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FF – Sudden Reversal

 

[QUICK INFO!] – none of my comments are showing up on others’ blogs and my spam folder was full of others’ comments this morning. Check your spam folders πŸ™‚

 

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by Dale.

Copyright Dale Rogerson

 

The snow lay heavy on the ground. All was silent, sound muffled, like the whole world held its breath. Nearby a street lamp cast a warm, welcoming glow.

Josh smiled, lay down and waved his arms and legs around. He stood and admired his snow angel.

How beautiful. What a fantastic…

The world shook, then turned upside-down! Josh screamed as he was catapulted against the house opposite. It shook again until at last he lay breathless on the ground, both legs shattered. It began to snow.

Get miniaturised! they said. Have a peaceful holiday in a snow globe! they said.

Bollocks.

 

  1. February 14, 2018 at 8:55 pm

    Man, I just love your brain.
    How do you come up with such fabulous ideas?
    Just perfect.

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    • February 15, 2018 at 7:23 am

      I worry there’s a cog loose somewhere. I’m glad you enjoyed it πŸ™‚

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      • February 16, 2018 at 9:45 pm

        I like the loose cog, gives you character. Or rather is give you characters who we love to read about.

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      • February 17, 2018 at 6:11 am

        Everyone needs an interesting quirk πŸ™‚

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      • February 17, 2018 at 1:56 pm

        I agree.

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  2. February 14, 2018 at 9:15 pm

    Sounds like he bought one of those travel vacation packages we’re often warned about. πŸ˜‰
    Very imaginative take on the prompt.

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    • February 15, 2018 at 7:23 am

      Yes, or worse (dum dum DUM) a timeshare πŸ™‚
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  3. February 14, 2018 at 9:18 pm

    I guess you saw the movie too, huh.

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    • February 15, 2018 at 7:24 am

      This could be a movie. “Timeshare Nightmare” I’d call it.

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  4. February 14, 2018 at 9:51 pm

    Haha, I hope that holiday came with insurance. The film ‘Downsizing’ is worth seeing if you haven’t already – a similar idea to this, minus the snow globe.

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  5. February 14, 2018 at 10:09 pm

    I guess they left out the small details. Great take on the photo! πŸ™‚

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    • February 15, 2018 at 7:25 am

      Or they were there but really really small. I’m glad you liked it πŸ™‚

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  6. February 14, 2018 at 10:31 pm

    Not my idea of a fun vacation.

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  7. February 14, 2018 at 11:01 pm

    I tried to comment earlier but I think WordPress might be temporarily broken since my comments never made it on the last few blogs I’ve tried. I was going to say that a snow globe isn’t my idea of a prime vacation spot.

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    • February 15, 2018 at 7:27 am

      It’s not just me then – none of my comments are appearing. I’ve popped a sentence at the top of my story advising people to check their spam folder, that’s where I found your comments plus a bunch of others.

      Liked by 1 person

  8. February 15, 2018 at 12:51 am

    Haha, I wasn’t expecting that. Bravo! πŸ™‚

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  9. February 15, 2018 at 3:02 am

    I really enjoyed your creative take on the prompt! Kind of a creepy vibe. I hope he’s not stuck in there forever. πŸ™‚

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    • February 15, 2018 at 7:29 am

      I hope not too. Probably just for the length of his “holiday”. We can only hope he’s still alive at the end of it!
      I’m glad you enjoyed it πŸ™‚

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  10. February 15, 2018 at 3:49 am

    What was he thinking? Of all places to go when miniaturised… has he not seen just how the snow gets to float? You have a great creative mind, Ali!

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    • February 15, 2018 at 7:29 am

      That’s true. Maybe he has some kind of breathing apparatus πŸ™‚
      I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  11. February 15, 2018 at 8:20 am

    Don’t eat the red snow!

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  12. February 15, 2018 at 9:25 am

    Brilliant narration, Draliman.
    What a terrible nightmare .

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    • February 15, 2018 at 12:34 pm

      Truly a holiday gone bad. I’m glad you liked it!

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  13. February 15, 2018 at 10:24 am

    Very clever idea, I loved this story.

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    • February 17, 2018 at 4:03 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!

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  14. February 15, 2018 at 12:37 pm

    Very clever.

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  15. February 15, 2018 at 1:28 pm

    Dear Ali,,

    I love the surprise ending. Unique and clever.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    PS I had a problem a while back with none of my comments showing up in other people’s blogs. I ended up contacted WP tech support and they were able to right the wrongs. I’ve no comment from you in my spam folder. πŸ˜‰

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    • February 15, 2018 at 4:23 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      I’m glad you liked it!
      I haven’t commented on many people’s stories yet as I’m worried they’ll never find them and think I’m ignoring them 😦 I just tried again and still no joy so I guess I’ll give support a try.
      Thanks,
      Ali

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  16. February 15, 2018 at 1:33 pm

    Well, I guess he found out what was wrong with that idea. Poor Josh. Your imagination is wandering in strange directions again, Ali. But it’s entertaining. πŸ˜€ — Suzanne

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    • February 15, 2018 at 4:24 pm

      Very strange directions, but I’m glad you liked it πŸ™‚

      Liked by 1 person

  17. February 15, 2018 at 1:59 pm

    Delightfully different – but then I’d expect nothing else!

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    • February 15, 2018 at 4:25 pm

      Thanks! I like to wander off into the realms of absurdity sometimes.

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    • February 17, 2018 at 11:30 am

      I am hopping into this comment box to see if Keith reads this! It is comment crazy week in WordPress World. I have tried leaving Keith a comment on his post but can’t get it it show up anywhere. All a bit strange.

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      • February 17, 2018 at 12:41 pm

        I’m reading it! There’s something very weird going on!

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      • February 17, 2018 at 4:06 pm

        See, there’s not, everything’s normal. I was in contact with both WordPress and Akismet support and they both told me nothing is wrong at all. So there you have it. Straight from the mouths of not one but two horses.

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  18. February 15, 2018 at 10:26 pm

    Haha! Probably not a very good idea, no… πŸ˜€

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    • February 16, 2018 at 7:47 am

      He really didn’t think it through πŸ™‚

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  19. February 16, 2018 at 12:21 am

    A very bad vacation, that’s for sure.

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    • February 16, 2018 at 7:48 am

      He’ll be glad to get back to the usual bed bugs, broken air con and mild food poisoning next year πŸ™‚

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  20. February 16, 2018 at 2:21 am

    say what? where did that come from? fun reading, though. πŸ™‚

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    • February 16, 2018 at 7:48 am

      That’s exactly what he thought πŸ™‚
      I’m glad you enjoyed it!

      Liked by 1 person

  21. February 16, 2018 at 10:24 am

    Love it! Most of all I like the contrast between the first paragraph and last word!

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    • February 16, 2018 at 1:05 pm

      I tried hard to go from serene to horrific to some sort of resignation or disgust πŸ™‚ I’m glad you enjoyed it!

      Liked by 1 person

  22. February 16, 2018 at 12:02 pm

    LOLβ€”I did not see that coming! Well played.

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    • February 16, 2018 at 1:05 pm

      Thanks! It’s hard to see something like that coming πŸ™‚

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  23. February 16, 2018 at 1:18 pm

    ha! Ha! Great idea. So he was shaken not stirred. And if he went with his partner, he can honestly say ‘the earth moved for me’.

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    • February 16, 2018 at 5:05 pm

      Haha! It might even be worth it to hear those immortal words πŸ™‚

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  24. February 16, 2018 at 5:32 pm

    Been watching too much Twilight Zone lately, haven’t we? πŸ˜‰

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    • February 17, 2018 at 6:09 am

      Craziness and plot twists abound πŸ™‚

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  25. February 16, 2018 at 9:35 pm

    I think with climate change that is the only way to experience winter in years to come

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    • February 17, 2018 at 6:10 am

      A scary thought but you may be right.

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  26. February 17, 2018 at 1:59 am

    No such thing as the perfect world. Love it.

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    • February 17, 2018 at 6:11 am

      And this one is far from perfect! I’m glad you liked it.

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  27. February 17, 2018 at 5:06 pm

    That does not sound like a peaceful holiday to me. Thanks for warning me against getting miniaturised and spending my holiday in a snow globe. πŸ˜‰
    Good one!

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    • February 17, 2018 at 6:15 pm

      No worries – you were about to sign on the dotted line, weren’t you? Close call πŸ™‚

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  28. February 19, 2018 at 6:06 pm

    MOL…that was a good found, Draliman πŸ˜€ Pawkisses for a Happy Day πŸ™‚ ❀

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    • February 20, 2018 at 7:43 am

      A Happy Day to you too πŸ™‚

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  29. February 19, 2018 at 7:42 pm

    Love the calm, descriptive opening paragraph that contrasts so well to what happens to poor Josh. Shattered legs really is something to have to deal with on holiday. I hope he gets out that globe whole and soon.

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    • February 20, 2018 at 7:44 am

      Thanks, I was hoping for a good contrast. Hopefully he some sort of travel insurance πŸ™‚

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  30. February 19, 2018 at 9:13 pm

    Well, that was different! You did a terrific job of setting us up for the global earthshake πŸ™‚

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  31. February 20, 2018 at 2:06 am

    LOL…very amusing!

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