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FF – The Bigger Sin

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo comes from Rochelle as well. I hope it wasn’t her car ๐Ÿ˜ฆ

(Just in case non-Brits are not aware, a shopping “trolley” is called a “cart” in the US.)

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โ€œI’m waiting, Son.โ€

โ€œWell, Dad, I went grocery shopping, see, and someone crashed into it with their trolley.โ€

โ€œSo, someone rammed their trolley into the car atโ€ฆ what? 50, 60 miles per hour?โ€

โ€œThatโ€™s about the size of it, Dad.โ€

โ€œThe Hulk, was it? And this isnโ€™t you on the camera sneaking out at 11pm?โ€

โ€œHmm, looks like me but isnโ€™t. Weird.โ€

โ€œSonโ€ฆ?โ€

โ€œOkay, I snuck out on a date with Suzy and had a ding.โ€

โ€œCheerleader Suzy? Straight-A-student Suzy? Hot Suzy?โ€

โ€œYep!โ€

โ€œWoo, nice one, Son! High five!โ€

High five slap.

โ€œBut youโ€™re grounded for lying. โ€˜Til youโ€™re 50.โ€

 

  1. May 10, 2017 at 8:53 pm

    Good one! ha-ha Now that everything is on security camera I bet it’s much more difficult for kids to come up with plausible excuses! ๐Ÿ™‚

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    • May 11, 2017 at 7:44 am

      Big Brother is everywhere! My camera activates at 11pm and caught me coming in late on Monday. I was only out babysitting though, nothing so exciting as this fellow ๐Ÿ˜ฆ

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  2. May 10, 2017 at 8:54 pm

    His dad knows him well enough to know that Suzy would never never give him the time of day. Haha! ๐Ÿ˜

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    • May 11, 2017 at 7:44 am

      I’m guessing she won’t wait for him until he’s 50 either ๐Ÿ™‚

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  3. May 10, 2017 at 9:03 pm

    Ha ha, made me smile this one. I like the Dad’s attitude ๐Ÿ™‚

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    • May 11, 2017 at 7:45 am

      He’s quite a modern dad, but there must be rules… ๐Ÿ™‚

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  4. May 10, 2017 at 11:53 pm

    Lol, that would have to be a really fast trolley/cart, Dad is right! Son is going to have to get better at lying, obviously!

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  5. May 10, 2017 at 11:59 pm

    Is having a ding what I think it is? ๐Ÿ˜ฎ

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  6. May 11, 2017 at 12:00 am

    And this was funny. ๐Ÿ˜Š

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  7. May 11, 2017 at 12:00 am

    Sounds like they have a great rapport. Or almost. Dad will learn to sleep with the car keys under his pillow for a few years. ๐Ÿ™‚

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    • May 11, 2017 at 7:46 am

      At least the son took it for a “good cause” ๐Ÿ™‚

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  8. May 11, 2017 at 12:57 am

    That’s a LONG time out. Very long. I never made it past a single day and that was exhausting.

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    • May 11, 2017 at 7:48 am

      Hopefully Dad will relent around the son’s 30’s ๐Ÿ™‚

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  9. May 11, 2017 at 3:38 am

    A story said in hilarious dialogues… too good!

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  10. May 11, 2017 at 3:44 am

    This is wonderful. Love the lying, the “catch,” the dialogue.

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  11. Lyn
    May 11, 2017 at 4:03 am

    Suitable punishment me thinks ๐Ÿ˜€

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  12. May 11, 2017 at 5:40 am

    Wow, that’s a stiff penalty. Grounded until he’s 50. He’s going to have a problem finding a wife. Good writing, Ali, and hilarious. ๐Ÿ˜€ — Suzanne

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    • May 11, 2017 at 7:50 am

      He has to learn his lesson ๐Ÿ™‚ I’m glad you liked it!

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      • May 11, 2017 at 2:41 pm

        Dad is not thinking. Does he really want his son STILL living with him at 50? I sure as sh** wouldn’t! ๐Ÿ˜€

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  13. May 11, 2017 at 6:27 am

    And while the son is grounded, Dad will be the next one to get a ding while sneaking off to visit Suzy…

    The proper term for a wheeled apparatus you would use in a grocery store is the subject of much debate in America and is often brought up as another example of the more well known soda/pop war of terminology. Most Americans (including me) use the term “cart” as you mentioned. However, there’s another decent segment of Americans, mainly from the South, who call it a “buggy.” I’ve heard both used quite a bit where I live, which is not exactly in the South, so they’re both pretty widespread regionalisms…

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    • May 11, 2017 at 7:54 am

      The field is now open!

      Hmm, most confusing. We Brits know about “cart” because online it’s a “shopping cart”. As for “buggy”, that has fallen into use here in the UK as an alternative word for the more traditional “pushchair” and sometimes for “pram”. It may be that “buggy” was once used here but when I was growing up a baby went in a pram (“perambulator” technically) and a toddler went in a pushchair.

      Wouldn’t it be great if Mer uses a different word to you. Then you could have words over that as well as pop/soda ๐Ÿ™‚

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  14. May 11, 2017 at 8:29 am

    Kids don’t understand that parents are smart!

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  15. May 11, 2017 at 2:28 pm

    Hahahahaha! Pretty cool dad but the son is still grounded! LOL! Cute story, Ali!

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  16. May 11, 2017 at 2:43 pm

    This was great fun, Alistair! Kids are so dumb when it comes to lying. Like we weren’t young once too… sheesh!

