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FF – Eternal Vista

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by Bradley Harris.

Copyright Bradley Harris

He gazed out over the beautiful vista before him, feeling his heart rate decrease, his blood pressure lower as he found serenity. The lapping waves, the sun shining off the bottom of the clouds, the lush, green grass. The corpse at his feet.

Oh, mate. When I said ‘what’s mine is yours’, I didn’t mean my wife.

He’d bury him here, he thought. Such a lovely view to enjoy for eternity.

Don’t worry, mate, you won’t be stuck here all alone for long. I’ve brought company.

With that in mind, he returned to the car to fetch his cheating wife.

  1. January 13, 2022 at 10:07 am

    That’s nice of him. A killer with the sensibility of a funeral director selling burial plots

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  2. January 13, 2022 at 10:27 am

    At least their view is heavenly and they will always be together now.

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  3. January 13, 2022 at 11:30 am

    Nice! But not for the two lovers.

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  4. January 13, 2022 at 11:57 am

    I find that double murder lowers my blood pressure as well….

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    • January 14, 2022 at 11:35 am

      There’s something relaxing in permanently tidying up loose ends…

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  5. January 13, 2022 at 2:41 pm

    A bright and breezy murderer. It seems he took the news badly when he found out…

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  6. January 13, 2022 at 5:09 pm

    A very nice as well as efficient way of solving the problem.

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  7. January 14, 2022 at 12:55 am

    if that’s his way of moving on, you can count me out. 🙂

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  8. January 14, 2022 at 1:20 am

    Well, I’m happy to know everything worked out well. 🙂

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  9. Lyn
    January 14, 2022 at 4:34 am

    Let’s hope he buries them below the high tide line. Preferably where there is a lot of crab activity. 🦀

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    • January 14, 2022 at 11:47 am

      That would be nice treat for our crustaceaous friends 🙂

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  10. January 14, 2022 at 6:29 am

    What Lyn said…
    Something rather karmic about this story. Moral: don’t cheat.

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    • January 14, 2022 at 11:47 am

      Yep. Though usually marriage counselling or divorce is the preferred solution.

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  11. January 14, 2022 at 6:40 am

    I like how quickly you dropped the bomb. I can’t argue with the final resting place he chose for them. It’s quite lovely.

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  12. January 14, 2022 at 1:28 pm

    Why didn’t I think of that when my wife cheated?

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  13. Bear
    January 14, 2022 at 2:25 pm

    ouch. Good one.

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  14. January 14, 2022 at 4:18 pm

    What a beautiful, relaxing story. 😉 Who doesn’t love a murderer with a sense for aesthetics.

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  15. January 14, 2022 at 7:58 pm

    How lovely of him to put them together… And to give them such prime real estate to boot? Sweet…

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  16. January 14, 2022 at 10:21 pm

    Oy vey, sometimes the cheaters are less evil than the cheated …

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  17. January 14, 2022 at 10:30 pm

    He handled that well. After how they treated him, he was kind enough to give them that beautiful view and let them be together. Very mature. Other than the murder bit, of course.

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  18. January 15, 2022 at 4:09 am

    Yikes!

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  19. January 15, 2022 at 6:05 pm

    Moral – never trust a chap who says ‘What’s mine is yours’. Especially if he’s a psychopath. Well written story, Ali.

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    • January 16, 2022 at 6:27 am

      Yes, it’s almost a deliberate temptation to see how far someone will go.

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  20. January 15, 2022 at 10:02 pm

    Dear Ali,

    At least he chose a peaceful resting place for them.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • January 16, 2022 at 6:28 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      There is that…
      Ali

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  21. January 16, 2022 at 7:24 am

    Wow! Quite a shock when the corpse appeared out of the blue. And now I’m wondering – has the ‘cheating wife’ in the back seat already been dispatched or is he going to finish her off on the spot?

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  22. January 16, 2022 at 7:21 pm

    Hahahaha! when I first started reading your piece I was think how interesting it was that some people took this picture as peaceful and serene while others did not…You kindof threw me for a loop!

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  23. January 17, 2022 at 2:07 pm

    Brilliant story – nice and tight in the plotting with a few surprises and an oddly appealing murderer.

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  24. January 18, 2022 at 8:34 am

    How considerate of him to consider their view for eternity! Maybe it’s not the best idea to bury them in the sand…

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    • January 19, 2022 at 7:08 am

      Maybe they’ll slip slide away when the tide comes in and get a nice sea trip as well.

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  25. January 18, 2022 at 3:44 pm

    Well there’s nothing wrong with his logistics. Might be a tad short in the humanity stakes but it’s not a deal breaker.

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    • January 19, 2022 at 7:09 am

      You can’t have everything, I guess. Swings and roundabouts…

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  26. January 19, 2022 at 7:20 am

    …well…at least they have a great view🙊Great story! Extra Pawkisses🐾😽💞

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  27. January 19, 2022 at 8:44 pm

    I loved this one… I am not sure what that says about me? Well done!

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