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New Flesh

It’s Friday and that means it’s time for Friday Fictioneers!

The goal is to write approximately 100 words, inspired by a photo which this week has been contributed by DLovering. Our host as always is Rochelle.

You can read all the other stories for this week by clicking on the little blue froggy. Here he is!

I’ve edited this a gazillion times and I’m still not entirely happy (I need about 30 more words!), but here it is anyway.

What with all this stuff at work I’m way behind with my reading but I promise I will try to catch up!

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Copyright DLovering

The festival was over. For Manuel it had been most profitable. Wallets, assorted watches, rings… one ring caught his attention. It looked old. Really old. There was an inscription, written in a script he had never seen before.

He’d taken it from an old, gaunt man whose skin had felt like paper, and so cold – wrong somehow – as Manuel had crushed the life from him.

He put the ring on, suppressing a shudder as it seemed to melt into his flesh.

Far away, Galchallon, Lord of the Dark, smiled. New flesh to do his bidding. A new soul upon which to feast.


 

Yes, I know, I went with yet another demonic possession. Weird, huh? What’s going on in this head of mine?

  1. NotAPunkRocker
    April 11, 2014 at 8:00 pm

    Demonic possessions aren’t a bad thing in this case. If you do it again next week, then we may start to worry about you 😉

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    • April 12, 2014 at 4:33 am

      I’ll do something else next week. Maybe a comedy demonic possession, in which the hideous demon X’Argchakoffle makes his minions do hilarious things at inopportune moments 🙂

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      • NotAPunkRocker
        April 12, 2014 at 10:30 am

        Now, are you sure you aren’t really Joss Whedon?

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      • April 12, 2014 at 10:50 am

        Yeeks, my secret is out!
        Coincidentally, I just shoved a Buffy in the DVD player to watch while I eat my lunch 🙂

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      • NotAPunkRocker
        April 12, 2014 at 10:51 am

        Too cool! Enjoy! 😀

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      • April 12, 2014 at 10:53 am

        It’s series 6 (which I found when I moved house) near the end – Willow’s about to go after Warren on full magic overload. Woohoo 🙂

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      • NotAPunkRocker
        April 12, 2014 at 10:57 am

        Two To Go? Or something like that…

        I think after that season I wasn’t as happy with the show but then again, what else could they do now? Still good, subpar Buffy is still better than most things!

        Have fun!

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      • April 12, 2014 at 10:58 am

        Not the best series (though I loved the musical episode, I love musicals), then series 7 went very dark, but as you say still good viewing!

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      • NotAPunkRocker
        April 12, 2014 at 11:01 am

        Once More With Feeling is what I was thinking of when I wrote my original comment…so we’ve come full circle!

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  2. April 11, 2014 at 8:35 pm

    I decided to drop down to the last story and work my way back to where I left of, just for some variety. And I found variety in your look at the prompt. I like it. Although now I think I hear, “Put on the ring.” 🙂

    janet

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    • April 12, 2014 at 4:34 am

      I think once the ring is on, it stays on!

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  3. April 11, 2014 at 9:25 pm

    Methinks he will live, then die, to regret such thievery and murder!

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  4. April 12, 2014 at 1:42 am

    I tend to agree with Freya. He’ll go on living, but he’ll be wishing he were dead.

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    • April 12, 2014 at 4:37 am

      I think Manuel will have a great time at first, until the reality of what is happening sinks in. Then I’m sure he will spend the rest of his life wanting to die.

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  5. April 12, 2014 at 2:06 am

    Oh Drailman, this is so good! The thief will be doing the bidding of another from now on. At least he released the last guy from misery (I hope). Good job and well done! Nan

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    • April 12, 2014 at 4:39 am

      I think the demon has indeed finished with the last guy. Sucked dry and discarded – now it’s Manuel’s turn.
      I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  6. April 12, 2014 at 6:22 am

    Another great & creepy tale. What a vivid imagination you have. He got his just desserts lol 🙂

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    • April 12, 2014 at 7:28 am

      He certainly did! Karma got him in the end.

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  7. April 12, 2014 at 7:20 am

    I think all of the editing paid off! I loved the shudder as it melted into his flesh and evil Galchallon. Brilliant.

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    • April 12, 2014 at 7:28 am

      Thanks! That ring is evidently not going to come off 🙂

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  8. April 12, 2014 at 9:30 am

    Hey, demon possession is a goldmine of fodder. You could write about it in a million ways, and it’ll always be fun. (At least that’s my take on it, hehe). Just goes to show what happens when you thieve your way to riches. A demon will go and take advantage of ya.

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    • April 12, 2014 at 9:48 am

      Thanks for forgiving my second demon possession in a row! They are fun (if they’re not real, of course dum dum DUM) 🙂
      The demons always have their eyes peeled, waiting for the right “candidate”.

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  9. April 12, 2014 at 1:34 pm

    I like this. Very cool indeed!