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    • May 11, 2017 at 3:43 pm

      I’m guessing that’s how he saw through his son’s lie so easily. Or maybe it was because it was a pretty bad attempt ๐Ÿ™‚

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  17. May 11, 2017 at 3:15 pm

    That was a fun read. Grounded until he is 50, that’s harsh.

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    • May 11, 2017 at 3:44 pm

      Harsh but fair ๐Ÿ™‚ I’m sure he’ll relent in a few days!

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  18. May 11, 2017 at 3:32 pm

    As the parent of a teenage son, this seemed all too plausible! Well done.

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    • May 11, 2017 at 3:44 pm

      I bet it happens all over the world with regularity ๐Ÿ™‚ I’m glad you enjoyed it.

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  19. michael1148humphris
    May 11, 2017 at 5:12 pm

    Dad better be careful, he is driving his son to hard.

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    • May 12, 2017 at 9:35 am

      I’m sure his grounding will only end up being a week or so.

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  20. May 11, 2017 at 5:34 pm

    MOL…that will teach him…MOL ๐Ÿ˜€ Pawkisses for a Wonderful Day ๐Ÿ™‚ โค

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    • May 12, 2017 at 9:36 am

      He won’t soon do that again ๐Ÿ™‚

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  21. May 11, 2017 at 9:30 pm

    Dear Ali,

    Hilarious! I loved the dialogue. I could see this happening.

    I love the cultural exchange in our blogging community. Thanks to my friends across the pond I know where the boot and the bonnet are on a car. And there’ve been more than a few stories about shopping trolleys. My vocabulary has expanded as have my spelling options. Of course, used to get strange looks from my fellow decorator when I would write “colour” on a cake order. ๐Ÿ˜‰

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • May 11, 2017 at 9:45 pm

      PS Grounding the son until he’s 50 is going to be very hard…on the father. I learned a long time ago that grounding was more often than not MY punishment.

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      • May 12, 2017 at 9:45 am

        It’s going to be a very long time listening to grumbling, very loud music and the like ๐Ÿ™‚

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    • May 12, 2017 at 9:44 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      I’m glad you liked it!
      I’m used to American words and spellings, even words you take for granted like “sidewalk” which doesn’t exist at all in English, through lots of American TV. I’m glad you’re getting the chance to learn some UK English (as well as AU English etc) through all the stories! It can also lead to some fun – I read something from an Australian lady the other day where she casually “removed her thong” and did a double-take – before remembering that AU thong = GB sandals (and to complicate matters a US thong is called something different again in GB English, though the word has filtered in) ๐Ÿ™‚
      Ali

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  22. May 12, 2017 at 12:52 am

    Ha ha – good one! Some kids just don’t come up with plausible lies.

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    • May 12, 2017 at 9:46 am

      These thing are learnt and improved with time. I’m glad you liked it!

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  23. May 12, 2017 at 10:51 am

    Such a touching relationship between them.

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    • May 12, 2017 at 12:57 pm

      They seem quite close, though it doesn’t prevent Dad from meting out justice when warranted. I suspect he’ll relent in a couple of days, though!

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  24. May 12, 2017 at 1:21 pm

    A fun read – thanks!

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  25. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover
    May 12, 2017 at 5:11 pm

    Oh that was mean, his father grounding him just when things were heating up with Suzy. Nice read.

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    • May 13, 2017 at 5:31 am

      Well, he did crash the car! I think dad will let him out in a couple of days, though. I’m glad you liked it!

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  26. May 14, 2017 at 7:25 am

    Loved this, Dad is just my kinda guy. Great humour

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    • May 14, 2017 at 4:25 pm

      I’m glad you liked it! I think Dad has the right balance between “friend” and “discipline”.

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  27. May 14, 2017 at 4:05 pm

    Ha, talk about mixed messages, really love it… better learn to tell the truth (it there is ever a next time)…

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    • May 14, 2017 at 4:29 pm

      It’s hard to get into trouble when you’re stuck in your room. I’m glad you liked it!

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  28. May 14, 2017 at 4:41 pm

    Great last line – but Dad won’t keep to it, not with Hot Suzy to date vicariously!

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    • May 14, 2017 at 4:50 pm

      Yeah, sounds like he’s gonna want to hear all the details ๐Ÿ™‚

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  29. May 15, 2017 at 9:20 am

    If only grounding kids till they were 50 was an option. Loved dad’s character – could just see this playing out.

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    • May 15, 2017 at 10:56 am

      It’s probably a bit bit of an unreasonable goal ๐Ÿ™‚ I’m glad you liked it!

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  30. May 15, 2017 at 3:43 pm

    Haha! Love the dialogue between father and son – very natural. And the relationship comes across well too. Cracking last line. Nice job ๐Ÿ™‚

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    • May 15, 2017 at 4:04 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! Those two seem to have quite a good relationship.

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      • May 15, 2017 at 5:35 pm

        My pleasure and you did convey that relationship so well ๐Ÿ™‚

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  31. May 15, 2017 at 8:25 pm

    Great dialogue. Dad’s tolerant, understanding approach shows he knows exactly how to handle his son. I think he knows all the tricks a teenage lad could come up with and will meet his son head on every time. A great last line!

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    • May 16, 2017 at 6:57 am

      Kids forget that their parents have already been there, done that ๐Ÿ™‚
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  32. May 16, 2017 at 2:51 pm

    I hope Suzy is allowed to vist;)

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    • May 17, 2017 at 8:16 am

      There’s always the time-honoured “climb in through the window” trick ๐Ÿ™‚

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