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FF – Waiting for the End

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by Jennifer Pendergast.

I saw some sort of ancient monolith this week.

To read the other stories, click on the blue froggy.

Copyright Jennifer Pendergast

 

The entity had been waiting since the dawn of time. It had seen life crawl from the oceans. It had been buried in mud, worshipped, buried in sand, transported, stored away and displayed.

And all the time it had been watching. Gathering information. The deadline had arrived. It compiled its report.

Planet overrun. Ecosystem dying. No hope. Recommend sterilisation. Prepare culling.

A small human approached, touched it. The human’s face was full of hope, its eyes gentle, trusting, curious. The entity reconsidered. It compiled a new message and transmitted.

Situation dire but hope remains. Recommend hold. Final decision in two generations.

 

  1. March 15, 2017 at 7:54 pm

    Best leave the decisions to the children. By the time they grow up, hope tends to dwindle.

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    • March 16, 2017 at 9:38 am

      Very true. Let’s hope at least a few of them retain their hopes though, or the entity might get a bit annoyed.

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  2. March 15, 2017 at 7:55 pm

    It does look a giant timepiece! I think the entity has it right; humans are on the brink of doom!

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  3. March 15, 2017 at 8:09 pm

    Still a bit of time to get it right then. I’m not holding out much hope.

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  4. March 15, 2017 at 8:32 pm

    Awww nice hopeful end.

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    • March 16, 2017 at 9:40 am

      My original early thought for a last line (I tend to write the end first so I know where I’m going) was “Let the harvesting begin”, but I decided to be a bit more optimistic πŸ™‚

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      • March 16, 2017 at 10:41 am

        That’s quite chilling! (The line – not you being optimistic!)

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      • March 16, 2017 at 11:50 am

        Me being optimistic is quite chilling too! Or at least a bit strange πŸ™‚

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  5. March 15, 2017 at 8:52 pm

    I was glad of the second chance

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  6. March 15, 2017 at 10:12 pm

    The last line is rather touching. Great one, Ali!

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    • March 16, 2017 at 9:41 am

      I’m glad you enjoyed my slightly optimistic story πŸ™‚

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      • March 16, 2017 at 2:36 pm

        I’ll take slight optimism to extreme optimism any day (the latter makes me suspicious and sometimes even nauseous πŸ˜‰).

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      • March 16, 2017 at 3:27 pm

        Extremely optimistic people maybe aren’t living in the real world 😦 Not my real world anyway πŸ™‚

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      • March 16, 2017 at 3:43 pm

        Exactly. 😊

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  7. March 15, 2017 at 10:30 pm

    Almost Kubrickian …. More colorful than a monolith though but did you hear the opening of Strauss’ “Thus Spake Zarathustra” in your head while you were writing this? πŸ™‚

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    • March 16, 2017 at 9:42 am

      I was thinking more of the monolith in “2001” πŸ™‚

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      • March 16, 2017 at 1:35 pm

        Right! The black monolith? Stanley Kubrick was the director. I should have known mangling his name like I did would make the reference incomprehensible 😦

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      • March 16, 2017 at 3:25 pm

        I got the reference to Kubrick but didn’t know he was the director 😦

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  8. March 15, 2017 at 10:58 pm

    Thank God for that kid. When there is at least one…. there may be more. Enjoyed!

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  9. March 16, 2017 at 1:10 am

    Aw, that one brought a serious lump to my throat. Scary but sweet.

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  10. March 16, 2017 at 1:51 am

    Hope is a good thing. We need that. Thank you for not giving up. Yet.

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  11. March 16, 2017 at 2:25 am

    Phew! That was close! Nice it had a “heart”…

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  12. March 16, 2017 at 5:12 am

    And then the boy looked around to see if anyone else was watching, and with a mischievous grin yanked down his shorts and took a leak on the goofy structure…

    Oh wait, you mean we’re not supposed to add the next line to the story? Sorry!

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    • March 16, 2017 at 9:44 am

      That’s probably what’s going to happen, but it’s clicked “send” now. And you can’t suck it back once it’s gone!

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  13. March 16, 2017 at 5:57 am

    That’s a lovely happy ending, Ali. I hope it happens again in a couple generations. πŸ™‚ — Suzanne

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    • March 16, 2017 at 9:45 am

      Fingers crossed! I’m glad you liked it πŸ™‚

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  14. March 16, 2017 at 8:14 am

    That was a touching end, Draliman. We Loved it! Pawkisses for a Happy Thursday πŸ™‚ ❀

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  15. March 16, 2017 at 11:31 am

    I love this. Hope and whatnot. πŸ™‚

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    • March 16, 2017 at 11:50 am

      And trust and innocence saves the day and all that shizzle πŸ™‚

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      • March 16, 2017 at 12:59 pm

        You’re straight up gangsta!

