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FF – Sunshine

Here is my post for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This photo was originally posted a few months before I started, and was supplied by Rich Voza.

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Copyright Rich Voza

Copyright Rich Voza

 

“Are we not getting on the plane, Mummy?”

“No, sweetheart, not today.”

“But… the sun is nearly down and you said it would be daytime when we took off.”

Sophie looked to her husband for support, eyes moist.

“That’s not the sun, pumpkin,” he told his little girl. “Let’s go back inside.”

“Are we far enough away, do you think?” asked Sophie quietly as their daughter scampered back to the terminal.

“From the initial blast, yes,” said her husband, “but the wind’s blowing from that direction. Fallout.”

Sophie shuddered, her tears drying in an instant as a second sun burst over the terminal building.

 

  1. Holly
    June 22, 2016 at 6:17 pm

    I’m sensing a recurring theme with sunrises/sunsets and interstellar explosions 😉

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    • June 23, 2016 at 7:26 am

      It’s hard to tell the difference sometimes. A beautiful sunrise, or thermonuclear armageddon?

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  2. June 22, 2016 at 8:36 pm

    Ali,
    Try reading it without the word Fallout. I didn’t need the word to understand the story and it was a distraction in my opinion. It’s minor but I had to say it. Otherwise you brought me into that terminal with the family waiting for the “fallout”.
    Tracey

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    • June 23, 2016 at 7:28 am

      Thanks Tracey, I did wonder but wasn’t sure if everyone would get it so I left it in. Sometimes I don’t understand people’s FF stories at all until I read the comments and I’m worried about being too obscure 🙂

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      • June 23, 2016 at 12:37 pm

        I thought it was just me! They’re too clever for me sometimes.

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      • June 23, 2016 at 1:08 pm

        Yay – I thought it was just me too 🙂

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      • June 29, 2016 at 9:36 am

        I can add my me too, too.

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  3. June 23, 2016 at 2:29 am

    i’m afraid the family is doomed. 😦

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  4. June 23, 2016 at 4:31 am

    Ouch. Well, at least it was quick.

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    • June 23, 2016 at 7:29 am

      Way better than vomiting your way through radiation poisoning.

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  5. Lyn
    June 23, 2016 at 4:45 am

    One of your best serious stories I think Ali.

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    • June 23, 2016 at 7:29 am

      Thanks 🙂
      I finally got a prompt which didn’t “force” me to write something silly!

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  6. June 23, 2016 at 5:37 am

    You evoked a lot of feelings with that story. I am always amazed at what you can do with only 100 words. Also, your stories are NEVER predictable. It is hard being the grownup when things get tough. 😀

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    • June 23, 2016 at 7:31 am

      Especially when there’s a little one demanding answers.
      I’m glad you enjoyed it! This story came to me within seconds of seeing the photo, which makes a change recently 🙂

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  7. June 23, 2016 at 6:12 am

    A very interesting and different take from you.
    Great story.

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    • June 23, 2016 at 7:32 am

      I’m glad you liked it! I did a lot of “end of the world” stories ages ago but everything recently has been a bit silly 🙂

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      • June 23, 2016 at 11:19 am

        I like both sides, they’re always so well written.
        🙂
        🙂

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      • June 23, 2016 at 1:07 pm

        Thanks 🙂

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  8. June 23, 2016 at 6:46 am

    Damn plane out on a training mission forgot to check and make sure its nukes were blanks. Someone’s gonna lose a stripe or two for this…

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    • June 23, 2016 at 7:33 am

      Probably some drone operator two thousand miles away thinking he’s playing “Armageddon 3 – End of the World (Again)” on his Xbox.

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      • June 23, 2016 at 8:16 am

        This video game is so lifelike, it’s almost real!!! Wait a minute, I’m getting a breaking news alert…

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      • June 23, 2016 at 1:02 pm

        Take the 5th!

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  9. June 23, 2016 at 7:47 am

    I agree with Tracey that the word ‘fallout’ was redundant in this piece. Nice one.

