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FF – Hidden

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by Jennifer Pendergast.

Copyright Jennifer Pendergast

Gary rubbed his hands, blowing on them for warmth. It was freezing this morning, but such a beautiful day!

He could hear birds chirping in the trees. They must be cold! Even though the sun had risen, it was weak. The temperature wouldn’t rise above freezing until Spring.

He reached the pond, small but deep and a favourite spot for young lovers. A local “Casanova”, he’d been here only last night.

She shouldn’t have rejected him but the ice, as he had hoped, was completely opaque. He’d be hundreds of miles away before they found the body.

Such a beautiful day!

  1. Ain Starlingsson
    August 4, 2021 at 12:49 pm

    Great build up…ordinary Gary….in fact a cold blooded probable serial killer…

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    • August 5, 2021 at 6:38 am

      Yes, I’m guessing she’s not the only unfortunate victim.

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  2. August 4, 2021 at 12:58 pm

    Oh that last line packs a punch. Great story, Ali!

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    • August 5, 2021 at 7:28 am

      Thanks! It doesn’t seem to be bothering him at all.

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  3. August 4, 2021 at 1:20 pm

    Perhaps he should have taken her somewhere warmer

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    • August 5, 2021 at 7:32 am

      He could have dug a proper grave then.

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  4. August 4, 2021 at 2:04 pm

    Great story, though not for her.

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    • August 5, 2021 at 7:33 am

      No, definitely not for her 😦 Thanks!

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  5. August 4, 2021 at 3:41 pm

    That was a great dark and twisty story well done.

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  6. August 4, 2021 at 4:03 pm

    Great (evil) minds think alike 😉 (read my story and you’ll understand)

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    • August 5, 2021 at 7:38 am

      Yes, we went down very similar paths. You have ended with quite a mystery, though!

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  7. August 4, 2021 at 4:23 pm

    I wonder where the other bodies are….

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  8. Michael Humphris
    August 4, 2021 at 7:20 pm

    O dear, I hope that a unseasonal thaw sets in straight away.🙂

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    • August 5, 2021 at 7:40 am

      That might put the authorities on his trail for sure.

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  9. August 4, 2021 at 8:31 pm

    Maybe not hundreds of miles away after all.

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    • August 5, 2021 at 7:41 am

      As long as the ice doesn’t thaw, he’ll be okay.

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  10. August 4, 2021 at 9:33 pm

    Such a beautiful day – ouch!

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    • August 5, 2021 at 7:46 am

      He doesn’t seem at all bothered by his evil deeds.

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  11. August 5, 2021 at 9:46 am

    Nor harm in checking out your handiwork. I like a thorough assassin.

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    • August 5, 2021 at 2:34 pm

      He needs to make sure everything is neat and tidy before hitting the road.

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  12. August 5, 2021 at 9:48 am

    I suspect in the springtime a few bodies will pop up to the surface of the pond. Gary sounds like a nice guy, you know the type who you enjoy watching as he sits on the electric chair.
    I like how you lead us into the event through the view of a beautiful winter’s day.

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    • August 5, 2021 at 2:37 pm

      Yes, I’m guessing she’s not the only one. Maybe one day he’ll fry!

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  13. August 5, 2021 at 10:17 am

    Ugh, what a piece of …. The repetition of the ‘beautiful day’ line makes this especially powerful.

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    • August 5, 2021 at 2:43 pm

      Thanks, I had to cut some words elsewhere to get that in at the end 🙂

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  14. Lyn
    August 5, 2021 at 10:33 am

    Now there’s the Ali we know and love 😁

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  15. August 5, 2021 at 11:22 am

    It seems that she left an….. um…. impression up there on the ice. At least that evidence will melt as well…

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  16. August 5, 2021 at 1:21 pm

    What a cruel casanova. Great story.

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  17. August 5, 2021 at 1:32 pm

    His heart is as cold as that ice. Well told.

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    • August 5, 2021 at 2:48 pm

      It is, thanks. One of those people who have no conscience or feelings.

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  18. August 5, 2021 at 3:05 pm

    Dear Ali,

    Now that’s a COLD blooded killer. nICEly done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • August 6, 2021 at 7:19 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      For sure. He seems to have no conscience or feelings at all.
      “nICEly” 🙂
      Ali

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  19. August 5, 2021 at 3:12 pm

    So, it was her own fault for not falling for his Casanovic charms!

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  20. August 5, 2021 at 4:43 pm

    it wasn’t what i expected. i guess he couldn’t no for an answer. poor girl.

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  21. August 6, 2021 at 2:15 pm

    Chilling story. Gives a new grim take on ‘deep frozen!

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    • August 7, 2021 at 4:24 am

      Chilling in more ways then one 😮

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  22. August 6, 2021 at 3:57 pm

    I hope his victim told someone where she’d be and with whom. Gary needs taking off the streets – permanently.

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    • August 7, 2021 at 4:25 am

      He does, hopefully they will soon be on his trail.

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  23. August 6, 2021 at 8:14 pm

    Ooh! Good one. That’s extra sneaky coming from you. No puns or silly dialogue. That’s a double twist.

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  24. August 7, 2021 at 9:05 am

    What a creep….but a good story, Draliman😸Pawkisses for a Happy Weekend🐾😽💞

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  25. August 9, 2021 at 5:04 am

    What a cold heart… Twist, she comes back to life and hunts him down.

    Great story A.

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    • August 9, 2021 at 5:21 am

      Maybe with her dying breath she made a deal with “dark forces” to allow her her revenge…

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  26. August 9, 2021 at 3:46 pm

    Such a beautiful day–such a hideous man!

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