 27, 2016 at 7:48 am

      Somebody suspected Stefan knew more than he let on…
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  9. October 26, 2016 at 9:53 pm

    Excellent! And probably happens more often than we think.

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    • October 27, 2016 at 7:48 am

      Thanks! Yes, probably. It’s not the sort of thing which gets advertised!

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  10. Lyn
    October 26, 2016 at 11:35 pm

    Nasty… You really like a twist don’t you LOL whether in the story line or with a knife 😀 Reminded me of the episode Special Relationships from the old TV show, The Sandbaggers

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    • October 27, 2016 at 7:50 am

      Ha, yes, it’s all about the twist!
      I’ve never heard of that programme but it sounds like my sort of thing (I just looked it up).

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      • Lyn
        October 27, 2016 at 8:55 am

        Brilliant series!

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      • October 27, 2016 at 1:04 pm

        It’s on Amazon on DVD!

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      • Lyn
        October 28, 2016 at 11:04 am

        Ooh, is it? I’ll have to have a look.

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  11. October 27, 2016 at 7:51 am

    Killed by his own?
    Brilliant story.

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    • October 27, 2016 at 1:02 pm

      Technically he was stabbed by the exchange prisoner, but I don’t suppose the bullets from his own side in retaliation helped 🙂

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  12. October 27, 2016 at 8:25 am

    I’ve always wondered how these prisoner exchange got pulled off without any hitches. This is obviously proof that they don’t. At least let the two have a Mortal Combat style fight before they end up killing each other…

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    • October 27, 2016 at 1:03 pm

      I bet they go horribly wrong more often than not…

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  13. October 27, 2016 at 11:37 am

    So cruel, when he was so close to safety!

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  14. October 27, 2016 at 12:10 pm

    Ali, Ali, whatever are we to do with you?
    Tense, dark story. Well done, though. If the muse takes you to the dark side who am I to complain? 😉

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • October 27, 2016 at 1:05 pm

      I tried my hardest to do a funny one 🙂
      I’m glad you enjoyed it anyway!
      Ali

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  15. October 27, 2016 at 1:34 pm

    There’s a fine line between being a hero and a criminal. For the cause? For his own hatred? For suspicion of betrayal? He knew that he’d be shot… you make both prisoners equally fascinating.

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    • October 27, 2016 at 1:50 pm

      Thanks! I guess either he’ll do anything to gain revenge after his captivity even at the cost of his life, or he really is a hero and strongly suspects Stefan knows enough to hurt his side.

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  16. October 27, 2016 at 3:11 pm

    Chilling! And to think that he was so close to getting away!

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  17. October 27, 2016 at 6:08 pm

    So close! Another great one, Ali.
    When are you going back to writing funny tales? 😃

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    • October 28, 2016 at 7:55 am

      Soon I hope. It was supposed to be this week 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!

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      • October 28, 2016 at 3:34 pm

        I’m waiting patiently for your funny self to return. 😋

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      • October 28, 2016 at 3:35 pm

        Me too 🙂

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      • October 28, 2016 at 4:06 pm

        You must’ve put him in a “safe” place. 😜

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  18. October 27, 2016 at 11:27 pm

    “For the cause”. I think those three words are terrifying to hear. To die because someone believed it was right for their cause…

    Great story! 🙂

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    • October 28, 2016 at 7:56 am

      Thanks! Yes, scary words indeed, used by so many to justify so much.

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  19. October 28, 2016 at 1:52 am

    that’s one nasty twist. so close to freedom, but no cigar. a knife between his ribs instead.

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  20. October 28, 2016 at 3:45 am

    Not as dark? So awful to come so close…

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  21. October 28, 2016 at 12:10 pm

    Tense, terse and dark, but very well crafted.

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    • October 28, 2016 at 12:56 pm

      Thanks! Though I’m looking forward to getting the “funny” back one of these weeks…

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  22. October 28, 2016 at 1:24 pm

    This was very intense, tightly packed, I loved it!

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  23. October 28, 2016 at 3:34 pm

    Knowing your talent for twisty endings, I should have known poor Stefan wouldn’t make it to the safety of his own troops!

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    • October 28, 2016 at 3:35 pm

      Yeah, he never stood much of chance, did he? 🙂

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  24. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover
    October 28, 2016 at 9:06 pm

    I was hopeful for poor Stefan until the bitter end. Nicely done.

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    • October 29, 2016 at 5:20 am

      Thanks. He nearly made it, poor chap.

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  25. October 29, 2016 at 7:53 am

    This reminded me of the Cold war exchanges across European borders. Really well delivered.

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    • October 29, 2016 at 5:44 pm

      Thanks! Yes, that’s what I was thinking too. I thought the photo depicted the perfect location for such an exchange.

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  26. October 30, 2016 at 9:19 am

    That was some twist, but not entirely unexpected. Still there was hope.

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  27. October 30, 2016 at 2:13 pm

    Still pretty dark! haha, but well written! Suspense and a complete story–nice job!

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    • October 30, 2016 at 5:55 pm

      Thanks! Hopefully the darkness will soon recede…

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  28. October 31, 2016 at 12:49 am

    Good suspense. Did you have to kill the poor guy though and suddenly slide the blade between his ribs? 🙂 That was an unexpected twist. Nicely done.

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    • October 31, 2016 at 8:18 am

      Yeah, I definitely had to kill him 🙂 He knew too much…

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  29. October 31, 2016 at 7:42 am

    A gripping and unsettling story. Great tension and a shock ending – poor Stefan. So close to success and freedom.

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    • October 31, 2016 at 8:23 am

      Yes, just a few more seconds. I’m glad you liked it!

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  30. October 31, 2016 at 5:58 pm

    Wonderful, although disturbing, imagery Ali.

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  31. November 5, 2016 at 1:01 pm

    Poor Stefan! So close to freedom, only to take a knife between the ribs. A wonderfully dark story. 🙂

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    • November 5, 2016 at 5:49 pm

      The man who knew too much. And after all he’s been through, too…
      I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂

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