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Mondays Finish the Story – Triple Six

It’s time for Mondays Finish the Story – a weekly 100-150 word challenge run by Barbara Beacham where we write a story based on both a photograph and an opening sentence (the opening sentence is free, word-count-wise!).

Sorry if it sounds a wee bit clunky, I had to strip 50 words out :-(. And it’s not very Chrismassy, I’m afraid 😦 :-(.

Click on the blue frog to see other contributions for this week.

The supplied opening sentence is in bold in my story, which is beneath the photo.

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As the year wound down to a close, they gathered around the table and raised their glasses.

“As is our custom at year’s end, let us welcome a new member. To Simeon!”

Simeon smiled. At last – inducted into the secretive “Order of the Triple Six”!

For years he had made himself useful to the Order. None knew what they did, only that their association made one rich, powerful.

As they toasted his entry, Simeon noticed that the others were sweating, nervous, scared even. As he watched, one of the Order gazed in horror at his drink, then choked, fighting for breath. He fell to the floor, twitching. Blood sprayed from his mouth and he spasmed, face black, eyes staring sightlessly at the ceiling.

Simeon dropped his glass in shock.

“There can be only Six,” intoned one.

“One in, one out,” added another.

“B…b…but why Triple Six?” stammered Simeon, shocked.

“Ah, yes. Triple Six. 666. Why don’t we take you to meet our patron?” smiled a third.

  1. December 23, 2014 at 7:19 pm

    Once again well written, somewhat morbid, and a bit shocking (well not really I’m getting used to it)!!! awesome job. However I do wonder about the way your brain works, Ali my dear. Just saying…

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    • December 23, 2014 at 7:26 pm

      Thanks! Yes, not much Christmas Spirit in evidence (unless you count the contents of the glasses!).
      My brain works in ways best not analysed 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it anyway!

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  2. December 23, 2014 at 7:59 pm

    I think I worked for that guy. Maybe twice.

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  3. December 23, 2014 at 8:15 pm

    I was not expecting that! Great story! Thank you again for participating! See you next week? Be well and happy holidays! ^..^

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    • December 23, 2014 at 8:23 pm

      Thanks! It was a stroke of luck that there were 7 people in the picture 🙂
      Happy holidays to you too!

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  4. December 23, 2014 at 10:14 pm

    Death by drink seems to be a popular way to end the year.

    DJ

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  5. December 24, 2014 at 1:00 am

    sounds fun to do. I really like your story!

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    • December 24, 2014 at 8:12 am

      It is fun! Give it a go if you like 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it.

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  6. December 24, 2014 at 3:22 am

    Russian roulette with glasses…. that’s great! More rich and powerful people need to try this game!

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    • December 24, 2014 at 3:23 am

      Oh, your card did arrive in time as well! 🙂

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    • December 24, 2014 at 8:12 am

      That would be fun. Like a more civilised version of the Hunger Games. The Thirsty Games we could call it.

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  7. December 24, 2014 at 4:32 am

    Yikes! Good one!

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  8. December 24, 2014 at 6:16 am

    Ali, He should have researched a bit farther into the triple 6. You don’t mess with that guy. Good, although dark, story and well written. Happy Holidays! 🙂 — Suzanne

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    • December 24, 2014 at 8:17 am

      I reckon he tried but they’re pretty much under the radar officially. I think his only way out now is to be unlucky next year 😦
      Glad you liked it (even if it wasn’t exactly very Christmassy!).
      Happy holidays to you too!

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  9. Aileen
    December 24, 2014 at 9:31 am

    I love the way your creative mind works 🙂

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    • December 24, 2014 at 9:53 am

      Thanks 🙂
      I couldn’t believe my luck when I saw the “correct” number of people in the photo for my story!

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  10. merbear74
    December 24, 2014 at 2:09 pm

    Nice!

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  11. December 24, 2014 at 6:55 pm

    Great story, you could really twist it if their patron was Santa but he really works for the tax bureau during the off season 🙂

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    • December 25, 2014 at 6:50 am

      That sounds fun. Ah, for 100 more words…
      I always wondered what he did the rest of the year 🙂

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  12. December 24, 2014 at 9:04 pm

    Oh my but he has gotten into a fine place has he not. So much for not knowing what they did. Great story, loved the build up. Merry Christmas.

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    • December 25, 2014 at 6:56 am

      Yes, the only way out now is not something he would choose.
      Glad you liked it, and Merry Christmas!

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  13. December 26, 2014 at 7:14 am

    Ah.. Great one. We both thought about a similar master.. Wonder if the cheered in triple sec..

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    • December 26, 2014 at 7:19 am

      We did indeed. There’s a lot of these types about.

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  14. December 29, 2014 at 4:52 pm

    Creative as always.

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