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      • March 16, 2017 at 1:02 pm

        Da word πŸ™‚

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      • March 16, 2017 at 1:04 pm

        Hmm, that’s all the gangsta I know…

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      • March 16, 2017 at 3:24 pm

        Da word πŸ™‚

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  16. March 16, 2017 at 1:57 pm

    Dear Ali,

    And a little child shall lead them. Nicely plotted. Love the turn at the end.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • March 16, 2017 at 3:26 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      I’m glad you enjoyed it! Maybe the children should lead πŸ™‚
      Ali

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  17. March 16, 2017 at 9:41 pm

    kids do make a difference. they can melt even the harshest hearts.

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  18. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover
    March 16, 2017 at 10:03 pm

    Children are our hope for the future. Well done.

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  19. March 16, 2017 at 10:11 pm

    Beautiful! Well done!

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  20. michael1148humphris
    March 17, 2017 at 10:54 am

    So two generations to turn things round, not much hope then!

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    • March 17, 2017 at 12:44 pm

      No, not long at all. We’re doomed, Captain Mainwaring, doomed!

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  21. March 17, 2017 at 11:16 am

    Live in hope, optimism rules! Nice one.

    Click to read my 100 words!

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    • March 17, 2017 at 12:44 pm

      Fingers crossed for a cull-free future! I’m glad you liked it.

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  22. March 17, 2017 at 2:25 pm

    Somehow I doubt they would be sympathetic after centuries of observing human behavior. But, there is always hope. Nicely done, Ali.

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    • March 17, 2017 at 4:18 pm

      I doubt it too. But we can but hope. I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  23. March 17, 2017 at 2:55 pm

    That is an awesome take.

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  24. March 17, 2017 at 4:40 pm

    Beautiful! Your versatility never ceases to surprise me.

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    • March 17, 2017 at 4:51 pm

      Thanks! That’s such a lovely comment, and I’m glad you enjoyed it πŸ™‚

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  25. March 17, 2017 at 5:42 pm

    Those trusting kids will get the aliens every time. Let’s hope there’s another one around in two generations. Really enjoyed your sci-fi take on this.

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    • March 17, 2017 at 7:03 pm

      Me too, no alien can resist an innocent little kiddie. I’m glad you liked it!

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  26. March 17, 2017 at 8:45 pm

    Ooooooooo good one. Yeah let’s hope the next couple of generations breed out a bit of self destruction.

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    • March 18, 2017 at 5:36 pm

      Yes, let’s be optimistic about this πŸ™‚
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  27. March 19, 2017 at 4:21 pm

    I like the sequences you’ve created – moving from pre-human through hope for humanity. Enjoyed it.

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    • March 19, 2017 at 5:41 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! I liked to think of this thing having seen all the ages through time.

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  28. March 20, 2017 at 3:06 pm

    Nice optimistic end, it’s a good job the entity was capable of feeling before that I thought it was all reason and no emotion.

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    • March 20, 2017 at 3:24 pm

      Yes, not just an unfeeling computer, fortunately.

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  29. March 20, 2017 at 7:55 pm

    If we could all be like children so many problems would disappear! Great story.

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  30. March 21, 2017 at 5:23 am

    Your story is hopeful…

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    • March 21, 2017 at 8:17 am

      Fingers crossed for a better future. Or indeed, for a future.

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  31. March 22, 2017 at 3:58 am

    A reprieve. Thanks be!

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    • March 22, 2017 at 8:40 am

      Another 100 or so years to make good…

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  32. March 23, 2017 at 3:48 pm

    Teetering but hanging in there … sounds about right! Nicely told Ali

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    • March 23, 2017 at 4:28 pm

      On the brink but there’s hope yet πŸ™‚ I’m glad you liked it!

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  33. March 24, 2017 at 7:45 pm

    I’m thankful for the reprieve, if only for a couple of generations. Very well told, Ali. πŸ™‚

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    • March 24, 2017 at 9:15 pm

      Thanks, let’s hope it’s enough time to turn things around πŸ™‚

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  34. March 24, 2017 at 8:01 pm

    Great story. Let’s hope that two generations are enough for all of us to finally learn.

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  35. March 30, 2017 at 7:30 pm

    Nice post:)

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