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FF – Into the Shadows

Here is my little story for Friday Fictioneers, the weekly 100 word flash fiction hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by Emmy L. Gant.

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Copyright Emmy L. Gant

Copyright Emmy L. Gant

 

Delvor cast his eye over the city as the sun slipped behind billowing clouds, admiring the spires and majestic buildings, testament to the achievements of Man. Despite these grand structures, the city was quiet, seemingly deserted.

Would that it were, he mused as he shifted his gaze to the shadows; inky black, far too black, unnaturally black. Delvor was Chosen. Delvor could see that which was hidden to most, the things which lived in the dark places, under beds, inside wardrobes. Things which killed the unsuspecting, the unaware, mutilating without mercy.

Girding himself, he unsheathed his obsidian dagger and advanced.

 

  1. March 9, 2016 at 8:18 pm

    And when the moon finally moved out from in front of the sun after that day’s total eclipse he’d forgotten about, Delvor looked on in horror at all of the innocent possums he slashed at in the darkness….

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    • March 10, 2016 at 8:13 am

      There’s always a bit of collateral damage in the fight against the evil hordes of darkness πŸ™‚

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  2. March 9, 2016 at 8:37 pm

    Things live under beds?!! Why did no one tell me?! Nice Ali, like the dark stuff you write.

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    • March 10, 2016 at 8:13 am

      Yeah, they’re everywhere. Especially under beds πŸ™‚
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  3. March 9, 2016 at 8:54 pm

    I’ll have to remember to sleep with the light on tonight! Great story, Ali. πŸ™‚

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  4. March 9, 2016 at 9:08 pm

    I love all the twists and steadily uncloaking–then surprising–menace in this story, Ali. Delvor is (probably) not, in fact, the evil Cyclops the reader might spy with his/her little eye. Maybe, just maybe, he is some kind of hero. Savior. Chosen. Or maybe demented. Who knows? Great work, as always. How you get these in under 100 words, is awe-inspiring to me.

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    • March 10, 2016 at 8:20 am

      I’m thinking he’s some sort of anti-hero, and has taken it upon himself to fight the creatures in the dark. He’s probably a bit demented as well – who wouldn’t be after seeing stuff like that all his life?
      I actually didn’t have to cut anything from this story, it hit 100 naturally πŸ™‚

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  5. March 9, 2016 at 9:46 pm

    You left me wonder if Delvor is evil or not… but for sure there will be changes.

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    • March 10, 2016 at 8:24 am

      He’s a sort of ant-hero I think, living in the shadows…

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  6. March 9, 2016 at 9:47 pm

    Scary story. Making me look under the bed now. Nicely done.

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    • March 10, 2016 at 8:25 am

      Thanks, check the wardrobe as well!

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  7. March 9, 2016 at 10:32 pm

    A very dark and interesting story.

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  8. March 9, 2016 at 11:19 pm

    Was he cursed or blessed to be able to see these things? 😊

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    • March 10, 2016 at 8:27 am

      Cursed I reckon – I’m sure he’d have a happier life not knowing πŸ™‚

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  9. March 9, 2016 at 11:38 pm

    Please, don’t write children’s stories! I was afraid of the dark as a kid. I think I plug the nightlight in tonight πŸ™‚

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    • March 10, 2016 at 8:29 am

      But… I’ve just started writing “The Vicious Disemboweller from Under the Bed” (a bedtime story for all ages). Maybe a rethink is in order.

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  10. March 10, 2016 at 12:33 am

    Intriguing! And a little unnerving to read on a dark stormy afternoon such as it is here. πŸ™‚

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    • March 10, 2016 at 8:29 am

      Cool, you had the correct atmosphere for my story and everything!

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  11. March 10, 2016 at 1:11 am

    Love it! Left me wanting more.

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  12. March 10, 2016 at 5:10 am

    Dark but skillfully spun. I like the Obsidian dagger.

    All my best,
    MG

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    • March 10, 2016 at 8:30 am

      Thanks. I toyed with all sorts of descriptions for it before settling on that!

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  13. March 10, 2016 at 10:14 am

    Dear Ali,

    You had me engaged. Vivid descriptions…very dark.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • March 10, 2016 at 2:12 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      I’m glad you liked it – I’ve gone back to “dark” for a while πŸ™‚
      Ali

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  14. March 10, 2016 at 10:35 am

    Awesome anticipation of a deathly battle ahead, skilful use of urbanish fantasy tropes here (spires, yay) πŸ™‚ and yes, that shadow is very seductive. Liked that he’s fighting dark with an appropriate dagger (heh, dragon glass!), too…! Really liked this.

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    • March 10, 2016 at 2:14 pm

      What’s a good urban fantasy without spires? πŸ™‚
      I’d forgotten about dragon glass though it’s not long since I last saw GoT – I was thinking of the dagger I once had in Elder Scrolls Oblivion! Same deadly weapon though πŸ™‚
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  15. March 10, 2016 at 11:47 am

    Great fantasy story. The chosen one to see the dark creatures, not a nice fate. The obsidian dagger is an added bonus. And yet, with a little twist, I can see his mum tell him to do his homework and put the letter opener back. πŸ˜‰

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    • March 10, 2016 at 2:15 pm

      I wouldn’t want that power, I’d prefer to live out my life in ignorance and let someone else do the fighting πŸ™‚
      Funnily enough, every “dark” idea I had seemed to end with some kid being called in for supper. But I thought I’ve done that a bit too much recently!

