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FF – Rebirth

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. She also supplied this week’s photo which is a redo from many years ago and was suggested by Kent Bonham.

After I wrote this story it occurred to me that, all unplanned, it could be a continuation of my last one, but set two years later.

To read this week’s other stories, click on the blue froggy.


 

Ice glistened, a delicate filigree tracing intricate patterns across the window. Edward traced his finger over the loops and swirls, a morning ritual. At last he turned away to begin another gruelling day of nuclear winter.

Reaching for the door handle, he noticed a glint of orange flicker across the wall. Turning back, he saw the window glow with light, blazing yellow as the sun, hidden these past two years, illuminated the swirls of frost with the promise of life.

The dust had settled, the long winter ended, the remnants of the human race reborn to a new dawn.

 

  1. Holly
    June 30, 2016 at 4:02 pm

    OK, I do like that as a continuation of the last story. I mean, it stands alone well too, but it makes me feel less concerned about the “sun=disaster” theme I mentioned before 🙂

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    • July 1, 2016 at 6:26 am

      This time the light’s bringing new hope, rather than fiery death. Woohoo!

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  2. June 30, 2016 at 4:10 pm

    I like it that you also saw the “blemish” of the light in the photo and used that.

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  3. June 30, 2016 at 4:13 pm

    Nice link to the other story, both really good for their deoth in brevity.

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    • July 1, 2016 at 6:28 am

      I’m glad you liked them. I enjoy trying to fit whole stories into so few words!

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      • July 1, 2016 at 7:57 pm

        Yeah it’s a challenge! My minimalism is through my 6 word stories.

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      • July 2, 2016 at 10:00 am

        I never really got the hang of those!

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  4. June 30, 2016 at 4:54 pm

    Good one. I hadn’t spotted that light the first time around.

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    • July 1, 2016 at 6:30 am

      It looks like the sun is finally coming up. I’m glad you liked it!

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  5. June 30, 2016 at 5:22 pm

    I like the hopeful ending!

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  6. June 30, 2016 at 5:26 pm

    I somehow missed your last story, so thanks for the cue to go back and read it. And yes, what a great continuation — the sun is back, finally, and with it, perhaps some hope.

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    • July 1, 2016 at 6:33 am

      Let’s hope so. There’s a long road ahead but I think we’ll make it.

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  7. Lyn
    June 30, 2016 at 5:34 pm

    Great continuation. More please 🙂

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  8. June 30, 2016 at 7:16 pm

    Like Trisha, I’m glad your story has a flicker of hope. Well done, catching the light in the window!

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    • July 1, 2016 at 6:39 am

      It can’t be all doom and gloom, it’s time for the human race to get back on its feet!

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  9. June 30, 2016 at 7:25 pm

    A story of dawning hope.
    I like very much.
    🙂
    🙂

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    • July 1, 2016 at 6:39 am

      Thanks, dawning hope and hope in the dawn 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  10. June 30, 2016 at 9:14 pm

    Well done! A glimmer of hope! Perhaps the silly humans will not destroy themselves after all 🙂

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    • July 1, 2016 at 6:40 am

      We can only hope! I’m glad you liked it 🙂

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  11. June 30, 2016 at 10:25 pm

    Aha, a hopeful one. Nicely done. I could see this continuing on at novella or novel-length. (hint, hint) And/or maybe a Doctor Who spin-off teleseries?

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    • July 1, 2016 at 6:42 am

      It could be a series of short stories, each one set at different times maybe. A Doctor Who spin-off sounds good!

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      • July 1, 2016 at 3:09 pm

        Yeah, for sure. Anne Proulx just released a book covering a 300-year history of two (I think it is) families, and of course there’s all types of precedence for such long-span fiction. I keep thinking of Twilight Zone, though, for your original story about the sun. Maybe a TZ reboot even, if it can’t be worked into the Whoniverse. I’m just now starting to get caught up with DW Capaldi years. On the Davros origins episode; can’t remember the name.

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      • July 1, 2016 at 5:02 pm

        I’m sure Dr Who would have prevented the disaster in the first place, so TZ it is!

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  12. July 1, 2016 at 2:31 am

    Garry says we are in the heart of darkness. Nice to hear the sun may come out … somewhere …

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    • July 1, 2016 at 6:43 am

      Sooner or later the sun will always come back. Hmm, it’s not like me to be so optimistic… 🙂

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  13. July 1, 2016 at 4:08 am

    Woohoo! Time for the next era of humanity to make the same mistakes as the previous one….

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    • July 1, 2016 at 6:44 am

      We just need time to get back on our feet, rediscover traditional farming and reinvent the thermonuclear device…

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  14. July 1, 2016 at 5:11 am

    A lovely sense of dawning hope, and beautiful descriptions in your story, Alistair! I loved it.

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    • July 1, 2016 at 6:45 am

      I’m glad you liked it! I find descriptive stuff hard, hence my tendency towards dialogue.

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  15. July 1, 2016 at 8:23 am

    Hooray! We can start again! and this time with an extra eye and four legs! 😀

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  16. July 1, 2016 at 8:42 am

    Great story, Ali. I love a happy ending. Well written. 🙂 — Suzanne

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    • July 1, 2016 at 4:50 pm

      Thanks, all’s well that ends well – we hope – there’s always next week 🙂

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  17. July 1, 2016 at 10:29 am

    I love this. To see the sun return after such a disaster would be wonderful. You’ve captured the feeling.