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    • June 23, 2016 at 1:01 pm

      It seems looking through the comments it’s one of those “some would prefer it gone, others are glad it’s there” kind of things. Tricky sometimes – I know what I mean but does everyone else?
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  10. June 23, 2016 at 8:16 am

    I think it’s kind of sad story, Draliman. I’m glad you put the fallout in, that made it for us clearer what had happened. Pawkisses for a real sunny day 🙂 ❤

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  11. June 23, 2016 at 8:59 am

    Nice set up for a story with even more suspense. Good work, Ali. 🙂

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    • June 23, 2016 at 1:07 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! Makes a change to get away from the absurd for a while 🙂

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  12. June 23, 2016 at 9:34 am

    A possible future.

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  13. June 23, 2016 at 11:21 am

    This might be a likely end… alas. I almost hope when it comes I will be melting at the core.

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    • June 23, 2016 at 1:07 pm

      Me too, better that than a slow painful death.

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  14. michael1148humphris
    June 23, 2016 at 12:04 pm

    Although you use the term fall out, I saw this event as a new dawn, when the earth got two sun’s, I am ever the optimist.

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    • June 23, 2016 at 1:08 pm

      That puts quite a different slant on it!

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  15. June 23, 2016 at 2:02 pm

    I expected this story to be humourous near the end, in your trademark style, but you pulled off tragedy with elan! Kudos!

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    • June 23, 2016 at 5:38 pm

      Sadly there was no happy ending for these people 😦
      I’m glad you enjoyed it though!

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  16. June 23, 2016 at 2:09 pm

    Chilling! Great story!

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  17. June 23, 2016 at 6:36 pm

    Poor doomed family. But at least the 2nd sun made it quick.

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  18. June 23, 2016 at 8:56 pm

    Scary and good as well as good and scary! 🙂

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    • June 24, 2016 at 6:10 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂

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  19. June 24, 2016 at 1:44 am

    Very powerful story, Alistair!

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    • June 24, 2016 at 6:11 am

      Thanks, it was nice to write something apocalyptic after so much silliness the past few weeks 🙂

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  20. June 24, 2016 at 4:04 pm

    Nice! Sad, but nice.

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  21. June 24, 2016 at 7:11 pm

    A terrifying situation with a tragic ending. Great story, Ali. 🙂

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    • June 25, 2016 at 5:19 am

      I’m glad you liked it! Let’s hope we never find ourselves in a situation like this.

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  22. June 25, 2016 at 6:19 am

    How tragic. We’re all just a breath away from something similar in the world we have today, I guess. A gripping story.

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    • June 25, 2016 at 10:29 am

      Worryingly I think you’re right.
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  23. June 26, 2016 at 2:21 am

    Sad that the little girl realizes what it is.

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  24. June 26, 2016 at 11:43 am

    A sad but well-written story, Ali. Let’s hope it doesn’t happen that way. Hands off the button. —- Suzanne

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    • June 26, 2016 at 3:23 pm

      I hope it doesn’t either. Let’s even get rid of the button.

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  25. June 26, 2016 at 5:42 pm

    Holy man… “That’s not the sun…” Great story!

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  26. mickwynn2013
    June 26, 2016 at 6:45 pm

    I liked this and as mentioned elsewhere I think it’s better without saying fallout. Somehow it’s more ominous when left unsaid. Like something so bad people are afraid to say it’s name.

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    • June 27, 2016 at 6:58 am

      Thanks, yes, the consensus of opinion is definitely against “fallout”. I prefer it without too on second look!

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  27. June 26, 2016 at 11:56 pm

    Dear Ali,

    I’m all for less is more. But in the end, to fallout or not to fallout is your decision. Good one, nonetheless. Bleak and chilling.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • June 27, 2016 at 7:02 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      I’m glad you liked it! It is better without “fallout” but I’m a worrier 🙂
      Ali

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  28. June 29, 2016 at 9:38 am

    When you do serious, you do it with a vengeance! Great story.

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  29. June 29, 2016 at 1:34 pm

    Great story. Seeing a nuclear blast in that sunset was inspired.

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    • June 30, 2016 at 3:56 pm

      Thanks! Worryingly, it was pretty much the first thing I saw 🙂

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  30. July 3, 2016 at 11:04 am

    A great interpretation of the prompt. Thought provoking and terrifying, too.

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  31. July 11, 2016 at 2:43 am

    I enjoyed the story and the calmness of the parents. I wonder how calm I would be.

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    • July 11, 2016 at 7:10 am

      I think it’s been one thing after another and now they’re pretty much numb from the shock. I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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