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FF – Crescent Moon

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by Ted Strutz.

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Copyright Ted Strutz

 

The moon shone, a bright dot in the night sky. Faces upturned, the passengers oohed and aahed. Some took pictures. They’d never seen it so bright.

A small child, astronomy a favourite subject, insisted that the moon was in its crescent phase, but nobody listened. After all, there it was, a shining bright coin in the sky. No, now a shining bright plate. The passengers oohed and aahed.

As the moon grew from dot to coin to plate and more, the passengers grew scared. Some screamed. Some jumped overboard. It didn’t help. Nothing helped.

It wasn’t the moon.

The world burned.

 

  1. October 4, 2017 at 7:48 pm

    Actually, the very first thought I had when I saw the prompt this morning was “That’s no moon,” from the original Star Wars film. However, I decided to take things in a different direction.

    Decades ago, science fiction writer Larry Niven wrote a short story called “Inconstant Moon” that you might be interested in. It dealt with a very similar theme.

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    • October 4, 2017 at 8:02 pm

      Ah yes, their first site of the Death Star! I’ll check out that story, thanks.

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  2. October 4, 2017 at 7:52 pm

    Very scary! Great story!

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  3. October 4, 2017 at 8:01 pm

    It’s just the Vogons making place for a galactic highway…
    But the answer is 42 anyway

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    • October 4, 2017 at 8:03 pm

      Ha! As long as I don’t have to listen to any of their poetry, they can build wherever they like 🙂

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      • October 4, 2017 at 8:05 pm

        How about Paula Nancy Millstone Jennings then:

        The dead swans lay in the stagnant pool.
        They lay. They rotted. They turned
        Around occasionally.
        Bits of flesh dropped off them from
        Time to time.
        And sank into the pool’s mire.
        They also smelt a great deal.

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      • October 5, 2017 at 7:21 am

        Hey, that’s pretty good!

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  4. October 4, 2017 at 8:16 pm

    Now I’m all wet from jumping in the water and those swans I landed on were gross!!
    Great tale Ali.

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    • October 5, 2017 at 7:21 am

      I expect the impending doom was a welcome relief from rotting swans. I’m glad you liked it!

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  5. October 4, 2017 at 9:12 pm

    We’ll all go together, it’s probably what we collectively deserve.

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  6. October 4, 2017 at 9:45 pm

    Dear Ali,

    Imaginative and frightening. You have a knack for going in different directions and this is why I look forward to your quirky stories every week.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • October 5, 2017 at 7:22 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      I’m glad you liked it! Thanks for your lovely comment 🙂
      Ali

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  7. October 5, 2017 at 12:29 am

    I love the intelligent small child trying to tell everyone “It ain’t what you think.” Nicely done.

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    • October 5, 2017 at 7:23 am

      No-one listens to the children. I’m glad you liked it!

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  8. October 5, 2017 at 1:40 am

    Oops. Small mistake, big implications.

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    • October 5, 2017 at 12:01 pm

      Yep. Isn’t that often then way?

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  9. October 5, 2017 at 2:57 am

    was it a gift from north korea? i wonder. .

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    • October 5, 2017 at 12:02 pm

      I nearly mentioned that country but decided to leave it a bit more open. May even be an asteroid collision 🙂

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  10. October 5, 2017 at 3:59 am

    Was there, appearing simultaneously with this bright light, the sound of a trumpet blast?
    Well written, Ali. A nice touch for the full moon coming up tomorrow.

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    • October 5, 2017 at 12:02 pm

      There could have been… that’s another interpretation of what might be happening (I didn’t decide myself while writing).

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  11. October 5, 2017 at 4:18 am

    Nobody ever listens to kids when they should…
    Great take!

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    • October 5, 2017 at 12:03 pm

      They don’t, not that it would have made much difference in this instance 😦
      I’l glad you liked it!

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  12. October 5, 2017 at 4:30 am

    Awesome.

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  13. October 5, 2017 at 10:49 am

    Great build up to the final shocking end.

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    • October 5, 2017 at 12:07 pm

      Thanks, I took quite a while trying to build it up slowly 🙂

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  14. October 5, 2017 at 12:37 pm

    Yikes! A big cosmic fireball the size of the sun is coming to destroy earth!!!!

    I know! I’ll jump in the water! I won’t get burned that way!!!

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  15. October 5, 2017 at 1:16 pm

    It was nice to know you, bye bye!

    Click to read my FriFic!

