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FF – The Little Things

Here is my post for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by Dale Rogerson.

I nearly did quite a sombre thoughtful story, but luckily I caught myself just in time!

Copyright Dale Rogerson

“So the cult’s taken over this church?”

“Yes, Sarge.”

“Let’s take a look. See that flash of light in the steeple? Sniper.”

“Good spot, Sarge!”

“And that bump on the roof? Observation post.”

“Nice, Sarge!”

“And the way that tree’s branches aren’t moving with the wind? Hunter’s trap.”

“Wow!”

“Okay, I’m going in!”

Whuuuump! Aaaaargh!

“Ouch. Poor Sarge.”

“What happened, Constable?”

“Sir! It’s weird how the Sarge noticed the little things but not the big picture. Like that huge sign that says ‘Keep out – DANGER – minefield’.”

“Sounds like my wife.”

“Um. ‘Little things’ or ‘danger’, Sir?”

“Both, Constable. Both.”

  1. September 29, 2021 at 7:11 pm

    Wood and trees. Which is why it’s always best to team up with someone else who sees things the other way

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  2. September 29, 2021 at 7:31 pm

    😀 If it was a snake it would have bitten him!

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  3. September 29, 2021 at 7:53 pm

    bwahahaha! poor fella 😀

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    • September 30, 2021 at 5:38 am

      He was so sure he had the situation all sussed out 🙂

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  4. September 29, 2021 at 8:28 pm

    Pity the Sarge only had a bit part!

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  5. September 29, 2021 at 9:02 pm

    Ha! A ‘miner’ oversight.

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  6. September 30, 2021 at 1:01 am

    I’m glad you caught yourself in time. Maybe he thought the warning was a metaphor?

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  7. September 30, 2021 at 1:28 am

    Ali,
    This tale plays almost like a Greek tragedy — the hero’s fatal flaw of hubris, the chorus egging him on, and the moral lesson to be drawn. Of course, a Greek tragedy never makes you laugh like a hyena. So good.
    pax,
    dora

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    • September 30, 2021 at 5:47 am

      A complex multi-layered story 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!

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  8. September 30, 2021 at 5:48 am

    live and learn. it not careful, may not be as lucky next time around. 🙂

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    • October 1, 2021 at 7:32 am

      He got blown up so he wasn’t very lucky this time either 🙂

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  9. September 30, 2021 at 6:27 am

    I’d be more worried about the wife.

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  10. September 30, 2021 at 7:53 am

    Too busy looking to see. 🙂

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  11. September 30, 2021 at 10:41 am

    The sign was probably left over from before the cult took over..

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  12. September 30, 2021 at 2:33 pm

    As I grin and roll my eyes, clever story. Enjoyed it.

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  13. September 30, 2021 at 2:58 pm

    That’s why you need more than one person to survey… laughing over here… poor Sarge

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    • October 1, 2021 at 7:42 am

      If only Sarge had asked his colleague before rushing in 🙂

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      • October 1, 2021 at 1:44 pm

        Some are so busy being the know-it-all… they miss, big-time, when they aren’t!

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  14. September 30, 2021 at 3:51 pm

    How funny, in a sad sort of way. Too bad for Sarge.

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    • October 1, 2021 at 7:46 am

      Yes, Sarge has spotted his last sniper 😦

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  15. Bear
    September 30, 2021 at 8:01 pm

    Sometimes… snorting laughter…

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  16. October 1, 2021 at 8:41 am

    Comparing his wife to a danger zone is just asking for trouble. A true comedy of errors.

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  17. October 1, 2021 at 11:21 am

    Hilarious. Poor Sarge though. I’m seeing this in my mind with Monty Python as the cast…

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    • October 1, 2021 at 2:08 pm

      John Cleese would make a good Sarge 🙂

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  18. October 1, 2021 at 12:32 pm

    Dear Ali,

    I wonder what the wife has to say about her husband.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • October 1, 2021 at 2:11 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      I shudder to think!
      Ali

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  19. October 1, 2021 at 3:20 pm

    Such a tragic tale, I really feel sorry for him, after all, who would want a wife like that?

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    • October 2, 2021 at 4:51 am

      I guess he can escape her by following in the Sarge’s footsteps 🙂

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  20. October 1, 2021 at 6:03 pm

    Excellent dialogue. Poor Sarge.

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  21. October 1, 2021 at 10:54 pm

    Poor guy, got a little cocky maybe and didn’t see the neon sign. A very unique and clever story, Ali, as always!

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    • October 2, 2021 at 4:54 am

      He excelled at spotting things others missed Unfortunately the reverse was also true 😦

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  22. October 1, 2021 at 11:58 pm

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  23. October 2, 2021 at 4:27 pm

    I love the punchline!

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  24. October 2, 2021 at 6:05 pm

    We all have our blind spots!

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  25. October 2, 2021 at 6:08 pm

    That wife has power, scary power…MOL..Pawkisses for a Happy Weekend🐾😽💞

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  26. October 3, 2021 at 6:11 pm

    Oh dear, I want to say ‘fools rush in ! ‘ Being a bit old fashioned. Reckon some people are oblivious to what’s really going on.

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    • October 4, 2021 at 6:15 am

      This fool rushed in and blew up 😦 I’m surprised he made it all the way to “sarge”.

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  27. October 5, 2021 at 6:35 pm

    Ha, poor Sarge … and it was NOT very nice that he was not warned … Well done, you!

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