The Great Escape
It’s Mondays Finish the Story time here on draliman’s blog. This is hosted by Barbara Beacham in which we get a photo and a starting sentence and have to write a 100-150 word story (not counting the starting sentence).
Click on the little blue froggy to see all this week’s contributions. The supplied starting sentence is in bold in my story. It’s a little bit o’ dialogue this week.
They finally made their escape. Unfortunately, they were now stuck in a ditch.
“Moron!” yelled Teddy.
“Idiot!” yelled Brian.
They sat in silence for a moment.
“What now?” asked Teddy. “They’ll catch us for sure.”
“Try it again,” said Brian.
Teddy pushed the pedal. The wheels spun. The truck didn’t move.
“We’re dead,” moaned Brian. “They’ll catch us, then they’ll kill us.”
“Or they’ll lock us away forever,” added Teddy.
They stared at each other.
“Maybe if you got out and pushed?”
“You get out and push!” yelled Brian.
More silence.
“Let’s get out of here,” said Teddy finally.
“Too late,” said Brian, looking behind them.
Racing up the road came Mr Jenkins in his tracksuit. Much further back was Mr Hawkins, huffing and puffing and clutching his chest.
“Idiot children!” yelled Mr Jenkins. “You could’ve been killed! We’re calling your parents, then it’s detention FOR LIFE!”
“Said so,” mumbled Teddy sadly. “Locked up forever.”
😆
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Kids!
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Grounded…just like me 😀 Pawkisses 🙂 ❤
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Oh no! Have you been naughty, Little Binky? 🙂
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Lovely set up and great voices. I’d be asking how it is the wayward teachers allowed those two to get into a vehicle. And as for threatening detention for life. Honestly, adults are so stupid. They’ll all have left school before life’s over.
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I’m guessing someone left their keys lying around.
Some adults love hyperbole, especially when they’re real mad 🙂
Glad you liked it!
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I think I am still grounded when I did that! LOL! Great dialog! Thank you for participating and stay tuned for next Monday’s challenge! Be well! ^..^
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You should still be grounded if you did that 🙂
Looking forward to next week’s challenge!
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Ah the hyperbole of youth 🙂 They probably deserve detention for life.
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For sure. Naughty rascals 🙂
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Funny story, Ali. It reminds me of hearing how in high school the driving teacher got out for some reason and the students took off without him. They said he was running behind and shouting. Poor man. 🙂 — Suzanne
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I wish I’d seen that, it sounds hilarious 🙂
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I heard some of the class laughing about it. It wasn’t during my class. He was such a nice man I felt a little sorry for him, but it was still hilarious. 😀
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Very good, enjoyed this one. Kids will be kids.
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Glad you liked it! Just a part of growing up 🙂
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So very glad I didn’t have to deal with this situation with M.
His cousin, on the other hand… 🙂
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Ooh, a wayward cousin 🙂
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That would be a great way to keep troubled kids from becoming troubled adults…. detention for LIFE! The only way they’ll be leaving the school basement is in a coffin…
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Now I have an image of a bunch of aged men rambling around a basement under a school somewhere.
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Yes! Wearing the same outfits that all of the other little hooligans of the 1930’s wore… only they probably wouldn’t fit as well now!
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Now my mental image has become more vivid and massively creepier 🙂
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DrAli … story, story, story about basement boys, please.
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Typical teenagers! You captured it perfectly!
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Thanks! That’s kids for you.
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Thanks but you can keep him. 😀
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Such cool dialog. I really liked it. My daughter was grounded for life once when she dress up in black goth clothing with skull and crossbones for an interview at a Christian middle school. Those were the days. She’s married with kids now and her turn will come before long. Ha Ha.
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Ha, I wish I could have seen the interviewers’ faces (if she made it that far, or did you catch her in time?) 🙂
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No. I was working and she was to bicycle to the interview so I had no idea until I got the letter telling me “…she would be a bad influence on the other.” When I asked her what that meant, she fessed up. Glad those days are passed.
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Oh crumbs 🙂
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Hmm … cute.
I applaud gutsy kids. I’m sick.
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There’s a fine line between gutsy and naughty!
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HaHa! I needed a laff! 😀
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Glad I made you smile!
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Great! Love to know what they did. The “Detention for life” priceless for adults not knowing what else to do!
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I’m sure they were exaggerating… 😉
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Thanks for the morning chuckle! Well done!
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Glad you liked it and it made you smile 🙂
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Liked the tension and the twist. Very cool.
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Thanks, glad you liked it!
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Superb inter-peer dialogue ~ Then the approach of the pursuers panting for breath ~A great story ~ Lines and detention all round 🙂
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked their interactions.
I figured one of the teachers could be PE (phys. ed.) in the tracksuit so the other must be some out of shape maths teacher or something 🙂
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Great dialogue and very funny. Is this, by any chance, based on one of your own boyhood escapades? Haha. I love the repeated idea – ‘locked up forever.’ Nice one.
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Ha, no. I was a good little boy 😉
I’m glad you liked the “locked up forever” thing – I had to cut a few other words to make sure I got that in.
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Major Time Out!
DJ
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🙂
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Love this! Typical kids making mischief. 🙂 You catch their voices really well.
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Thanks. They saw their chance for fun, they took it 🙂
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Ha, boarding schools is as good as prison
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These boys certainly thought so. It doesn’t sound like they made it very far in their escape attempt, though! If I’d had more words, I would have described how one was steering and one working the pedals, but sadly my 150 words ran out.
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Haha! Loved the dialog in this. I can picture it easily. Gave me a good laugh. 🙂
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I can see the boys thinking “We’re gonna be in so much trouble” and wondering if possibly it wasn’t such a great idea as it seemed at the start.
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