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Moving On

Here is my contribution to Friday Fictioneers, the weekly 100-ish word flash fiction challenge hosted by Rochelle. This week’s picture comes from David Stewart.

I’m still in a weird mood but here’s a bit of odd dialogue for you. I had a whole run of comedies and then recently it’s all gone a bit sombre. Hey ho.

For this week’s other stories, click on the little blue froggy. Here he is!


Copyright David Stewart


“The horn player’s out of tune.”

“He is a bit. You’re right.”

“That used to be me, you know. Before my lungs began to fail.”

“I know. You were good.”

“I was. I was good. Not like that fellow.”

“I’m sure he’ll improve with time. You weren’t always good, were you?”

“I suppose not. Will there be a brass band where I’m going?”

“I don’t know.”

“Why don’t you know? You’re an angel.”

“‘Facilitator’. I told you. I help you move on. That’s all. Where you go is a mystery to me. But I’m sure you’ll find your brass band.”


  1. March 25, 2015 at 8:44 pm

    I really like this one 🙂


    • March 26, 2015 at 8:06 am

      I’m glad 🙂 Thanks for reading!


  2. March 25, 2015 at 9:02 pm

    Funny one! Like it


  3. March 25, 2015 at 9:20 pm

    No harps? Brass? Out of tune brass? A cacophony of heavenly trumpets?


    • March 26, 2015 at 8:06 am

      I’m sure there will be when he gets there. He’ll be in tune, of course.


  4. March 25, 2015 at 9:36 pm

    This made me laugh! Even “angels” have fancy names for their ‘job’.


    • March 26, 2015 at 8:08 am

      They have to move with the times! He probably works for “HR” (Heavenly Resources).

      Liked by 1 person

  5. March 25, 2015 at 9:46 pm

    Great story. Hope he finds his brass band!! The alternative is probably not so good.


    • March 26, 2015 at 8:09 am

      Very true. I think he’ll go “up the way” and find his band.
      Glad you liked it!


  6. March 25, 2015 at 9:48 pm

    This somehow reminds me of a cartoon I once saw – The devil saying “Welcome to hell. Here’s your accordion” to a man who had passed on. Your piece made me smile.


    • March 26, 2015 at 8:10 am

      I’m glad it made you smile! I wouldn’t fancy spending eternity trying to get grips with an accordion.


  7. March 25, 2015 at 11:28 pm

    Heaven is doing what you love even after death. I’m going to paint.
    Brass bands are great.


  8. NotAPunkRocker
    March 25, 2015 at 11:33 pm

    This reminds me a little bit of one of my favorite Twilight Zone episodes, “A Nice Place to Visit”. Also, “The Music Man” 🙂


    • March 26, 2015 at 8:12 am

      I’ve been watching a lot of “Dead Like Me” on Netflix. I think it influenced me 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  9. March 26, 2015 at 2:21 am

    I find your sombre comedic.


  10. March 26, 2015 at 3:08 am

    That’s all facilitators do! No, No, I’m not the instructor, I’m just the facilitator. Yea, right.



    • March 26, 2015 at 8:13 am

      Facilitators have a tendency to “forcibly guide” you until something goes wrong, then they can’t intervene because they’re only a facilitator. Grr.

      Liked by 1 person

  11. March 26, 2015 at 3:22 am

    Where he’ll meet his brass band in the sky…


  12. March 26, 2015 at 3:51 am

    Wouldn’t it be nice if we could have everything we want all the time? Good story! Nan


    • March 26, 2015 at 8:14 am

      That would be cool! Glad you liked it.


  13. March 26, 2015 at 5:02 am

    So maybe that hell of a band that’s in Rock and Roll Heaven has a brass section?


    • March 26, 2015 at 8:14 am

      I’m sure they’ll find a place for him and his horn.


  14. March 26, 2015 at 5:50 am

    How your mind makes the connection from photo to story is bizarre. Very you.
    I hope there is great food, handsome men and a small cabin in the trees. He can keep his brass band.


    • March 26, 2015 at 8:17 am

      Everybody gets their own version of heaven. I’ve been watching “Dead Like Me” on Netflix 🙂
      I never really know where my stories come from.


  15. March 26, 2015 at 7:09 am

    Dear Draliman,

    Not somber at all, but uplifting and heartfelt. I think you nailed it quite solidly, and yes, I agree with you about the brass band.




    • March 26, 2015 at 8:19 am

      Dear Doug,

      I’m glad you found it uplifting! There was definitely an air of hope and a light note to it. I tried to portray the “facilitator” as an ordinary Joe, just doing his job the best way he could.



