Home > Fiction > FF – Daytime at Midnight

FF – Daytime at Midnight

Here is my post for Friday Fictioneers, the 100 word story prompt hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by her long-time friend Lucy Fridkin.

To read this week’s other stories, click on the blue froggy.


lucy-sol

Copyright Lucy Fridkin

 

Frederick stared down at the great Arks below. Though after midnight the light from the approaching solar storm reflected off the water, casting shadows which danced across the waves. Soon the Arks would set sail; later they would dive to the depths of the ocean, protecting the world’s inhabitants inside hardened steel shells…

“What’re you doing?”

“Oh, just looking at the bay, dreaming up a story.”

“Come inside. The solar storm will be here soon. We want to be together at the end, to say goodbye.”

“Okay. Arks would’ve been good.”

“Huh?”

“Oh, just thinking out loud.”

 

  1. December 7, 2016 at 7:03 pm

    Wow, I really like this one Ali. Such a great ambiance, and wonderful how you just hint at the apocalypse.

    Like

    • December 8, 2016 at 7:51 am

      Thanks! I don’t think even they know exactly what will happen. I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  2. December 7, 2016 at 7:49 pm

    Dear Ali,

    Between his writing and the reality you present, this story packs a wallop. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    Like

    • December 8, 2016 at 7:52 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      I’m glad you liked it! I managed to get a story within a story 🙂
      Ali

      Like

  3. December 7, 2016 at 8:04 pm

    Good descriptive writing. I was there

    Like

    • December 8, 2016 at 7:52 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!

      Like

  4. December 7, 2016 at 8:33 pm

    This conjures the record we listened to when I was in my teens W-A-Y back when, before Bill Cosby was . . . Well, anyway, he told a little story about God asking Noah to build an Ark and Noah had to ask, “What’s an Ark?” It was hilarious at the time.

    Your tale is much more thought provoking and very well done, and rather sad. Good take on the picture.

    Like

    • December 8, 2016 at 7:54 am

      That does sound funny 🙂
      I’m glad you liked my story. It is quite sad, but they seem resigned to whatever will happen next.

      Like

  5. December 7, 2016 at 10:56 pm

    Chilling but good!

    Like

    • December 8, 2016 at 7:55 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂

      Like

  6. michael1148humphris
    December 8, 2016 at 12:28 am

    I also think good but chilling, as I guess a few wealthy people have their Ark.

    Like

    • December 8, 2016 at 7:55 am

      Yeah, you can bet there are some arks and underground shelters scattered here and there for the “deserving” few.

      Like

  7. December 8, 2016 at 3:45 am

    What if we’re all just characters in the mind of an author waiting for the end of times?? Damn simulation hypothesis!

    Like

    • December 8, 2016 at 7:56 am

      Aargh! That’s a scary thought 🙂

      Like

  8. December 8, 2016 at 4:11 am

    This one gave me chills. Too close to reality for my taste.

    Like

    • December 8, 2016 at 7:56 am

      Let’s hope I’m not an unsuspecting prophet.

      Like

  9. December 8, 2016 at 4:48 am

    i wanted to remain positive, but the outcome didn’t look good.

    Like

    • December 8, 2016 at 7:57 am

      I have a feeling not everyone is coming out of this intact.

      Liked by 1 person

  10. December 8, 2016 at 9:15 am

    Great take – like all those sci-fi films where humans are saved by suddenly being able to construct arks or ships that can save them all, the reality is we will just accept our fate.

    Like

    • December 8, 2016 at 4:33 pm

      Thanks! Yes, constructing arks always seems a bit far-fetched. Plenty of underground bunkers for government-types and fat cats though I expect!

      Liked by 1 person

  11. December 8, 2016 at 11:45 am

    I enjoyed this. It had the feeling that if only they’d thought of it before, they could have built an ark, although unlikely. Unprepared for the end yet prepared as they could ever be.

    Like

    • December 8, 2016 at 4:34 pm

      Do we really have the resources and the ability to cooperate in order to build arks, is the question. As you say, they’ve prepared as best they can.

      Like

  12. December 8, 2016 at 2:25 pm

    Chilling story! They seem awfully calm for it to be the end of the world.

    Like

    • December 8, 2016 at 4:34 pm

      I think this was predicted and they’ve made their peace. I’d still be running around screaming though, I expect 🙂

      Like

  13. December 8, 2016 at 5:05 pm

    I don’t know why I smiled at the end of this, But I did!

    Like

    • December 9, 2016 at 10:26 am

      There’s nothing like impending fiery doom to bring a smile to one’s lips 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  14. December 9, 2016 at 2:26 am

    I think we need to start building an ark. Good one.

