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Pegman – Taking the Plunge

Here is my story for What Pegman Saw. I hope nobody minds, but while on my virtual tour of Wroclaw, Poland I found two pictures which fitted my story perfectly (and it took both to inspire my story). I won’t make a habit of it, I promise. There’s actually nothing in the rules which says it can only be one picture… ahem πŸ™‚

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Patryk stood on the ledge and stared down on the city he knew so well. Used to know so well.

The old shops, the tower blocks… never perfect, but familiar. Now it was all glass and steel, stark functionality making way to aesthetics.

Not that he missed the Soviet era – it had its faults to be sure – but you knew where you were. Keep your head down, don’t make a fuss. Now it was all very cut-throat. Too complicated for an old man like him.

So here he stood. On a ledge, lamenting the past. A past gone forever. He shuffled forward, a bead of sweat trickling down his cheek. Heart thumping, he stepped forward, plummeting towards the ground. As the pavement grew closer, he took a deep breath…

… and pulled the ripcord. β€œWoohoooooo!”

So his beloved Wroclaw had changed. Change with it! Have fun. You’re never too old!

 

  1. August 19, 2017 at 5:13 pm

    Excellent story. I like the photos you selected, too.

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    • August 20, 2017 at 6:11 am

      Thanks! I took a bit of a tour around the place.

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  2. August 19, 2017 at 6:56 pm

    I didn’t see that one coming at all. Good job. Oh, I don’t know about Poland, but I’m pretty sure it would be illegal to skydive off of a city rooftop in the U.S.

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    • August 20, 2017 at 6:12 am

      I imagine it’s, at the very least, frowned upon pretty much everywhere. I don’t think this chap cares, though!

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  3. August 19, 2017 at 7:23 pm

    I love it. Perfect!

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  4. August 19, 2017 at 7:47 pm

    I was prepared for a ‘splat’! I like your ending much better! πŸ™‚ The only thing constant is change! πŸ™‚

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  5. August 19, 2017 at 8:41 pm

    The happy ending was a nice surprise! I hope I can have that good of an attitude when I look back at the way the world has changed.

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    • August 20, 2017 at 6:14 am

      Yeah, me too.
      I though a happy ending would be a nice surprise πŸ™‚

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  6. August 19, 2017 at 10:46 pm

    Oh! Oh! and Oh! again. I love this and think using both pictures was not a problem but a plus! Kudos all the way around.

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    • August 20, 2017 at 6:17 am

      It took both to create the whole story in my mind so I thought it was important to use them both πŸ™‚
      I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  7. August 20, 2017 at 8:04 am

    Wonderful story. So wrong footed me. Yes I totally agree – if things don’t change they will stay as they are. So looked forward to a wps and I’ve not been disappointed. Well done πŸ‘ πŸ‘

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    • August 20, 2017 at 10:07 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! Yep, thankfully he had a parachute πŸ™‚

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  8. August 20, 2017 at 10:10 am

    Dear Ali,

    I certainly didn’t mind your choice of pics. Totally unexpected ending. πŸ˜€ I really enjoyed it.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • August 20, 2017 at 10:14 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      I wasn’t in the mood to have him splatter so I gave him a parachute, the lucky chap πŸ™‚
      I’m glad you liked it!
      Ali

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  9. August 20, 2017 at 1:29 pm

    That was a good one, Draliman. We already thought that this was the end, but completely relieved now πŸ˜€ Double Pawkiss πŸ™‚ ❀

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  10. August 20, 2017 at 1:52 pm

    It would seem very wrong of me to add an epilogue to this one where the chute ends up not deploying. After all, you never mentioned what happened after he pulled the ripcord!

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    • August 20, 2017 at 5:59 pm

      Aw, I was looking forward to the plummet and splatter…

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  11. August 20, 2017 at 3:00 pm

    I say the same. No matter your age it’s not over ’til it’s over”. Don’t crawl in a hole. Good writing with a great ending twist, Ali. πŸ™‚ — Suzanne

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    • August 20, 2017 at 6:01 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  12. August 20, 2017 at 9:57 pm

    Oh, that left me with a need to seriously reach out and slap you for such cruelty, then the ending slammed into my senses. Loved it! πŸ™‚ hehe! WooHooo! indeed!

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    • August 21, 2017 at 7:13 am

      It all came good in the end! I’m glad you liked it (and read the whole thing before slapping me) πŸ™‚

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      • August 21, 2017 at 12:00 pm

        I did. hehhe! giggles. loved the ending.

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      • August 21, 2017 at 12:48 pm

        πŸ™‚

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  13. August 21, 2017 at 12:18 pm

    What a cool story! I didn’t expect this ending πŸ™‚

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  14. August 21, 2017 at 2:06 pm

    Nicely done and great to subvert our expectations like that. Great tale πŸ™‚

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    • August 21, 2017 at 3:18 pm

      Thanks, I thought a little twist was in order. I didn’t want him dead!

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      • August 21, 2017 at 3:59 pm

        Quitr right – adapt or die they say and it’s lovely to see your MC doing the latter πŸ™‚

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  15. August 21, 2017 at 4:28 pm

    What a fun surprise ending! Exhilarating! 😁

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  16. August 22, 2017 at 4:48 pm

    You’re never too old to die XD

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  17. August 23, 2017 at 6:01 pm

    Love the pictures you chose and the ripping twist to your story. Wonderfully written!

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    • August 24, 2017 at 7:30 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it πŸ™‚ It’s quite fun to tour around looking for photos.

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  18. August 23, 2017 at 7:38 pm

    A wonderfully unexpected ending. Nicely done, Ali. πŸ™‚

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