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    • July 1, 2016 at 4:50 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! They’ve been waiting for sight of the sun for so long.

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  18. July 1, 2016 at 2:24 pm

    Nice story of redemption. No matter how hard we try to wipe our selves out, we survive.

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    • July 1, 2016 at 5:00 pm

      One wonders what we have to do to achieve complete extinction…

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      • July 5, 2016 at 4:46 pm

        Let’s not wonder too hard. I like it here. Even with its flaws.

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  19. July 1, 2016 at 2:36 pm

    Wow, chilling! At least it has a happy ending. Great story!

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  20. July 1, 2016 at 3:05 pm

    Yes, I like this as a sequel to your story of last week, even if unintentional. One can sense the contrast of hope and despair.

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    • July 1, 2016 at 5:02 pm

      It worked quite well! I’m glad you liked it, and the contrast between the two.

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  21. mickwynn2013
    July 1, 2016 at 3:43 pm

    Great imagery and feeling about this one. Her comes the sun at last.

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  22. July 1, 2016 at 5:33 pm

    A real journey, a Pandora’s box.
    Great story!

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    • July 2, 2016 at 10:00 am

      I started at the end last week and ended this week at the beginning, sort of!

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  23. July 1, 2016 at 8:11 pm

    I love the hope in the end… there is a sense of phoenix in they way we rise from ashes.

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    • July 2, 2016 at 10:01 am

      Very true, I wish I’d thought of that – “Phoenix” would have made a great title.

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  24. July 1, 2016 at 9:50 pm

    This has a really different feel than your usual. I used the same but of the photo as my prompt too.

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    • July 2, 2016 at 10:06 am

      Nice to get away from comedy for a bit!

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      • July 2, 2016 at 12:52 pm

        It’s the language as well I think.

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      • July 2, 2016 at 4:58 pm

        Yes, I usually do dialogue as I find it much easier than descriptive, where you actually have to think about getting the right words 🙂

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      • July 2, 2016 at 7:50 pm

        Well it was very good 😃

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      • July 3, 2016 at 7:05 am

        Thanks 🙂

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  25. July 1, 2016 at 10:00 pm

    Beautiful and uplifting with a lovely poetic rhythm, especially in the opening line. All of that comes across strongly because we get just enough information about the harshness of the gruelling nuclear winter to feel the relief of the sun breaking through.

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    • July 2, 2016 at 10:09 am

      I’m so glad you liked it! It took longer than usual to write as I’m not so good at descriptive stuff – dialogue is easier for me – so I edited it quite a bit. I’m glad it worked out!

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  26. July 1, 2016 at 10:10 pm

    Us and the cockroaches, you just can’t kill us all. Hopefully we’ll even have evolved a bit. At least there’s some hope. Beautifully written.

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    • July 2, 2016 at 10:10 am

      Is it too much to hope for that the survivors won’t make the same mistake again? I’m glad you liked it!

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  27. July 2, 2016 at 7:35 am

    Great write, Ali. I hadn’t even noticed the lights. What a nice way to start again with new hope.

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    • July 2, 2016 at 10:11 am

      Hopefully the survivors won’t mess it up this time…
      I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  28. July 2, 2016 at 10:24 am

    This works really well as a continuation of last week’s story, even if it was unintentional! The effects of nuclear war have obviously been consuming your thoughts… I love the hopeful tone. A beautifully described piece, Ali. 🙂

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    • July 2, 2016 at 10:26 am

      That’s what I get for watching Jericho (and other similar stuff) on Netflix…
      I’m glad you liked it, and my descriptions!

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      • July 2, 2016 at 10:33 am

        Is Jericho any good? I’ve just finished watching Terra Nova (very daft but fun) and need a new series to move on to. 🙂

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      • July 2, 2016 at 10:40 am

        I enjoyed Terra Nova, shame it was too expensive to make and they cancelled it 😦
        Jericho is okay, nothing special. It also got cancelled but they did a second 7 episode series to wrap it up so hopefully it will have a proper ending! On the plus side, series 4 of Continuum just appeared.

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      • July 2, 2016 at 10:42 am

        I’ve not seen Continuum either. That might have to be next on my list instead. 🙂 Thanks!

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      • July 2, 2016 at 4:56 pm

        And if you haven’t seen it, Fringe.

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  29. July 2, 2016 at 11:22 am

    Wouldn’t it be nice if such light appears every time we have disaster? 🙂

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  30. July 3, 2016 at 12:00 pm

    A lovely, descriptive passage and a great follow-on from your last FF story. 🙂

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  31. July 3, 2016 at 12:25 pm

    Dear Ali,

    This is almost poetry. Lovely story that stands alone.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • July 3, 2016 at 4:13 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it. Descriptive stuff is always quite hard for me.
      Ali

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  32. July 3, 2016 at 11:21 pm

    I felt the Joy!

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  33. July 4, 2016 at 4:31 pm

    How wonderful to read a hopeful post-apocalypse story!

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    • July 5, 2016 at 7:31 am

      Thanks, I thought a bit of hope would be nice in a frozen world 🙂

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  34. July 6, 2016 at 3:32 am

    What a dramatic difference in mood between the beginning and end of such a concise story! Brilliantly written!

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    • July 6, 2016 at 6:18 am

      Thanks! From grim drudgery to a spark of hope. I’m glad you liked it 🙂

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