  16. March 26, 2015 at 10:19 am

    It sounds like the afterlife is run like a government bureau. Funny piece with great dialogue. 😀 — Suzanne


    • March 26, 2015 at 1:19 pm

      Well, they have a lot to keep track of. I’m sure there’s a mountain of paperwork!
      Glad you liked it.


  17. March 26, 2015 at 11:31 am

    Thankfully, when the time comes, even facilitators can be music to one ears.


    • March 26, 2015 at 1:18 pm

      Definitely. Better than being stuck there not knowing what’s happening next.


  18. March 26, 2015 at 4:27 pm

    Well done Ali! I enjoyed your tale and the dialog is well written! Be well… ^..^


  19. March 26, 2015 at 5:05 pm

    I hope he finds a brass band wherever he’s going! Great dialogue – especially the final line: ‘“‘Facilitator’. I told you.’ 🙂


    • March 26, 2015 at 7:48 pm

      I hope so too. I think he will!
      I’m glad you liked it. It only took a few minutes to write but then ages trying to get the emphasis and so on correct 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  20. March 27, 2015 at 12:04 am

    a serious subject matter with a sprinkling of light humor to make it palatable. nice job.


  21. Lyn
    March 27, 2015 at 2:54 am

    Interesting take on the prompt, D-man. Nicely done 😀


    • March 27, 2015 at 8:11 am

      Thanks! I don’t know what made me think of it, but I’ve been watching a lot of “Dead Like Me” on Netflix so I have reapers on the brain.

      Liked by 1 person

  22. gentlestitches
    March 27, 2015 at 6:52 am

    I am in awe of what you can do in 100 words. That was great! 😀


  23. March 27, 2015 at 10:32 am

    Short.. concise…precise… Nicely done.


  24. March 27, 2015 at 10:34 am

    Dear Ali,

    There’s something very comforting about this story. Nicely done.




    • March 27, 2015 at 12:47 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      I think it’s quite comforting too. Someone waiting to help us when it’s our time.
      I’m glad you liked it.


  25. March 27, 2015 at 10:50 am

    I hate to break it to you, but you’ve be relegated to banjo–third chair. Sorry.
    I really loved this story. We all wonder if some of the things we enjoy in this life will be available to us in the next. You nailed it.


    • March 27, 2015 at 12:48 pm

      I hope it’s all true! And banjo third chair sounds about my musical level 🙂
      I’m glad you liked my story.


  26. March 27, 2015 at 8:44 pm

    Very interesting …loved how you wove this one.


  27. March 27, 2015 at 9:00 pm

    I love the idea of having Facilitators. It sounds so much more interesting than simply ‘angel’.Very clerical … technical too. I do hope he finds his brass band. 🙂


    • March 28, 2015 at 4:13 pm

      I’m sure there’s a bunch of paperwork for those guys to do – the angels needed help. I hope he finds his brass band too 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  28. March 27, 2015 at 9:24 pm

    Oh I hope there is a brass band – it seems like he deserves it.


    • March 28, 2015 at 4:14 pm

      I think he does and therefore there will be a brass band waiting for him.


  29. March 27, 2015 at 10:51 pm

    Very appealing story. Nice interplay between the two characters – I like them both. I’m sure he’ll enjoy his brand new set of lungs and will find a multitude of brass bands to join.


    • March 28, 2015 at 4:16 pm

      They are both likeable people I think. I reckon he’ll enjoy what’s to come 🙂


  30. March 28, 2015 at 6:39 am

    Great dialogue! I hope I have a good facilitator to guide me into the afrerlife!


    • March 28, 2015 at 4:18 pm

      I hope I do too! I’m glad you liked the dialogue, I enjoy writing it.


  31. March 29, 2015 at 10:09 pm

    Interesting! I wonder what the “life” of a Facilitator is like. I like the character of the person who’s passing.


    • March 30, 2015 at 11:38 am

      It’s probably at times uplifting and at others depressing. Much like life!
      The dead guy sounds quite easygoing.


  32. March 30, 2015 at 3:20 am

    Great banter. Very funny. I hope he finds his brass band.


    • March 30, 2015 at 11:38 am

      Thanks! I hope he find his band too, he sounds like quite a nice fellow.


  33. April 1, 2015 at 12:10 am

    I hope he found what he was hoping for, though I suspect the Facilitator was only trying to appease him so he would hurry up!


    • April 1, 2015 at 10:57 am

      That’s certainly a possibility. So many people to “facilitate”, so little time…


  34. April 2, 2015 at 7:33 pm

    I enjoyed the dialog, you wrote an excellent story.


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