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  16. October 5, 2017 at 1:31 pm

    Good and scary tale there. The meteor disquised as the moon, or a piece of space debri…or some weapon yet unknown. Love the mystery. 🙂

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    • October 5, 2017 at 4:00 pm

      I don’t even know myself, thought I’d leave it entirely open. I’m glad you liked it!

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  17. October 5, 2017 at 2:22 pm

    What a chilling twist at the end! Great story!

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    • October 5, 2017 at 4:01 pm

      Thanks! It did go downhill rather fast 🙂

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  18. October 5, 2017 at 3:43 pm

    Now that’s scary, Ali. I’ll probably remember this every time I look at the moon now. Good writing. 🙂 — Suzanne

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    • October 5, 2017 at 4:01 pm

      Ooh noo! I hope I haven’t spoilt the beauty for you, keeping an eye on it to see if its getting bigger…
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  19. October 5, 2017 at 10:38 pm

    Not that listening to the child would have given them enough time to do something about it, but I’m still angry that they didn’t. Interesting take on the prompt – and I had the same “that’s no moon” reaction as James when reading it!

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    • October 6, 2017 at 6:36 am

      Funnily enough, despite having watched Star Wars a hundred million times and my story featuring a moon which isn’t a moon, it never occurred to me 🙂
      No-one ever listens to the children 😦

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      • October 6, 2017 at 12:12 pm

        Lucky that you have other Star Wars fans among your readers to point out your unconscious reference. 🙂

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  20. October 6, 2017 at 8:06 am

    Holey Cowkittiness, that was scary, Draliman…never expected anything like that! Pawkisses for a Happy firefree Weekend 🙂 ❤

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    • October 6, 2017 at 11:50 am

      It was unexpectedly scary ending given my recent humour stories 🙂

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  21. October 6, 2017 at 8:37 am

    That was a scary ending, indeed.
    Creative writing at its best! 🙂

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    • October 6, 2017 at 11:51 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it 🙂

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  22. October 6, 2017 at 10:09 am

    Ooops! It wasn’t a moon after all. Great story twist, Ali. 🙂

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    • October 6, 2017 at 11:51 am

      Nope, impending doom instead. I’m glad you liked it!

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  23. October 6, 2017 at 1:36 pm

    No one ever listens to children.
    Great story, may be prophetic. It can happen exactly like you describe 😦

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    • October 6, 2017 at 4:34 pm

      They don’t. Let’s hope it’s not prophetic 😦
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  24. October 6, 2017 at 3:52 pm

    A horror moon. Good story, kept me waiting for more.

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  25. October 6, 2017 at 5:52 pm

    Yikes! That story sure did go there!

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  26. October 6, 2017 at 10:18 pm

    That took me by surprise, as I surely thought it was the moon.

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  27. October 7, 2017 at 12:54 pm

    Oh no. Aliens? An asteroid? Or something else. From now on, I’ll check my moon phase calendar!

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    • October 7, 2017 at 4:28 pm

      I don’t even know myself! Something fatal 😦
      At least if you know it’s not the moon you’ll have a few seconds to get your affairs in order 🙂

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  28. October 8, 2017 at 6:24 am

    A bit like my story with a non-moon, so I can relate to it 🙂

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    • October 8, 2017 at 4:02 pm

      It is, I just read it 🙂 Both our stories could have been caused by aliens.

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  29. October 9, 2017 at 11:45 am
  30. October 9, 2017 at 1:55 pm

    Always listen to the kiddiewinks. They know best when it comes to astronomy. I hope s/he got away safe.

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    • October 9, 2017 at 4:43 pm

      Sadly everyone on Earth died in a blazing inferno. But at least the kid saw it coming 🙂

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      • October 10, 2017 at 11:23 am

        Oh no, that’s even worse, so see your fate. Surely it’s better just to be blasted to smithereens with no foreknowledge.

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      • October 10, 2017 at 11:32 am

        I certainly don’t want to see it coming.

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  31. October 10, 2017 at 9:32 am

    Brilliant ending! (Couldn’t resist the pun. 😜) I can imagine us facing the end of the world and taking lots of pictures of the rapidly approaching asteroid/missile/whatever the heck it is with our smartphones. I mean, what else should we be doing as we await our demise?

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    • October 10, 2017 at 11:30 am

      It would be a real shame if the world ended and we didn’t get to put it on Instagram 🙂

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  32. October 26, 2017 at 3:48 pm

    Love the visual imagery you manage to conjure up through your words 👏

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    • October 27, 2017 at 6:52 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!

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