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    • April 12, 2014 at 3:03 pm

      Thanks! Manuel’s in for a rough time, I think.

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  10. April 12, 2014 at 4:55 pm

    such an irony. manuel became a victim himself.

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  11. April 12, 2014 at 5:37 pm

    serves him right for robbing an old man! the cold papery skin is really creepy and the idea of killing someone/something that’s already cold.

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    • April 13, 2014 at 4:59 am

      I’m thinking all this is now in Manuel’s future. I have no sympathy for him either!

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      • April 19, 2014 at 12:33 am

        it’s quite possible. 🙂 Al, i know you like the horror genre and i was wondering if you’d be interested in an advanced review copy of 100 Nightmares, in exchange for a review on amazon or smashwords and goodreads (whichever you prefer). you’ll get a free epub version before it hits Amazon/Smashwords. Let me know. crazyaboutmiumiu2@yahoo.com thank you! 🙂

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      • April 19, 2014 at 6:05 am

        I’ve sent you an email re. 100 Nightmares.

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      • April 19, 2014 at 12:36 am

        alternately, you can send me a message via my FB page 🙂 thanks 🙂

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  12. April 12, 2014 at 8:11 pm

    AH.. the thief ripes his reward.. I can see Manuel wither as his flesh is slowly consumed in deamon possesion.

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    • April 13, 2014 at 5:01 am

      Soon he’ll be just like the previous wearer of the ring, with a similar fate in store I expect.

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  13. April 13, 2014 at 8:51 am

    I’m a sucker for this kind of tale: old rings, ancient men, … a wrong’un to be banged to rights … Well done. This could be expanded. 🙂

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    • April 13, 2014 at 1:58 pm

      He’s certainly going to get what’s coming to him!
      I think after reading Lord of the Rings decades ago I also fell in love with rings of ancient power.

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      • April 20, 2014 at 4:05 pm

        I never thought of Lord of the Rings! But, of course.

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  14. April 13, 2014 at 9:57 am

    Dear Ali, my precious,

    First you have my undying affection for editing “a gazillion times.” I thought your story worked well. And it’s serves Manuel right for taking what he’s done.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • April 13, 2014 at 2:01 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      I think the work limit is ideal for forcing us to polish our stories. With the original story, which was well over the limit, the story worked, but once I’d been forced to cut it down by editing over and over, needing to reword the whole thing to make it fit, it was a whole lot better!

      I like it when nasty dudes get their comeuppance 🙂
      Ali

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  15. April 13, 2014 at 11:32 am

    Al, you’ve done it again. You’ve brought a demon to possess someone. 🙂 This guy seemed to deserve it though. Stephen King has been writing horror for years and no one complains, so you don’t always have to switch to a different genre if you’re doing well. Of course, if you want to try something else that okay also. I personally switch sometimes with the different prompts. Well done. 🙂

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    • April 13, 2014 at 2:05 pm

      I’m currently watching Buffy from start to finish – I think it’s influencing my stories 🙂
      I’d certainly like to try some humour again soon, I’m just waiting for a photo to spark one off. But true, I’m certainly not the only one (even within FF) who does several horror stories in a row.
      Thanks 🙂

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  16. Dee
    April 13, 2014 at 3:49 pm

    Ooh I think Manuel will regret his thieving. Thoroughly enjoyed this.

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    • April 13, 2014 at 4:04 pm

      I think he will! I’m glad you enjoyed it.

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  17. Sun
    April 14, 2014 at 2:25 am

    some characters never learn do they…crime never pays.

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  18. April 14, 2014 at 5:27 am

    What a waste. No respect for the hard working thieves in here.

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    • April 14, 2014 at 12:26 pm

      He’s just trying to make a living after all 🙂

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  19. April 14, 2014 at 3:46 pm

    Some fun comments above. Great story. Fun.

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    • April 14, 2014 at 3:48 pm

      Nothing like a bit of “he got what he deserved” now and again.

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  20. April 14, 2014 at 7:45 pm

    OMG!This is terrific DR-loved it and the chills it gave me!Specially loved ,”skin had felt like paper, and so cold – wrong somehow ” and of course the title just creeped me out! 😀

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    • April 15, 2014 at 10:12 am

      Thanks!
      There’s something about referring to people as “flesh” that makes it clear nothing good is going to happen 🙂

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      • April 16, 2014 at 6:15 am

        Yikes! 🙂

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      • April 16, 2014 at 3:40 pm

        Yikes indeedy 🙂

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      • April 16, 2014 at 5:53 pm

        🙂

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  21. April 16, 2014 at 10:27 am

    Hi Al, enjoyed the story and I certainly don’t mind a bit of demonic possession here and there. I don’t know what the body count this week in FF would be or if it is going up or down from previous weeks, but it might be funny if someone (not me) compiled the stats. 🙂

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    • April 16, 2014 at 3:41 pm

      Yeah, that would be a fun stat to track!

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