FF – Hidden
Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by Jennifer Pendergast.
Gary rubbed his hands, blowing on them for warmth. It was freezing this morning, but such a beautiful day!
He could hear birds chirping in the trees. They must be cold! Even though the sun had risen, it was weak. The temperature wouldn’t rise above freezing until Spring.
He reached the pond, small but deep and a favourite spot for young lovers. A local “Casanova”, he’d been here only last night.
She shouldn’t have rejected him but the ice, as he had hoped, was completely opaque. He’d be hundreds of miles away before they found the body.
Such a beautiful day!
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Great build up…ordinary Gary….in fact a cold blooded probable serial killer…
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Yes, I’m guessing she’s not the only unfortunate victim.
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Oh that last line packs a punch. Great story, Ali!
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Thanks! It doesn’t seem to be bothering him at all.
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Perhaps he should have taken her somewhere warmer
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He could have dug a proper grave then.
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Great story, though not for her.
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No, definitely not for her 😦 Thanks!
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That was a great dark and twisty story well done.
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Thanks!
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Great (evil) minds think alike 😉 (read my story and you’ll understand)
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Yes, we went down very similar paths. You have ended with quite a mystery, though!
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I wonder where the other bodies are….
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Scattered in ponds across the county, perhaps 😮
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O dear, I hope that a unseasonal thaw sets in straight away.🙂
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That might put the authorities on his trail for sure.
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Maybe not hundreds of miles away after all.
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As long as the ice doesn’t thaw, he’ll be okay.
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Such a beautiful day – ouch!
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He doesn’t seem at all bothered by his evil deeds.
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Nor harm in checking out your handiwork. I like a thorough assassin.
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He needs to make sure everything is neat and tidy before hitting the road.
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I suspect in the springtime a few bodies will pop up to the surface of the pond. Gary sounds like a nice guy, you know the type who you enjoy watching as he sits on the electric chair.
I like how you lead us into the event through the view of a beautiful winter’s day.
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Yes, I’m guessing she’s not the only one. Maybe one day he’ll fry!
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Ugh, what a piece of …. The repetition of the ‘beautiful day’ line makes this especially powerful.
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Thanks, I had to cut some words elsewhere to get that in at the end 🙂
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Now there’s the Ali we know and love 😁
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The dark is back 🙂
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It seems that she left an….. um…. impression up there on the ice. At least that evidence will melt as well…
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I have to admit, that’s the first thing I saw too…
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What a cruel casanova. Great story.
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Thanks! Not someone one would hope to meet.
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His heart is as cold as that ice. Well told.
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It is, thanks. One of those people who have no conscience or feelings.
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Dear Ali,
Now that’s a COLD blooded killer. nICEly done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
For sure. He seems to have no conscience or feelings at all.
“nICEly” 🙂
Ali
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So, it was her own fault for not falling for his Casanovic charms!
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I’m sure that’s how Gary views the entire affair.
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it wasn’t what i expected. i guess he couldn’t no for an answer. poor girl.
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He never can, and he doesn’t take rejection well.
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Chilling story. Gives a new grim take on ‘deep frozen!
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Chilling in more ways then one 😮
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I hope his victim told someone where she’d be and with whom. Gary needs taking off the streets – permanently.
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He does, hopefully they will soon be on his trail.
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Ooh! Good one. That’s extra sneaky coming from you. No puns or silly dialogue. That’s a double twist.
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Ha, just a good old-fashioned murder!
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What a creep….but a good story, Draliman😸Pawkisses for a Happy Weekend🐾😽💞
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He is 😮
Happy weekend to you too!
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What a cold heart… Twist, she comes back to life and hunts him down.
Great story A.
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Maybe with her dying breath she made a deal with “dark forces” to allow her her revenge…
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Such a beautiful day–such a hideous man!
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Yes – and yes 😦
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