Friday Fictioneers – Flicker
Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was also supplied by our hostess!
To read this week’s other stories, click on the blue froggy.
Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
Samson looked up at the lights in the window and reached for his walkie-talkie.
“They’re flickering, man.”
“But you can’t hear anything?”
“Nope. All quiet.”
“Good.”
“I’m coming down.”
He trudged down to the basement. “I told you we should’a used car batteries,” he grumbled.
“D’ya know how much they cost? It’s an old building. Dodgy electrics. It’ll be fine.” Mason walked over to the table and looked at the man strapped there.
“So, snitch, let’s try this again, shall we? Who’s your contact?”
He twisted a knob and the man screamed, his back arching. Upstairs, the lights flickered.
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Oh boy, hope the buildings dodgy electrics doesn’t go up in …
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“The fire was caused by a short-circuiting mob victim…”
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It’s a poor pass when you can’t even get the right infrastructure to do a bit of torture: whatever is the world coming to?
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They ought to complain to the council…
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Their guest had better hope they haven’t paid their electricity bill 🙂
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That would be a lucky escape!
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Wow, Ali, that was dark. Either their electric wil go off or it’ll surge and kill the guy. Either could happen here. Our electric is off right now. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Either is a possibility for sure! Maybe they should have chosen a more modern building.
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Dear Ali,
Electrifying ending. I’m sure the victim is hoping for a power outage. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
Thanks! With those electrics, the victim may be in luck.
Ali
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My spine tingles – really good.
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Thanks! I’m sure they’re victim’s spine is tingling too 🙂
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Yowch!
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Bzzzt 🙂
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Hey, stop that!
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🙂
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Eee, this is dark. Let’s hope the circuit breaker (is that the right word?) breaks down. Great take!
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The circuit breaker is probably already shorted out with paper clips. But you never know, it might still blow!
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Grim. Police stations nowadays! All those budget cuts.
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Ha, I wasn’t thinking police station (I guess you got that from “snitch”) – I wish I had, that’s even better than mobsters 🙂
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Whoop! That was interesting! 🙂 Electrifying.. 😛
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Ha 🙂
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As long as the cable works, no one will notice. You have to know what’s important in this world.
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As long as the latest reality show keeps going…
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Hope the lights go out, and the guy survives.
Your story made me hold my breath.
It was shocking (sorry, I really tried to avoid the pun, but it really DID shock me).
Brilliant narration, as always.
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There’s every chance the electrics will give out, I reckon.
Getting more rare these days, but “Dark Ali” is still escaping on occasion for stories such as this 🙂
I’m glad you liked it!
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I like your moniker!
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This reminded me of the first electric chair and how long it took for the contraption to do its job. Very dark story!
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If it’s William Kemmler you’re referring to, YEEKS! and urgh. (I just looked him up on the Google.)
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Oh, I love it, another evil minded vision for Bay-Windows! I’m in good company! Poor guy, getting all lit up like that. Nasty, nasty torture. Excellent!
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Mine’s almost tame compared to your wonderful story (though yours had a nice bit of humour mixed in!).
I’m glad you liked it!
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Blimey, that gave me quite a shock! Great read.
Rosey Pinkerton’s blog
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I’m glad you liked it! It gave their victim quite a shock too 🙂
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Ouch! that hurts.. what are they trying to do?
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They’re trying to torture the name of his contact out of him 🙂
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A little shock therapy never hurt anyone…
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I hear it can be quite therapeutic! Maybe you could get Buster to try it out…
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A very dark turn this week! Good dialogue, and you saved the “reveal” for the end–wicked satisfaction for the reader. Well done.
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I don’t like to give the game away too early! I’m glad you liked my dark little tale.
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A poor workman blames his tools. Very dark indeed!
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Indeed. I’m willing to bet neither is a qualified electrician 🙂
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Gahhhhh!! Will he tell?
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I would if I were him 🙂
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Loved your ending, 🙂
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Thanks!
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I already mistrust flickering lights because of Weeping Angels…now I have to worry about torture too! But I wonder…who is on what side here? Good or bad?
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It’s a good job when I was a kid there weren’t any Weeping Angels – the Daleks scared me but they’re tame in comparison!
I was thinking mobsters, but Mick Lively had a great theory – these guys could be bad cops in the basement of a police station, trying to get information by any means necessary…
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Ouch!!
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To say the least!
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I wish he would just tell them already!
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Yeah, this zapping is getting old. There’s people upstairs trying to watch TV 🙂
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LOL
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Such a marvelous story for my return!
I’m baaaaack! Missed your stories.
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I also missed you!!
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I missed you too 🙂
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I’m glad you liked it! I wondered where you were, you’ve been gone ages. It’s good to see you back 🙂
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you’ve my email. please use it next time. Appreciated.
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Oh, creepy! I don’t want to live in this building. The basement was a good place to stage this and another reason why I’m not going near this building.
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Dark deeds always take place in the basement 🙂
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I’m officially hoping the power goes out and these guys are caught when someone comes to fix it. 🙂
janet
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They’ll be caught red-handed trying to hotwire the fusebox 🙂
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You should look up the Tucker Telephone sometime. It was a form of torture used in an Arkansas prison. Grisly tale, Ali.
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I did a Google. Yeeks 😦
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What an incredibly dark story, Ali! I hope the electricity shorts out before they kill their victim.
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Their victim hopes so too! I’m on the fence 🙂
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Well done!
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Thanks!
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