    Like

    • December 9, 2016 at 10:27 am

      It’s never to early to get the arks on the go! I’m glad you liked it 🙂

      Like

  15. December 9, 2016 at 10:46 am

    I hope that doesn’t happen too soon. It sounds rather nasty. Arcs would be a great answer. Good writing, Ali. 🙂 — Suzanne

    Like

    • December 9, 2016 at 1:58 pm

      It sounds rather fatal 🙂 Fingers crossed for the arks!

      Like

  16. December 9, 2016 at 3:12 pm

    Solar storms? Sounds like great weather for sunbathing! They should go to the beach…

    Like

  17. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover
    December 9, 2016 at 8:57 pm

    Great writing. I really liked the interweave of his fantasy with the reality of the end of life.

    Like

    • December 10, 2016 at 6:07 am

      Thanks! I guess he likes to fantasise about a world where they’re all saved.

      Like

  18. December 9, 2016 at 9:25 pm

    The story and the real story…Great effect.

    Like

    • December 10, 2016 at 6:10 am

      Thanks! Thought I’d fit two stories into 100 words this week 🙂

      Like

  19. December 9, 2016 at 10:00 pm

    I hope to be just as calm and creative in the face of an apocalypse. ☺ Great story within a story!

    Like

    • December 10, 2016 at 6:11 am

      Me too (though I hope even more that there won’t be one!). I guess they’ve had some time to make peace with it. I’m glad you liked it!

      Liked by 1 person

  20. December 9, 2016 at 10:28 pm

    Wow, this has an impact (no pun). Gives me the chills and makes me smile about the beautiful writing at the same time. And I agree, in case of disaster, there will be bunkers for some. Or Mars colonies.

    Like

    • December 10, 2016 at 6:13 am

      Deep underground or high in the sky – anywhere but the scorched surface.
      I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  21. December 10, 2016 at 3:34 am

    What a clever story, Ali. Nicely done. They seem ready for the end, so calm. The fact that he can write such a beautiful story makes me think he’s at peace with it.

    Like

    • December 10, 2016 at 6:14 am

      They’ve made their peace with what’s happening. I expect they’re in the minority, though.
      I’m glad you enjoyed the way I wrote it!

      Liked by 1 person

  22. December 10, 2016 at 4:19 am

    A story in a story. Clever, Ali! I love it.

    Five out of five bottles of SPF-215.

    Like

    • December 10, 2016 at 6:14 am

      Thanks, two for the price of one!
      Maybe SPF-215 will do the trick 🙂

      Like

  23. pennydanger
    December 10, 2016 at 7:42 pm

    I loved the way your writing was going along so beautifully and then …it was like the needle going over the record on the turntable. lol. Awesome the way you did that.

    Like

    • December 11, 2016 at 7:20 am

      Thanks! I was having trouble with the picture and then that idea occurred to me 🙂

      Like

  24. December 11, 2016 at 7:32 pm

    Well, they all unite for that goodbye! Very interesting take.. 🙂

    Like

  25. December 12, 2016 at 7:17 am

    What an interesting story. It’s certainly thought provoking.

    Like

  26. December 12, 2016 at 7:40 pm

    I love the way you’ve written this story. The character’s thoughts as he gazed down at the bay become very poignant once we realise that the Arks are a figment of his imagination (or wishful thinking) and that end of the world is really approaching.

    Like

    • December 13, 2016 at 8:50 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked the way I wrote it. I do so many apocalypse stories it needed something different 🙂

      Like

  27. December 13, 2016 at 9:02 pm

    This is most excellent… the whatif in a a story within a story… wonder if there is another story like a russian doll

    Like

    • December 14, 2016 at 8:00 am

      Ooh, a Russian Doll story, multiple layers within layers. That would be a challenge!
      I’m glad you liked it.

      Like

  28. December 13, 2016 at 10:31 pm

    Wow. This is great. I love the flatness of the tone once the dialogue begins, and how that contrasts with the reality they’re experiencing. And the opening scene is really effective. ‘If only we had … ‘ So sad.

    Like

    • December 14, 2016 at 8:02 am

      They’re quite resigned to their fate at this point. I’m glad you liked it!

      Liked by 1 person

  29. December 18, 2016 at 9:12 pm

    I like the way they face their fate. Pity no one built an ark though. Arks would’ve been good 🙂 Great story.

    Like

  1. No trackbacks yet.

Speak to me - I'd love to hear your thoughts!

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s

%d bloggers like this: