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A Rocky Start

It’s time once again for my contribution to Friday Fictioneers, the weekly flash fiction challenge hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was supplied by Dee Lovering.

Apparently my story last week was “a bit dark”, so this one is a bit lighter :-). So here is my idyllic honeymoon story, ably aided by the inestimable Freddy Mercury.

To read this week’s other stories, click on the little blue froggy.

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Copyright Dee Lovering

 

“We’re here!” smiled Rex, bursting into song. “Baarrrcelo-onaaa, it was the first time that we met…”

“Quiet! People are staring!” His new wife looked embarrassed.

“Barcelo-onaaa, how can… ow! Ow!” Rex struggled to fend off Cassie’s handbag.

“Finished? Where’s this honeymoon cottage you booked, then?”

“Lisbon.”

“What? Why are we in Spain?”

“No idea,” smiled Rex. “I wondered at the time why you were booking tickets to Spain.”

“WE’RE IN THE WRONG COUNTRY!”

“Yes! Ah, Barcelona, home to… ow! Ow!”

 

An old couple watched them from a nearby café.

“Ouch, nasty,” commented the woman.

The man nodded sympathetically. “Must be married, love. I recognise the signs… ow! Ow!”

 

  1. Anxious Mom
    April 29, 2015 at 7:08 pm

    Haha! Sounds a bit like a conversation my husband and I had when we arrived in Mexico for our honeymoon.

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    • April 29, 2015 at 7:21 pm

      Hee hee, oh dear – you weren’t supposed to be in Costa Rica were you? 🙂

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      • Anxious Mom
        April 29, 2015 at 7:35 pm

        Lol! It was supposed to be Mexico but he took us to the airport that was about 3 hours away from our middle of nowhere resort and rented the most rickety old car to get us there.

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      • April 29, 2015 at 7:58 pm

        🙂 But I bet it was lovely once you arrived.

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      • Anxious Mom
        April 29, 2015 at 8:22 pm

        Indeed!

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  2. April 29, 2015 at 7:13 pm

    This young couple needs to work on their communication 🙂 Funny one!

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    • April 29, 2015 at 7:22 pm

      Yes, more words, fewer handbags :-). Thanks!

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  3. April 29, 2015 at 7:46 pm

    I’m sure they’ll have a wonderful time, once they get there. 🙂

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  4. April 29, 2015 at 7:52 pm

    Thanks for the smiles! Love does this sort of thing to people…and they don’t seem to mind. Now if they had been married for 20 years and this happened, OUCH (for real)! 😉

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    • April 29, 2015 at 8:00 pm

      You’re welcome 🙂
      Yes, it’s all still new and exciting!

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      • April 29, 2015 at 8:27 pm

        It’s very new for me, too–week 2 as a matter of fact!

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  5. Francesca Smith
    April 29, 2015 at 7:55 pm

    Very funny indeed! I especially thought that last line with the elderly couple watching on is true.
    Great story!

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    • April 29, 2015 at 8:03 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
      I’m thinking that old couple is there every day people-watching, and the husband is quite used to getting a clip round the ear!

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  6. April 29, 2015 at 8:10 pm

    A simple smack to the back of the head will do the job. No need to break bones 🙂

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    • April 29, 2015 at 8:15 pm

      I’m sure she didn’t have anything heavy in her handbag 🙂

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  7. April 30, 2015 at 12:58 am

    That’s funny. I think that marriage is made in heaven – even if it is in the wrong country – the marriage, I mean, not heaven.

    Heaven is where you make it.
    Marriage is what you make it.

    Enuf out of me.
    Randy

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  8. Lyn
    April 30, 2015 at 1:19 am

    I think I like Rex. So unfazed by the fact that he booked a holiday cottage in Lisbon and she booked flights to Spain. Who booked which first? If he booked the cottage first, then it’s obviously her fault. They could just rent a car, have a nice time in Barcelona, and then drive to Lisbon – it’s only about eleven hours. Think of all the sightseeing they could do on the way. Love the old couple watching them. I can just see them walking back home after their coffee, holding hands 🙂

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    • April 30, 2015 at 5:50 pm

      I thought that too. I really wanted to make more of the fact that Rex was so unfazed by these little hiccups, but sadly didn’t have nearly enough words. He’s definitely seeing this as an opportunity rather than the disaster his new wife thinks it is. I reckon they’ll be good for each other – each balancing the other.

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  9. April 30, 2015 at 1:41 am

    I always liked your darker takes. Not to take away from this little gem.

    DJ

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    • April 30, 2015 at 5:51 pm

      Last week got a little too dark, I felt 🙂
      Glad you liked this non-dark tale anyway.

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  10. April 30, 2015 at 2:03 am

    That was pure gold! Loved it. ❤

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  11. April 30, 2015 at 3:24 am

    Let’s see …. Their honeymoon is shot, their marriage is already marked by spousal battery and public buffoonery …. In short, you have all the ingredients necessary for either murder most foul or rom-com insanity! So glad you chose the latter, Mr. D., and kept the black humor at bay. For now.

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    • April 30, 2015 at 5:56 pm

      See, I listened last week after my very dark story 🙂 Black humour is my “thing”, though…
      Definitely rom-com – I can see a whole series documenting their hilarious adventures as they struggle to reach Lisbon 🙂

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  12. April 30, 2015 at 3:25 am

    I think we could turn this into a dark story if there were a brick or an anvil in the handbag….

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    • April 30, 2015 at 5:56 pm

      “Honestly, officer, I forgot I had a brick in my bag…”

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  13. April 30, 2015 at 12:11 pm

    Hilarious, Ali. I hope they work together better in future. If they have to separate to perform any tasks in future, they may never see each other again. 😀

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    • April 30, 2015 at 5:57 pm

      Hopefully they’ll view this as a learning experience 🙂

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  14. April 30, 2015 at 2:33 pm

    Funny Ali! 🙂

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  15. April 30, 2015 at 2:50 pm

    Fun post. 🙂

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  16. April 30, 2015 at 4:44 pm

    How funny that the old couple assume they are married. Good story and a fun read! Nan

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    • April 30, 2015 at 6:01 pm

      The old guy has had his fair share of good-natured handbag bashing, methinks 🙂

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  17. April 30, 2015 at 5:26 pm

    A delightfully lighthearted tale. Thanks for the grin.

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    • April 30, 2015 at 6:01 pm

      You’re welcome! I did promise something lighter after last week’s rather dark tale.

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  18. April 30, 2015 at 7:55 pm

    the old couple added more authenticity to the scene. enjoyed reading it. well done.

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    • April 30, 2015 at 8:29 pm

      Thanks. They were a “late” addition but you’re right, the story is better with them at the end. Previously there was “something” missing.

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  19. April 30, 2015 at 11:47 pm

    Oh, this is too funny. The Ow-ow will sound familiar to many people who’ve been in a relationship for some time. 🙂

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    • May 1, 2015 at 6:10 am

      It’s a time-honoured way of letting the husband know he’s “done wrong” 🙂
      I’m glad you liked my story!

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  20. May 1, 2015 at 12:23 am

    Okay the last line, from the old man, got me. Literally laughing out loud here in Virginia.

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    • May 1, 2015 at 6:14 am

      I’m glad you liked that last line. It was a late addition, I was trying to find a decent way to end the story 🙂

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  21. May 1, 2015 at 4:28 am

    You’ve written great characters here–two adorable couples interacting quite realistcally. Very humorous!

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    • May 1, 2015 at 6:17 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked their interactions and found them to be realistic 🙂

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  22. May 1, 2015 at 7:45 am

    I loved your story last week but it’s nice to laugh 🙂

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    • May 1, 2015 at 1:48 pm

      Last week’s was very dark so I thought a little humour would be nice this week 🙂

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  23. May 1, 2015 at 12:59 pm

    I actually think they will have more fun in Barcelona than in Lisbon… Just go with the flow.

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    • May 1, 2015 at 2:04 pm

      I’ve never been to either city, but I do think they should go with the flow and enjoy themselves wherever they are. It’s their honeymoon, after all!

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  24. May 1, 2015 at 2:31 pm

    Oh no, now were thinking alike. At least I didn’t name my guy Rex.
    Not that Rex is bad, it’s proof that all is not lost — yet. ;0)

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    • May 1, 2015 at 2:48 pm

      Come to thin of it, “Rex” is a bit 70s isn’t it 🙂

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      • May 1, 2015 at 9:12 pm

        I like Rex. I wish I’d thought of it then we really would need to be worried. ;0)

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      • May 2, 2015 at 5:27 am

        Ha 🙂

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  25. May 1, 2015 at 5:15 pm

    Whoops! I think Rex can make it happen anywhere with that fancy singing! Hopefully, they’ll find a room in Spain. Very funny, Ali.

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    • May 1, 2015 at 6:55 pm

      I hope they don’t have to rely on his singing to get lodgings or transport to Lisbon, though 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  26. May 2, 2015 at 10:08 am

    They definitely need to work on their communication skills! Great story. I especially like the old couple at the end. 🙂

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    • May 2, 2015 at 3:19 pm

      I reckon there’s an old couple like this in every town 🙂
      Glad you liked my story!

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  27. May 2, 2015 at 7:47 pm

    There seems to be a lot of vacation hating going on this week and why is it always the guy getting the brunt?

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    • May 3, 2015 at 6:22 am

      ‘Cos it’s usually the guy who’s screwed things up 🙂

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      • May 6, 2015 at 2:47 pm

        Oh I don’t know. My experience was that screw ups were about equally shared.

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      • May 6, 2015 at 3:04 pm

        🙂

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  28. May 3, 2015 at 1:22 pm

    Dear Ali,

    So much for the happy honeymoon. 😉 I hope things get better for them. Fun story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • May 3, 2015 at 4:11 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      I’m sure they’ll make the best of it. It’s an adventure!
      Ali

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  29. May 4, 2015 at 12:30 am

    Lisbon? Barcelona? What’s one tiny mistake in a marriage? 😛 Funny and great dialogue…
    Ellespeth

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    • May 4, 2015 at 7:46 am

      Yeah, I bet that’s not the last misunderstanding they’re going to have. I think they’ll be okay, though 🙂

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  30. May 11, 2015 at 9:48 am

    So many times…love hurts.

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