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  16. March 10, 2016 at 12:18 pm

    I love the word ‘obsidian’. I’m a bit less keen on Delvor and won’t be inviting him around any time soon. Good one

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    • March 10, 2016 at 2:16 pm

      He’s more a “live and kill in the darkness” and less a “nice chap to have round for dinner” kind of a guy πŸ™‚

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  17. March 10, 2016 at 12:49 pm

    It sounds like the evil beings are a bit like the black riders in The Lord of the Rings Trilogy. Where is a well-trained elf when you need one? Good atmosphere, Ali. πŸ™‚ — Suzanne

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    • March 10, 2016 at 2:17 pm

      I bet Delvor could use some Elvish help right about now πŸ™‚
      I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  18. March 10, 2016 at 2:14 pm

    That was quite a menacing and sinister story. I think you could write fantasy-horror stories easily, apart from your usual brilliant, dry humorous stories. Beautifully executed (yes, the almost-pun is intended).
    This was chilling and moving, both:
    “Delvor could see that which was hidden to most, the things which lived in the dark places, under beds, inside wardrobes.”

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    • March 10, 2016 at 2:24 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it! The only problem with writing fantasy-horror is trying to think of something “new” :-). This, for example, could be seen as a cross between “Grimm” and “Mortal Instruments”.
      I’m glad you liked that line, I did too!

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      • March 10, 2016 at 2:26 pm

        πŸ™‚
        You’re most welcome!
        Yes, I’d have to agree with you about fantasy-horror — everything seems to have already been conceived of. Still, we can have wonderfully terrifying descriptions, right?

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      • March 10, 2016 at 3:02 pm

        True πŸ™‚

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      • March 10, 2016 at 3:11 pm

        David Tennant I recognized as Barty Crouch (the younger) in Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire (the movie) — so, alas, I have to get over my prejudice against him. He did act very well, though, and looks absurdly young.

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  19. March 10, 2016 at 3:00 pm

    Very ominous. You’re getting darker and darker!

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  20. March 10, 2016 at 4:56 pm

    Ach. I think you are braver than me. You went “Into the shadows.” I went “Out of the shadows.” πŸ™‚ Great story.

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    • March 11, 2016 at 7:53 am

      Thanks! I reckon Delvor still has a better chance of survival than your guys, though πŸ™‚

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  21. March 10, 2016 at 8:08 pm

    I like how you eluded to all the scary places we have in our minds from childhood through adult. This is deeply dark and very intriguing. Kudos.

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    • March 11, 2016 at 7:55 am

      I was hoping to make people think twice before switching the light off in the evening πŸ™‚
      I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  22. March 10, 2016 at 10:34 pm

    Nice and gritty — a superhero story that could become a saga. Perhaps it could be serialized???

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    • March 11, 2016 at 7:56 am

      That might be fun, actually. One mini-chapter a week. I’m glad you liked it!

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  23. March 11, 2016 at 12:10 am

    i don’t think he could it all by himself. obviously, he needs help.

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    • March 11, 2016 at 7:56 am

      There are probably more like him out there – but for now, he is alone…

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  24. March 11, 2016 at 4:31 pm

    This would make a great novel! More, more!! I enjoyed reading it. πŸ˜€

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    • March 11, 2016 at 4:37 pm

      Someone already suggested serialising it. Maybe I should πŸ™‚
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  25. March 11, 2016 at 7:24 pm

    This is wonderfully atmospheric but I have to confess I don’t know if it’s about do a comic turnabout like a Terry Pratchett?

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    • March 12, 2016 at 6:24 am

      That would be funny following the rather ominous start!

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  26. March 11, 2016 at 9:15 pm

    Creepy! I like that he sees the hidden, that which cannot be seen by others. Great story. I agree is very atmospheric and does the photo justice.

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    • March 12, 2016 at 6:29 am

      Thanks! I’m sure he’d prefer not to see these things, but this is his Calling. When I first saw the photo, all I saw was the darkness in it!

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  27. March 11, 2016 at 9:41 pm

    Bravo! Sounds like a slice of a novel. Interesting story.

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    • March 12, 2016 at 6:30 am

      Thanks! Maybe I’ll extend it a bit, see if I can make more of it.

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      • March 12, 2016 at 5:46 pm

        I bet you can; story guidelines are set. Rock it out!

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      • March 13, 2016 at 7:06 am

        πŸ™‚

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  28. Adam Ickes
    March 11, 2016 at 11:47 pm

    I love the feel of this. Just tell Delvor to stop killing my friends or I’m going to have to hunt him down for his crimes against my brethren.

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    • March 12, 2016 at 6:34 am

      Ha, I’m afraid Delvor does get carried away when the obsidian dagger comes out!

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  29. March 12, 2016 at 1:18 am

    Wow! I’m ready to see that! Wonderful story, d-man! Wonderful

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    • March 12, 2016 at 6:34 am

      Thanks! I’m glad you liked it πŸ™‚

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  30. March 12, 2016 at 4:06 am

    My hero!

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  31. March 12, 2016 at 9:28 pm

    Nicely written.

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